Slow the tempo, adjust your volumes so you don't swallow the lyrics up in tinny noise, boost the base and a harder drop before the bridges final drop to the chorus. The audio is there and it could slap! , it just needs a little refinement.
Hello GTTG, I've made a LOUDER version for your remix and i hope u don't delete it, I'm gonna post it right now with link to this vid, I hope u don't get mad 'bout this :D