Ehm... your grammar is wrong i'll help you fix it 0:57 don't use "it" because it's a living object you should use "she" but in this case there's two people so you need to use "they" Example: "it's not here" = it " where is she?" = she " they are pretty" = they So you need to use "why did they disappear?" 1:06 if there's more than 1 you need to put "s" in the back Example: "our mothers are not here" " they're my friends" So you need to use "hi hashiras" 1:19 this one don't need an explaination since almost anyone can tell it's wrong It's supposed to be "tanjiro-kun is very cute!" Don't translate the word one-by-one translate it all as one phrase 1:59 ok so sanemi says "why do i" but it's not just him that reacts to tanjiro so it's supposed to be "why do we" Example: "we are not home yet" " where are we?" The phrase "It's a waste of my time" was fine but the right one was " this is wasting my time" So you get the phrase " why do we have to react to him? It's wasting my time" 2:17 your grammar was fine here but i wan't to make obanai act like he would do in the show Well according to me obanai should've said "i'ma skin you alive kamado..." but it's fine :) 3:34 again don't translate the word one-by-one It's supposed to be "tanjiro-kun's smile is sweet!" 3:37 don't use "and" use "but" i'll fix the word and make it more effective "His eyes are familliar but i don't know who it is" 4:03 the word "sama" if used in a woman it'll translate to "lady" and if used in a man it'll translate to "lord" Example: tamayo-sama translate to lady tamayo Tengen-sama translate to lord tengen So i think in this case "uzui-san..." will work better Btw if you use "san" you need to use their surname not their first name (if you want it to be formal, but if they are friends you can use their first name) 5:09 in indonesian "that's just a boy" translate to "itu hanya anak laki-laki" so you need to use " kick his a*s!" (To be more into character since sanemi acts like that ) 5:13 use "she" not "he" and use "mad" not "angry" 16:58 to be more effective use the word "decapitate" So you'll get " damn it i'll decapitate him" Little tips for the reaction video!! 1. Make the characters interact with eachother so it'll be less boring 2. Make them as canon as possible unless you have a headcanon of their personality ect 3. Don't just put the same reaction all over again But overall it's nice! I hope my tips will make you improve! Don't forget to take a rest!
