Rate us on Letterboxd!! • Luca Pizzoleo is an award-winning independent writer and director known for his acclaimed short films. His filmography includes 'In the Valley of the Moon,' a viral short that captivated audiences worldwide, amassing over 10 million views across all social media platforms. He's also known for his dark comedy 'The Tragic Death of a Frenchman' and his upcoming short film, ' OCD.' His remarkable achievements have earned him numerous accolades and features in prestigious publications like Basic Magazine and The New York Times.
this is INSANELY good, felt so much longer than ~30 mins in the best way- its hard to make comedy like this really work the entire time but you guys did it fantastically. so glad i stumbled across a trailer for this on tiktok!
What a great short film and great actings too,, especially for the main actor,, and this is one of the outstanding crime drama short film i ever watching so far,, 9.8/10
Back about year later, the shots in this short film are sub par. Not the best, it captures one thing at a time, shots should have multiple things happening at once unless it’s an insert, this gives the audience the chance to settle into the setting and discover new things. And the dialogue is boring and almost predictable. People are praising the “what do you shoot?” Dialogue exchange, but it isn’t objectively good because it accomplishes nothing for the story and we learn nothing new about the characters either. What I have noted is what all dialogue conversations should strive for. One last thing about the dialogue is that it seems to go like this “question?” “Answer” “question?” “Answer” too predictable. Dialogue should be more interesting than this. Give the audience 2+2. Never 4.
Thanks for coming back after a year! Happy to hear that we’ve stayed in your mind for that long. On your “advice” especially on the “portraits” line, I’m not sure if you’re aware of foreshadowing as the line was to reveal who Thomas is to Mark. With that being said, I in no way believe our film is perfect and we’ve grown quite a bit since this film was made, but I respectfully disagree with you and wish you the best of luck, especially if you ever tackle a project of your own!
@@conical3333 Hey there, happy to chat, as stated previously in regard to your criticism about dialogue. Dialogue can serve different purposes, including establishing character, tone, and context. The "what do you shoot?" exchange might seem simple, but it was included to set tensions, and set up thematic elements subtly. Sometimes, it’s about building atmosphere or showing character interactions naturally, and as I strived to make this feel like a natural conversation, just like in a real life, it often follows a question and answer format. Additionally, not every piece of dialogue needs to be cryptic or complex to be engaging. Lastly, in reference to the cinematography, it can come down to taste and preference. What you like may not be what I like and that’s the beauty of film and art.
@@lucapizzoleo You are right about a few things. But... dialogue (if you want it to be great) has to always be analytical. If it becomes complex or cryptic while also sounding realistic than you have amazing dialogue. Quentin Tarantino does an incredible job of this, so does Edward Yang. The "what do you shoot" scene could be considered realistic but the problem is that it comes off as redundant, overly practical and fake, it feels artificial because "what do you shoot" feels like it was written just to set up the next line, not written as a genuine question (though that might just be me), additionally. the conversation is just facts, facts, facts back and forth with slight hidden meaning behind one or two lines. If it had some analytical dialogue in it, it would be more interesting. Great dialogue always leans toward analytical and great dialogue works like a great conversation in real life----not a boring one with the same energy as "hows the weather?" "it says its gonna be sunny". Keep in mind I say all this with as much respect as possible, and this is to help you grow as a writer. watch this incredible video a few times on the way dialogue works and how it connects to real life: ru-vid.com/video/%D0%B2%D0%B8%D0%B4%D0%B5%D0%BE-y873yinIsUk.html .
@@conical3333 I think we can agree to disagree on the quality of the portraits line, you might find it to be a disingenuous response or set up but plenty of people including myself who disagree with you. Also, I appreciate you wanting to share advice however your initial comment doesn’t strike me as just constructive criticism. The fact you came back to our short after a year to leave a comment calling almost every aspect of our film “sub-par” especially when you don’t have any films of your own comes across to me as malicious. But clearly you seem like such an expert with so much knowledge so I hope you put it to use and make a film of your own one day. And make sure if you get any comments from some random RU-vid account who posts gmod videos be sure to listen to their advice like gospel. Lastly, want to reiterate I don’t see my work as perfect, in fact I think it’s far from it. However, I’m a young filmmaker who puts my work out there and is growing every day. As a filmmaker that’s all you can do. Thanks again for watching our film we appreciate you coming back, wish you all the best and good luck!
God i can't wait. You guy's getting a talent like Steven Ogg really goes to show that you are going places and is a testement to the talent of all of you guys.
the film is amazing loved it alot i just think how olivier died at the end is cliche and lous pount of view of how ned killed him other than that keep up the good work
