How to Line Edit | Editing Your Writing #1!

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Thank you to the rad folks who sent in work, if I didn't get to yours in this video, I'll try to in a later one. Please be respectful of the work submitted in the comments!
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1:58 - Excerpt #1: filters, concrete detail, controlling POV, clarity
18:27 - Excerpt #2: familiar phrases, economy
24:11 - Excerpt #3: unique verbs, specific detail, melodrama
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@morganburnham3391 3 года назад

small thought here - i find it so fascinating how in the third excerpt, shaelin automatically assumed the main character was male while i was envisioning a female the entire time. really shows the differences in how people may perceive your work and the language you use without clarification.

@fkdjdjcmckdjdjf3728 3 года назад

this could be a genre thing- all i see on writertube is YA fiction work, so I tend to assume that a female is being referred to

@myownbravado 3 года назад

I also thought that was interesting! I also assumed female, too, and I’m not sure why I thought that. Maybe because I automatically think weddings are more significant for women? Even though the narrator already said the wedding itself was insignificant. While I don’t necessarily thing gender matters, it’s a good reminder that readers are going to assume it if they aren’t told in some way.

@spiralsun1 3 года назад

Gender. 😐🤷‍♀️

@bhavikasicka7871 2 года назад

I also thought it was a woman, who was being compared to the "haughty women wearing Valentino and carrying Chanel" instead of to the "men dressed in Burberry suits" who were holding these women, but the fault lies with the author's vague writing ("Mom would say that I could have been one of them" doesn't specify who the "them" is, but if it did, it could have revealed the narrator's gender.)

@Z_pixel Год назад

@@bhavikasicka7871 I thought they were a man until this scene came up

@vinco66613 3 года назад

Line editing is the most satisfying thing since Q-Tips.

@michaelcoetzee4344 3 года назад

Agreed

@arthuraydin8731 2 года назад

I realize I'm quite randomly asking but does anybody know a good place to stream new series online ?

@emersoncaspian8726 2 года назад

@Arthur Aydin Flixportal xD

@arthuraydin8731 2 года назад

@Emerson Caspian Thank you, signed up and it seems to work =) Appreciate it !!

@emersoncaspian8726 2 года назад

@Arthur Aydin happy to help =)

@augusthawley5504 3 года назад

The simile to a verb trick just solved all my problems??

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

it is *life changing*

@billyalarie929 3 года назад

@@ShaelinWrites so i just realized i never finished watching this thing, aaaaaaaand i just got to that part, aaaaaaaaaaaand is it hyperbole to say r e l i g i o u s e x p e r i e n c e ? no. i genuinely think not.

@guardianfish7718 2 месяца назад

If only it worked so well in other languages too

@jacobfranklin730 3 года назад

shaelin explaining how we look like birds when we take off our jackets is not the content i expected, but it's the content i needed

@th3logician Год назад

“Verbs are a religious experience” The subtle genius of Shaelin’s writing ability is just incredible.

@lechelechuza6852 3 года назад

Shaelin can you please do a video on putting clues in your writing, say you're writing a very long complicated book series and you need to put clues in all of your books to tie them together. How do I do that? ✨

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

That's a cool topic, thanks for the suggestion!

@kal-muzel875 3 года назад

Yesss I need

@michaelcoetzee4344 3 года назад

I'd love to have someone put it into words. I edit and proofread a lot of books and sometimes I refer your videos to the authors. This topic would be really helpful for authors that try to write dramatic reveals, but it just ends up feeling disconnected from the plot.

@billyalarie929 3 года назад

does this include foreshadowing? because i would love this, if it doesn't already exist.

@jenniferspears7074 2 года назад

Excellent question ❤️

@taggartmaclay7710 3 года назад

reading everyone's amazing short stories and excerpts made me realize how much i need to improve

@elled.3544 3 года назад

your prose is fantastic! i loved "cherry and jane in the garden of eden" as it was remarkably well-written. therefore, i cannot wait for the future installments of this editing series.

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

Thank you very much!!

@maya-gur695 3 года назад

I somehow missed the announcement that you were doing this! That's so kind of you.

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

If I do another one (though it'll be a while from now haha I have a lot of writing to edit!) it'll be on my community tab!

@AJShiningThreads 3 года назад

I missed it too - darn

@cherrry7799 10 месяцев назад

I watched a different channel do something like this and while their edits were valid, they were so condescending, arrogant, and rude. It was so distasteful. I love how kind and gentle you are.

@alexsnewhandle 3 года назад

I really liked the first Excerpt! I think a lot of the editted out bits were deliberate: it shows the protagonist distancing himself from a painful memory. its grief, and sorrow, abandoned houses and happy times.

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

There is definitely a lot of great stuff happening in the first excerpt! Since I don't know the context or intention, I focused on streamlining the prose to provide as many options as possible, but if the author thinks something I cut was important for their intention then they certainly should leave it as it was!

@danieltenny817 3 года назад

I must say I love that you included personal preferences of choice of words, as it's something lots of editors won't do (so they won't change the context or the author's meaning). It does help a lot and I learned tons! Great video, and nice idea for a series indeed. Your process is awesome!

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

I might not do it as much when editing in a workshop (or I'd leave all the changes as suggestions in a note, rather than track changes), but since this was an educational video I wanted to show as many options and edits as possible!

@charlesc.r.9324 3 года назад

my piece wasnt chosen so im just gonna assume it was too good to edit and that it had no flaws 🤗

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

(on one hand I did just pick the first three in my document) but ALSO yes you should assume that :)

@Summer-uq1vr 2 года назад

Clearly✨

@rachelthompson9324 3 года назад

I participate in critique groups as much to help others as to help myself. By seeing other's work, I see my own mistakes. This puts new eyes on how I see my work. Copy and line editing others helps us more than them when approached with the right attitude: a willingness to learn.

@davidstys9734 2 месяца назад

This is so good. I love the idea of her editing as opening our minds to new 'options' and not necessarily how it needs to be done.

@elisa8666 3 года назад

that changing the metaphor with a verb is incredible... unfortunate that in Italian is incredibly difficult to do 🥺 ps: this is like the most helpful and educational video I’ve seen in a long while, I adored it 😍

@faerae666 3 года назад

🎶“Tempted by the verb of another. Tempted but the verb is discovered. What’s been going on. Now that verb is strong” 🎶

@The-Strong-One Год назад

I read your comment the same time she said that

@Scumsplat 3 года назад

OMG!! please do more of these types of videos- heck make it a series! Ha, it's just so insightful and interesting to watch :) p.s. i feel so motivated whenever i watch one of your videos, so thank you!

@PermaPen Год назад

That's amazing, thank you (and to the brave authors)! It shows the distance between so-so and powerful may be a little bit of word-tinkering; not throwing it all out the window and starting again in tears. I entered a few 500-word competitions last year, always having to squash 1000 words to half-size - that was most instructive, in terms of creating shorter, stronger phrasing.

@IloveItachiandGaaru 3 года назад

Been learning from you for years and I gotta say it's amazing to see you grow as an author; being about as concrete as it gets due to the video's nature really crystalizes the distance you've come since giving us tips in your beanie. Can't wait for the rest of the series.

@LeoMafraArt 3 года назад

Loved this video so much! Can't wait to experiment with my verbs and condense my phrases tomake them punchier. Also loved your attitude about the whole process, very light, open-minded and engouraging. Can't wait for the next video!

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

I'm excited to make the next one, I love line editing!

@YncFlrZ 3 года назад

It's such a delight watching you work. And it motivates me to do the same. I cut 10 "just"s, 13 "then"s and 22 "and"s out of my extract for my query. THANK YOU. And the fun part is: I'm writing in german and your video helped me none the less.

@eldunari0291 3 года назад

i didn’t know you were doing this! i love getting to hear other people’s work, and combined with editing advice, this is gonna be a cool video!!

@writeitdown2013 3 года назад

This is great! Love seeing the nitty gritty details of the craft

@Letha222 3 года назад

I've enjoyed dozens of your videos but I wanted to tell you this is my favorite so far. I look forward to more in this series. Thanks.

@Pixelkvist 3 года назад

I love this so much, please do more of this! :D I treasure all videos like this that I can find since it helps me so much with prose!

@insoLentLuvsAsSy 3 года назад

I love watching line editing videos like this. I learned many things about how I should approach my story during revision or writing a new chapter. Thank you for this! 🤘🏻

@eimearlawlor4338 2 года назад

Thank you for posting these videos. I binge-watched all of them over Easter weekend

@authorEE_ESE 3 года назад

The story with "Old San Juan" has me wondering if the author is from Puerto Rico, or maybe they visited the island at one point. ♥♥

@myownbravado 3 года назад

This is so fascinating! In the classes I’ve taken, we haven’t been able to worry too much about line editing in our projects so I’ve never had the chance to just sit down and watch someone line edit something before?? Amazing. I’ve already learned so much and I would definitely watch more of these!

@imaginativebibliophile549 3 года назад

Shaelin, This was lovely to watch and I learned a lot about line editing my own work as well as the work of others. I am currently beta reading a book and working on my writing at the same time. The stories submitted are beautiful and have a lot of potential and I love how they are enhanced by simply changing words here and there. All of the stories were lucid and filled with emotion. I will certainly send in my work next time. I had a little trouble choosing what to send. I love you

@veronikachristen2373 3 года назад

Thanks for doing this video and thanks to all the writers who sent in their pieces! That was really helpful! :)

@thenaturekingwoo 3 года назад

With the semester starting next week and me knowing I won't learn half the creative writing things I actually want to lol, I have to say I needed this. Thank you!

@Eldorado1239 2 года назад

Best part is, you always learn something no matter whose writing or who's editor. Great stuff! And fun too.

@yuu_rei 3 года назад

Hi! I'm new to your channel, just found you this morning, but you've already helped me with my drafts more than anyone and anything else and I just want to tell you I'm immensely grateful for this. Really, I've been struggling with my draft for so long but after this I went ahead and edited it the way you did and oh my god. I'm just. wow. thank you. sorry I went on a rant.

@Rebekkamaria 3 года назад

You are absolutely lovely and this was so interesting. Your writing style is more literary than mine, but I love the imagery you create and it clicks with how I see and feel and experience writing. So yeah, these are helpful and interesting. Thank you, Shaelin. Much appreciated!

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

I'm so happy it helped! I think these concepts apply to any writing style too!

@leech1355 3 года назад

I am so here for this content. 2021 Shaelin coming through! ❤️ *watches immediately*

@olivegranola 3 года назад

this is going to be SO USEFUL for me to edit, thank you so much!!! love this idea

@qormi1000 Год назад

Thank you. This was an excellent lesson for us all. More like these please.

@melodid5023 3 года назад

I love it! Thank you for the education and for opening gates in my brain that I didn't know where there XD Abd thanks to everyone for the stories. They are all very interesting!!!

@tia2108 2 года назад

your advice about adding more concrete imagery is insanely helpful. as of late i’ve been writing more about the abstract and i hadn’t realised that concrete imagery can be equally as effective whilst also being more engaging. (not that the abstract can’t be engaging, but balance is important lol). i felt like my writing was lacking something and now i finally know what. have you already done a video expanding on this? i feel it would be a really great topic to discuss :)

@traceyking7299 Год назад

Hey, I'm watching all of your videos. They are helping so much as I am trying to polish my manuscript. X

@reverie927 3 года назад

This video is so helpful! Please make more of these if you can, it's packed with great advices. :)

@amandarandomtube4793 2 года назад

I love this! You're one of those people that the world would benefit from having clones of. It would be so cool if there were enough of you to write all your stories and edit all of ours too

@ReaderReborn 3 года назад

Thank you for the content. Been sharing it with my writing group.

@ThatsJustMyBabyDaddy 3 года назад

Your video courses are so timely!!

@connorkennedy1794 Год назад

I don't know if you read comments on old videos, but your line editing videos are particularly useful for clarifying the thought process behind editing changes. Thank you very much. It is particularly insightful at teaching me to look for opportunities for specificity, conciseness, and familiar phrases, while noting and unclear ideas or awkward wording.

@Youcifer 2 года назад

This video helped me identify my filter-word problem. Bless you, Shaelin.

@michaellauritano5252 3 года назад

I always learn so much when you do these

@passantamreltarek9946 3 года назад

This is was so fun to watch...I can't wait for the next one already! I hope you get to my excerpt at some point :)

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

excited to get to yours, I loved reading all the work everyone has sent in!

@paulabates2547 3 года назад

this is one of the most helpful videos I've ever watched.

3 года назад

This is so satisfying to watch

@brigida2350 Год назад

This is exhilarating, now I understand why someone would want to be an editor.

@markbradford9249 3 года назад

Nice to see your expertise first hand, thanks :)

@JRTProds28 3 года назад

Oh, how did I miss this request? Maybe next time. This is a great idea, Shaelin, and thanks. Very helpful.

@lizgonzalez491 Год назад

I love this! I kept running to my computer to edit. Yes. Do more.

@dylanradclyffe9074 2 года назад

You clearly know your stuff. Have learnt so much from this, thank you.

@user-gf2rz6or3e 3 года назад

This video was so helpful, thank you so much!!

@nocturnus009 3 года назад

The sooner we embrace the iterative process the better.

@marzy1063 3 года назад

i watched a lot of your videos and some from a while back and i love how each video ive seen your hair gets shorter and shorter

@genretypebeats4612 3 года назад

These are my favorite videos.

@anilogo682 3 года назад

I love making sentences more specific! Best tip ever. Do you also have a video about the do and don'ts of foreshadowing in books (to make a slowly build up story more tense)?

@Mark-xf3fe Год назад

This is so useful! I play this video and when You edit something that ai recognise or may do myself I pause the video and search through my manuscript for it. I’ve edited so much. This is way more usedful than simple stating hints

@iluvSchleeping 3 года назад

This is so helpful. Thank you

@user-cu1ss2ew3w 3 года назад

I realy enjoyed that. More please!

@carlarodriguez7671 Год назад

Thank you so much! This is so helpful!

@leivangel4977 3 года назад

This was super informational! Thank you for sharing.

@omegaminoseer4539 5 месяцев назад

This was very insightful for me on my road to being a better author! While line editing seems like it will take a lot of time, I have faith that it will help me to grow well beyond my limits of a first draft. The notes about using certain words or phrases as, "crutches," was very agonizing. I happen to use **only** far more than I should.

@BirdsNThings 2 года назад

Thanks for this video. I found it very helpful. Literary makeover how-to :)

@kittysqueezer 3 года назад

I have no idea what line writing is. I’m a new writer but your content and channel and way of presenting information, is definitely helping me figure out this whole crazy process that is writing and authorship. :)

@fkdjdjcmckdjdjf3728 3 года назад

line editing is basically when you go through a piece and add notes/edit each line. not every single line has to be edited, but it's basically aggressively revising but not actually re-writing. this isn't so much of a focus on grammar (though that can be included), but more like going 'hey, upon re-reading this sentence, i realise that this could be written more effectively' it's sort of like after you've written the full manuscript and you're not planning on re-writing the whole thing anymore, you're going through and making any improvements you can. people usually line edit after taking a break from the manuscript or after writing the whole thing instead of before the entire story is finished, so that you can see it from fresher eyes.

@rev6215 3 года назад

Love the new background

@rev6215 3 года назад

I know it's the old background nust from a different angle but I love it

@Mikeztarp 3 года назад

If someone ever wanted to lure Shaelin into a shady van, it wouldn't work with candy. You'd need verbs.

@Jubilee88 3 года назад

Found your channel today. You’re brilliant.

@abdoul5176 Год назад

Props to those who submitted.

@RedWizardFox 3 года назад

Man I wish I saw this video months ago so you could have helped me with my book. If you EVER need more examples I'm 100% willing to have you help me.

@kxrimgh 3 года назад

this video was so helpful! I'd love to submit some writing for future videos like this! :) (i know it's not for a while but still lmao)

@JoelAdamson 2 года назад

Nothing adds more to your credibility than showing that you know the actual definition of "vulnerable."

@samanthabledsoe7129 3 года назад

Fun video. Your feedback is fascinating. I need to go back and look at my own writing a little closer.

@opollitico 3 года назад

MORE MORE MORE videos like this, PLEEEEEEEASE!!! 💕💕💕

@rachelswabey293 3 года назад

Not roasting, and I'm a subeditor rather than a copy editor, but 'twelve years old' doesn't need hyphens. If you're talking about 'a twelve-year-old' (noun), that's when you use the hyphens. I love these line editing videos, btw. They're so helpful, thank you!

@MusicianSamir 3 года назад

Needed this!

@fien4878 2 года назад

Omg I need more of these

@Nate1975 2 года назад

You are so lovely and yes, obsessed with verbs 😂 not the thing I like, sounds made-up, but sometimes, rarely it does work

@lakeshagadson357 Год назад

she is the best person I have in my class

@joshuaisaac99 3 года назад

Love this!

@sazmarie1281 3 года назад

What are you going to vlog next? Love your videos!

@Godliftsthelow 3 года назад

Great tutoring Girl.

@billyketchallen Год назад

Very helpful

@Mikeztarp 3 года назад

I have to disagree on a little point here: "stood" is not the same as "stood up". The former describes an upright position, but the latter a transition to an upright position from another (e.g. sitting). A common mistake is to use "stand up" instead of "stand" but the preposition isn't always useless.

@WiscoDrinks 2 года назад

If the character was shown to be in a sitting position previously, stood would have the same meaning as stood up.

@rachelwritesbooks 3 года назад

i love this video just had to say that okay goodbye!!!

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

🥰🥰🥰

@bobsrussi598 2 года назад

i feel like I just took like five creating writing classes! thanks

@amenasultanaoishe Год назад

Plzzzz make more video like this ❤❤❤

@nabilamiah3814 3 года назад

I LOVE YOU SO MUCH

@lameasstv1140 3 года назад

9:14 i feel like the sun only yoyo's east to west, like sunrise and sunset, and that sounds cleaner too.

@lindseyreisker 3 года назад

You are so talented. Have you written any books? I love the stories you went over.

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

All my published short fiction is linked in the video description! I've written a number of novels, but currently haven't published any, though I'm editing one to start querying this year!

@The_Open_Book 3 года назад

Sorry if this gets asked a lot but what program are you using to edit? It seems super useful

@ShaelinWrites 3 года назад

It's actually just Microsoft word!

@The_Open_Book 3 года назад

@@ShaelinWrites wow maybe the version I have isn't up to date 😅 thanks!

@brigittegerlach Год назад

Good video. I'm self publishing my seccond book and I think editing very hard. Never know where to start and could do with a seccond oppinion. Do you edit adult Fantasy?

@ShaelinWrites Год назад

Hi! I do offer freelance editing services, but I don't think I would be the best fir for an adult fantasy book, as I don't read much of the genre so I'm not very familiar with its techniques and conventions.

@brigittegerlach Год назад

@@ShaelinWrites Don't know why my first answer didn't arrive. But I 'd none the same would love to have you Look over my nouns and verbs. You're a godsend❤️

@AJShiningThreads 3 года назад

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