Umbra | Sci-fi Short Film 

Marcio Galego Umbra Explained vimeo.com/189556308

That much was evident - except the meteor part. It never said what it was they wee trying to accomplish or why.

Yhanks your explanation was absolutely required!!!

Paradise, your comment is the only way I knew what had happened in this clip. So sad, could have been really good.

He reminds of those on unemployment. Not all but lots of them.

i agree. Too many film makers try to add too much mystery but at the lack of coherence... it then just feels like a big waste of time having watched the video.

Eh, I skipped most of it.

Dusty Boot: At least I got to see your profile picture - a smiling dog makes up for more than ten minutes of wasted life!

All hail to the mouse, and to fast-forward! Only 1 minute wasted, including this comment!

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All of these are short stories. They're meant to fire your imagination. Do YOU have one?

@@fredflintstone2958.... That's Dumb comment. I've watched many of these shorts, and I understand what's going on in almost all of them. This one sucked

@@thomasfleig1184 Well...at least you were polite. Thanks. Have a good day.🖖

@@thomasfleig1184 Big time. 10 minutes of my life gone......

MrWizbangIWD Umbra Explained vimeo.com/189556308

TURTLE MOON FILMS - First, music bed is too high to properly here your arrogant"explanation" to what could have been a better short film. Two, the customer is always right. If many of your viewers don't get your message, then YOU failed, not the audience. Insulting the audience in your explanation just shows how spoiled, entitled and off base you are. Third, your actors did a decent job, and with a proper director, some short exposition and a "less is more" viewpoint on set design this would be a much better film. I expect much abuse from you with my post. Hopefully you will consider these and other points from other viewers, regardless of how hurt your feelings become.

I was thinking that was deliberate: until I reviewed the info-dump from the lady who spent 5% of the run-time walking: ""Hubble's com card is online" "Get me the director on the line" Cut to the shot of a comet. I think we were supposed to get that this is an important threat, but it is easy to miss if you miss the meaning of the Hubble (space telescope) line. Reasons I thought the confusion may be deliberate: They call Armageddon an "anomaly". Based on the 25 seconds of title shots, I assumed the anomaly had something to do with the sun. The later conversation between Umbra and the protagonist works really well if we assume it is an conversion between the author and audience: 8:41 "Just tell me what it looks like, OK?" Nasa people looking mildly concerned (suggesting lost of craft not loss of planet) 9:09 "I don't understand" (audience is lost too) "I know." 9:16 "That's Okay." 9:20 "That's the point" (editorial unmask?) edit: 9:21 Craft shudders 9:32-34 Something shown burning falling over a populated area. -- I assumed that was just the craft that failed to leave LEO. Tragic love story for sure, but nothing world-ending implied.

He looked like Donald Trump,Jr. I was confused. Since his father and the entire crew are into everything. I was disappointed that his girlfriend was a brunette.

Correct. No one seems to remember how OLD some of the stuff in space is....

C Ray Most of Dust is pure shit with high production value crap story that makes no fucking sense

@@ronnydawsonisafraud7747 As far as I was aware _Dust_ doesn't make films. It's a platform or channel for independent film makers to show their work.

@@billyandrew Right or wrong, RDiaF's statement doesn't even address whether DUST *makes* "pure shit" or *showcases*1 it. He just says that it "is"...

@@ronnydawsonisafraud7747 I'd say 50/50 at this point. In the first couple years most of dust was very succinct and had clear reasons and stories told, and the ones that didn't had very good reason to be nebulous for artistic reasons. In the ensuing years since dust became more well known many shorts have absolutely no point nor story, and some even lack coherence entirely. Then you have a few that even have multiple part stories, where if a random person jumps in any order beyond the first it makes no sense whatsoever.

I understood it just fine. Perhaps you just need things dumbed down for you?

did you notice the pencil sharpener by his head...?

stephen crider Umbra Explained vimeo.com/189556308

whatever, i didn't know the inside of a space shuttle looked like the hallway in a 50 year old factory lol, and the white shirts black ties, make the men look like they are from the 1950's, does no one pay attention to the details anymore

Nope. Only you. I bet you LOVE Marvel movies too... wanna call Josh Wedon and let him know there are continuity issues? Quiet your face.

And I will add, it's easy to sit behind your computer and critic films. My 7 year old can do that. Try making or creating something with substance, then you'd understand how crazy some of your critique sounds. You DO know what a short film is right?

There was no solar flare involved in getting to orbit as was discussed early in the video. Also no indication of why there was an apparent problem with life support.

That's what I got too

Gravy Seal: I didn't get the film at all but ur explaination will do me.

Perhaps not the thickness of oxygen rather how much oxygen levels are remaining

Antique relay boxes as well.

Much of the stuff that is currently in space has old technology in it. It's a testament to human ingenuity and.perserverance.

Pencils work in space, are light and cheap. Sensible.

There was also a pencil sharpener on the wall of his space ship. A pencil sharpener.

@@turtlemoonfilms... Seriously? What a load of bullshit!

Explained, my butt. The voiceover was *completely* drowned by the "background" "music." My experience for around the last ten years is that most of the younger audio "engineers" don't know their ass from a hole in the ground when it comes to balancing a mix. NONE of them (alright, VERY FEW of them) seem to be able to grasp the fact that *they* can understand the voiceover because they already *know* what it says from reading it during production. The solution (especially for You Tube-type productions) is simply to grab some random dude (or dudette) who happens to be walking by and make him/her listen to it on a crappy laptop. If they can understand it, mission accomplished. If not, do it over. BTW - the vacuum tubes were an interesting if anomalous touch. Not so sure about the parking-lot PA horn speaker and the pencil sharpener. Work on it.

Well....that was a waste of time. Couldn't understand most of what he was trying to say!

5% oxygen equating to 6 minutes means that he only had 2 hours of oxygen total on this "space station" from the beginning. One could guess that his mission was supposed to be short. We don't know what his mission was so there essentially is no plot to this movie. And then the vacuum tubes and pencil sharpener. On a two hour mission with radio contact to relay data, why would he even need a pencil to begin with? I use mechanical pencils because I hate sharpening.

Lame........how much did you have to pay Hawking to explain the plot?

ok. so.The guy dies and the meteor hits earth. But how did he screw up the mission? No details at all. So vague .. No wonder half the people here don't get wtf is going on.

@@turtlemoonfilms - You didn't explain the film, you recounted what we just watched, and told us we are idiots...

Congo Kael agreed! In the movie they state that they don’t know what the anomaly is - how would they not be able to tell it’s an asteroid years beforehand? Also - why in the world would they pick someone just because of his father’s expertise? Assuming a shuttle could really do anything about an asteroid (nuclear missiles, perhaps?) - they would send a Crew of their most capable astronauts. The plot is poor, the execution is not great (so many anachronisms in the shuttle contents, for example), and the writer responds to criticism with a lack of professionalism, grace and maturity.

Oh that's better then what I said

I did notice the pencil sharpener. I thought it was a funny touch that didn't take anything away from the overall project.

And a pencil sharpener.

He was supposed to save the earth, but his craft malfunctioned.

The explanation cannot be more annoying with the background music! The short film was really nice though (but difficult to understand, that's true).

TURTLE MOON FILMS Yeah... No. You really shouldn't have to watch an explained video to appreciate a 10 minute short on youtube that isn't even good enough to deserve more time than it has already been given. Maybe take some of the criticisms of other people (who, no, their opinions aren't meaningless) and use them to improve and build upon your future projects, without always assuming you know better.

By George I think you've got it! XD

Second that.

@@eddewan307 Ahhh, so it's an "experimental film" then!

26k views... don't we have exactly LOST them

Yep, for example I watched it not only once, tried to find out wtf was this. Still no clue :D

I am one of those 26k views. I came on the promise of sic-fi, like many others. The LOST happens after viewing it, not before! This is about feedback and critique, not criticism of the director/producer, it is about the film's story, not the person! As such is a valuable resource, and should be seen as a way of improving future films.

microbroadcast Umbra Explained vimeo.com/189556308

Donald Coates Umbra Explained vimeo.com/189556308

Thank you. I watched again and it was well done. I don't think the 'asteroid about to destroy earth' concept was really made clear and that's the problem. The opening shot of the asteroid was clear, but then the character refers to it as 'the anomaly' and they don't seem particularly freaked out but rather awed, so I started wondering if it was something like a first contact event instead of an extinction event and that question isn't really answered. Even the end could be something entering the atmosphere to make a landing, not destroy, or a projectile being fired. The open question took away from the drama instead of adding to it which is where the criticisms that I see come from, IMO. Still great acting and some great shots.

you need to watch some David Lynch pal

@@turtlemoonfilms thank you for the link; I presumed that's what it was about, but thought, maybe there's more to it, due to the ambguious nature of how the story was told. I really enjoyed it, thank you. However, the person explaining it in that vimeo link is patronising and snarky.

The part about "forgetting basic story telling" in your explanation video was about you, right?

Love

This should be highlighted & posted at the top, as it offers at least some explanation to viewers. Don't know if that was the real idea behind it but since they didn't bother to explain and you did, as far as I'm concerned YOU created the story. Congrats.

Huh?

Most of Dust is pure shit with high production value crap story that makes no fucking sense

Vít Výmola the Vimeo explanation doesn’t do anything to improve the flimsy plot - and it’s condescending and rude just like his comments on this video - a person who can’t accept criticism is unlikely to improve - and he obviously cares little for the audience. Perhaps he should just film movies for his own entertainment since the rest of us are too stupid to understand his grand vision