Okay the story is very good I did enjoy it I do like the plot line I like how it picks up right after exams I like the character development I do wish it was a lot longer I hope you come back make a part 2 and keep up the good work
I like the story but truthfully he shouldn't just blurred out his entire history. To the hokage, Yes, he can tell him, but he shouldn't be telling team all his secrets, they don't share with him. Why should he share with them and quite frankly, he needs to be a bit more selfish. He's overly altruistic. In other words, a floor mat for the village.
I'm sorry to point this out. I really do like this one, but Hinata Not liking. Naruto is the mainstream at this point hundreds of fan fictions have her not hooking up with a Naruto, and if anyone who wants to argue I'm not trying to Rile people up But please go look at the number of fan fictions that pit Hinata against Naruto, as opposed to hooking them up. He hooks up with his own mother. More often than Hinata hell, The Times he hooks up with an her, at least half of my rap right out smut.
I apologize, but dragging so much of dragon ball in To Naruto is ridiculous. I don't mind Naruto being a saying. I don't mind changing Canon of military but dragon. So many elements from one into the other. I mean fusion, really? You're gonna use fusion. He hasn't even become super saiyan. And they're already talking about fusion buddies. And they're going to have it be sasgay oh hell no.
Hey, super powerful dragon. How about making him a sayain without black hair? Give him another hair color they always change his hair color to black in any cross overs. If they've got just any saiyan blood, they change their hair. Black Trunks doesn't have black hair. Why can't we have more without black hair?
This is just one of my paves. Everybody wants to sayans to have black hair even though it's the most common hair color just like it's the most common hair color of humans. Why the hell does Naruto always have to have his hair changed into black? I don't necessarily care for the blonde hair. I like the idea of I'm having red hair but there's so many that changes hair black. Whether he's got Sayan, or he's kryptonian. Or he's a Uchia descendant that always wants to change his hair black and I just don't get it. I mean, trunks was half-breed, but his hair was not black.
I am sorry but during the torture sence the 9 tails not saying or doing anything when they can sense bad intentions is stupid. Should have warned Naruto before the man got there. Also the 9 tails could have gave him a powerup or something to kill the guy. There is a reason why the 1 tails could kill ambu probably even the kazikage when while gara was a child and why he never tried to kill him and instead sent assassin's. Now u are basically saying a bijuu that is probably 50* more powerful and is willing to assist their container way more would let this happen? Idk seems like the story was not thought through.
