I'm writing about how quitting football impacted me. It was never something i wanted to do but was expected of me because my older brothers played. How failing to enjoy it I was unable to fit into display the attribute of masculinity that it represented to my family. Transition that into being black and how specifically in the black community Hypermasculinity is perceived as a necessity to even be perceived as black. I was forced to choose between self-expression or my community's acceptance. so I hid everything, all my hobbies, and changed the way I acted. It wasn't until I started exploring hobbies even stereotypically feminine ones that I discovered what I enjoyed. I explained that through the experimentation of my hair, I found how important the self-expression I wasn't always allowed to have is. Lastly, now I'm actively trying to create spaces in the clubs I am president of. Using my responsibility and power to provide things for others I didn't have. And moving forward in life onto a college campus I wish to create and be a part of the spaces, focused on the uplifting and encouragement of students. Is this a good idea? I have no clue what weight I should give each topic or what certain things I need to make sure to highlight and include! please help 😅
@@Nickma21 depends on what your writing about. when i read it, it seems a bit first-drafty if you get what im saying. i think you need to get a better hook. this is my first sentence. Getting home from football practice, I headed to the kitchen. Noticing the dirty bowls in the sink, the unplugged and lidless crockpot, and one bowl on the counter, I thought “Had they already eaten?” my essay is about how i always felt alone blah blah and how the idea of something made me realize that i am not. now if i wrote mine like yours, mine would be worse, but because I am making it so it is kind of a mystery, it makes the admissions officer want to read it. now i’m a high school senior so take my advice with a grain of salt, you’ll do well either way. that is just my thinking when it comes to essays
Hello Mr. Sawyer! My original idea was to write about my photo album / phototaking on my iPhone, connecting it to topics like appreciating smaller moments in life, being resourceful with limited technology (like features on the iPhone vs actual cameras), and striving, but not stressing over, success. I was thinking of making it a montage-like essay where I go through specific photos and the moments they were taken in (family, my robotics passion, food, etc.). My counselors think it may work if executed correctly. I'm planning to go into mech engineering. Is this a topic I should move forward with? Thank you!
I'm writing about theater but specifically regarding my experience with lighting and connecting it with my mental health and adventurous personality. My counselors seem to like the idea based on my first draft. I plan to study psychology. Do you think it's okay?
i’m a high school senior but if executed correctly sounds like a fantastic idea. make sure to give examples tho. you can’t js say “my mental health was bad” you have to explain what it felt like n how you overcame it
@@cl0ds1re one of my advisors told us that if we are mentioning bad mental health to keep it brief and have it be only at the beginning of your essay. This way you'll have room to talk about your growth and the end of your essay will be more hopeful and have a better impact on admissions.
I want to major in pharmaceutical sciences. But I cannot engage in laboratory research and works unless I have a university degree. What kind of activities should I engage in please?
