George Lucas' Original Treatment for The Star Wars 

reads like a first draft overview. details, characters and dialogue to be developed. amazing to see how it was improved upon.

The first treatment was actually about CJ Thorpe. Padawan Learner. And was sort of written like a chronicle called the Journal of the Whills.

Definitely not the worst treatment I've read. When you get down to it, it's the same story beats of Akira Kurosawa films and effectively what we got with the whole of the OT. Execution is everything in filmmaking.

That example made me think about whether it’s better to start with a world that you set your story in, like a story that can only happen in this world. Or a start with the story you want to tell and how to create a world around that. Sure it depends somewhat on personal preferences but can you, with your experience, comment on that? Are there types of stories, like space opera, that better lend to one approach over the other or is there one universal way to write any story. Or rather one way most suited for how the individual person writing the story and now has to find readers that like that kind of story? What would you say is the “best” starting point to bring these different factors in creation (world building, characters, plot) and reception (verisimilitude, investment, engaging) together in a best practice approach. For starting writers or how this evolves for more experienced ones. I guess the final part is always more revision and fine tuning but how can one pick a start point that has more success of cutting extra work in the end by choosing a good point to start? Thank you for the video, interesting example. 300 subs getting closer, keep it up!

Strong "The Hidden Fortress" vibes, eh?

I find you a bit harsh. It's a solid first draft. It needed a lot of work for sure, especially with the characters, but so does any first draft and most of the ideas that would make up Star Wars are already there. I can tell Lucas had an innate sense of storytelling if he wrote this before discovering Campbell. To answer your questions at the end, this was supposed to part 1 of a trilogy (hence the "the end?"). It's established at the start the Empire are the bad guys and they have a main battle station that dwarf all the others. The goal to have it destroyed eventually is kind of obvious (and by the way, the destruction of the Death Star was supposed to be the grand finale of the trilogy, Lucas changed that because he was afraid he would never get the chance to make more than one movie). Also, regarding dialogue, despite what people say, there isn't a single screenwriter who wrote more iconic lines than Lucas. He's on a league of his own. People giving him a hard time for the a few terrible lines is kind of unfair. It's like saying Tom Brady isn't a great quarterback because he gets sacked sometimes. That being said, I love your conclusion. It's very optimistic, something we all need. Thank you for that! Let's hope one of us here writes the next Star Wars!

water planet instead of dessert planet.... then put a different "flavor" on the spice... yup! Definitely an initial budding branch off Dune.

this made me laugh. Not at G. Lucas because that would be foolish. It's highly motivating. The very least I'm happy to know that we share all the sentiments about the movie: painful awkward dialogues included.

Of course the urban legend (fact?) Is that Marcia Lucas edited SW, that it was almost unwatchable untill she worked her magic. Make of that what you will.

Whats sad is this is a masterpiece compared to the great wokening of Star Trek, Star Wars and Marvel, the whole identity politics over good story telling that appears to be infecting everything these days. How these "writers" continue to get work is truely mind blowing..😮😮😮