author nim i really adore your fanfics theme and everything . but one thing that bugs me a lot is your writing style.... it would be better if you write in a more normal style my point is that don't try to make everything obvious or too quirky i am sorry if it offended u but i just wanted to share my opinion, i am a writer myself and i used to face this problem, now if i read my previous works it sure is cringe ,.having a more mature writing style will make it appealing to the viewers i am just sharing my opinion BTW nice fanfic>>>>>>>
For example:- Sunghoon's introduction dialogue could've been better if it was:- "Hey everyone I am park sunghoon hope we'll get well together with each other" It seems to embrace the personality of the character I hope it's clear
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