[Ebrugh Report 12] It Came From The Mines (Full Story) 

I appreciate you letting me narrate your story, brother! Glad I did well on this one! ❤

@@Viidith22 You really did

@@DaemonC Thanks, perhaps you'll enjoy the others in the "Ebrugh-Universe" :D

Yeah and who ever wrote it was straight up killin this shit!

@@nomansgoddess Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it =)

Yes the best writers 😁

Gotchu fam ❤

From the story content itself, was the part that you liked most? I might do more in future Ebrugh Reports with stuff that people found interesting =)

Thank you my dear traveler for joining me on this dark road. ❤

@@Viidith22 I've been finding that my likes on videos are removed from the videos but my comments are still here and there so I went to my 5000+ likes videos and videos like this one is in my list so why are they not reflected on this video it makes no sense my friend

Hopefully you will enjoy the sequel as well, it will be read by viidith next month, keep an eye out for it ;)

@@storieswithstyle OH GOD YES!!!! Are you the author by any chance?

@@Maatkara1000 Yes, I write the Ebrugh Reports :) I am very lucky that viidith reads them =)

@@storieswithstyle oh I can't wait for the second part of this story!! Please keep on writing, you're doing a terrific job!!!

@@storieswithstyle could you please tell me the name of the squeal plus your other stories please? Really enjoyed this one, you guys make a great team!

Unfortunately, it got lost in translation :( She was more childlike in the original language, but I did not manage to translate it well. I don't have an editor for stuff like that, sorry :(

@@storieswithstyle No need to apologize. No harm, no foul.

My thoughts as well. His voice is refreshing.

He's excellent.

I was just about to comment that XD lol

Mushishi is really good. I remember this particular episode. Ah, the nostalgia...

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Thanks =) The "sequel" to this (and Report 10 as well) is already almost finalized, hopefully you will enjoy that one as well =)

Except the kid. That part is shoddy as fuck.

@@betasector Yeah, it is a translation problem, in German she sounds very "young child-ish", but I am not a good enough English speaker to translate that well =( An editor would have probably helped :D

@@storieswithstyle she would be still too elaborate, I don't believe such a small child would talk like that. But okay, I guess. It was okay otherwise.

Don’t need to be such a jerk. You are in no position to criticize what is a translation issue.

Happy to help fam ❤

Glad you enjoy!

Gotchu fammm

Thanks for the comments on the story! I understand your concerns about the girl. When I translated it, I think I chose the wrong words in the translation here. I also talk about this in my commentary on this story. Your second point is also well made! Bombing the town was more of a plan to close off the mines and the other people that started to change were the target of a possible bombing in the end. You are correct, I should have made this learer. I think for the infection, they did test it and found nothing, which I tried to imply by having a specialist there. Thank you again for the criticism, I get too little =) Glad you enjoyed the atmosphere, though =)

@@storieswithstyle You are the author? This is a common problem when a very literate person writes dialogue for children. The fact that English is not your native tongue only serves to amplify the problem. You are doing your best to convey information with precise language, but children do not SPEAK with precise language. Their vocabulary is greatly restricted and very fuzzy. A child young enough not to know how to tell time - 7 or younger, will have a greatly limited vocabulary, and is likely to speak using far more similes comparing against basic things in their life thus a rhino may become "like a big horse with hard skin" for example. I felt as though you were trying hard to imply that the specialist was brutally lacking in compassion, hence his total lack of guilt about all the other children killed by the bomb, but without a clear framework for WHY he made that decision, it simply came across as overly stereotyped Soviet coldness, contradicted with the rescue of the girl. As an author myself, I appreciate only too well the value of feedback. I'd rather receive (constructive) negative critique that spurs me to improve in future tales, than sycophantic "Love its" that provide no useful detail about what people specifically appreciate. I find it all too easy when writing, to write as though the reader knows what I know (about the story world) when telling a story. That's why I find it useful to leave it a while (a few days to a week minimum) before doing my final proof. You clearly have skill at world building - now you simply need to step outside yourself, and dot your is and cross your ts. Good luck!

@@Martial-Mat Thnk you man, really appreciate it =)

@@storieswithstyle My pleasure.

@@Martial-Mat If you find things like these in other Reports, I would appreciate you feedback as well! Have a nice weekend! =)

That is an interesting idea! I have to admit, that the newest Ebrugh Report I am planning is dealing with exactly that. It is gonna be "Ebrugh-Report 16: The Hole". I tend to revisit "entities/happenings" in the reports. An example [Spoilers]: Ebrugh Report 11 and 21 have the same entity.

Hi, I know it has been some time, but "Ebrigh Report 14: My village was Haunted by God"(now also on this channel) takles exactly that scenario. =)

SLIGHT, VERY VAGUE SPOILER * * * * * * * * * Having listened to "My Village was Haunted by God", the answer is... not much better! :D The deep claims all.

@@TheAshHeritor Not exactly, but very close. =) The deep does not "act randomly" but on the contrary very selectively (in parenthesis because not completely true and might spoil too much if I got into more detail). =) But I am not gonna say more to not ruin the fun. ;)

@@storieswithstyle Indeed, very true. It does seem to let certain people go. Which is very interesting. As a fellow writer of horror, mad props on your stories, all of the ones I have heard have been very good!

Thanks for notifying me, the link should be fixed soon! You can also get links to all reports I have published on r/EbrughReports . Hope this helps! =)

Im sure everybody knows this. Although, there's quite alot of commenters who can't spell and their grammer sucks! I take it they probably don't read and never paid attention in school or even finished school? That's why they watch RU-vid. LOL.😆

Well, the first thing she says is that it had nothing to do with radiation and then she tries to assure herself that it did to make her feel more "safe". At least that was the inrention. What part did not make sense other than that? Might re-write those parts should I ever edit the story again, so I would be happy to hear your other criticisms. All the best! =)

@@storieswithstyle that was how I interpreted what she said as well, since she said nothing to do with radiation and then it sounded like she was trying to reassure herself and say maybe there really was radiation and the rocks were blocking the readings or something along those lines. Great story at any rate!! Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us and giving us a heads up about both your upcoming story and a couple past stories. I had been wondering what was with report 12 in the title until you explained a bit in another post, and now I'd like to check out the detectives'other stories. I'm very much in appreciation of you letting Viidith share this story of yours with us in the creepypasta-o-sphere ;)

@@marlenaneedham3818 Yes, that is what was intended, though I get why it might have been misinterpreted =D I am glad you like the others =) I will probably let the detective rest for a while (though I am thinking about doing a story with Itrushka that happened more recently). The next story the Deep is in will therefore feature different protagonists. =) I am very glad viidith shares these, he is such a talent =)

@@storieswithstyle excellent, thanks for letting me know about your next story. I will give it a listen!

As a later story revealed, no it would have not.

Don't worry, she will reappear in the future, but grown up. ;)

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