How to edit out the "to be" verbs in the following paragraph: The British ocean liner Titanic was a large ship that thought to be unsinkable. The Titanic made its first in 1912. It was scheduled to sail from England to New York The ship was about 1,600 miles from New York when it collided with an iceberg in the North Atlantic. This collision caused a gash 300 feet long in the ship's hull. It took two hours and forty minutes for the Titanic to sink. The worst part was that there were not enough lifeboats for everyone. Tragically, about 1,400 people died that night. Due to many lives lost, the sinking of the Titanic is considered to be the deadliest peacetime, maritime disaster in modern history. The Titanic has undoubtedly become one of the most famous ships in history. Their memory is kept alive by numerous books, folk songs, movies, exhibits, and memorials.
How to edit out the "to be" verbs in the following paragraph: The British ocean liner Titanic was a large ship that thought to be unsinkable. The Titanic made its first in 1912. It was scheduled to sail from England to New York The ship was about 1,600 miles from New York when it collided with an iceberg in the North Atlantic. This collision caused a gash 300 feet long in the ship's hull. It took two hours and forty minutes for the Titanic to sink. The worst part was that there were not enough lifeboats for everyone. Tragically, about 1,400 people died that night. Due to many lives lost, the sinking of the Titanic is considered to be the deadliest peacetime, maritime disaster in modern history. The Titanic has undoubtedly become one of the most famous ships in history. Their memory is kept alive by numerous books, folk songs, movies, exhibits, and memorials.
Also, it helps to set an element to your verbs and adjectives. For example, if you have a bitter or callous person - use ice as a verb. "Frozen, Glacier, Winterized, Blizzard of, Snowy". Of course, I write for Toshiro Hitsugaya so my opinion is bias.
A descriptive essay is the type of essay that illustrates, summarizes, or paints a picture in the mind of the reader by the use of words. Descriptive essays employ the power of language and all the 5 human senses to make something feel like it is real. They make the reader feel like they have been to and have seen certain places, heard new things, touched different texture, tasted different flavors, and have smelled different smells. Continue reading at coursescholars.com/descriptive-essay/
Robin, I would like you to add more better descriptive writing teaching videos to your website for other people and me to improve the way we write descriptively.
Robin, I would like to learn how to write descriptively better than I do so currently. Would you please email me more samples of your better descriptive writing? I want a good idea how to do that.
