3 STUPID Essay Mistakes on the Common Application: DON'T DO THESE!!! 

same, but I still watch them.

Yea, she just complicated things

Most stupid thing : critisize ananymous"s essays.

@@user-tj6xo8nj4n Actually, I find they're super helpful!! Her videos provide so much insight, I feel much better about writing an essay when she has provided yes's no's and examples of application essays :)

Malted Peaches They’re helpful, but they make me feel stressed out cause I feel like I don’t have time for extracurriculars and neither the talent/intelligence to stand out in them. Considering that I’m a sophomore in high school, I only have 2 years to prove myself which seems like little time to me :(

x2

Same vibe😂💘

Same

SAME!!!!! Like I literally already went through this whole process a year ago, and I'm literally moving into my dorm room in a month, and here I am just binge watching these for fun 😂

Same!!!! JAJAJA

Fix these essays? That is not the tutors job. That is YOUR job to do. If you dont know how to tell a story then you have already missed out on college.

SereniaSaissa that’s not helpful at all. The point of watching these videos is to learn HOW to write the essay and get good at it. Not everyone is a writing genius is like you.

@@Majestic469 I don't get these people.I mean I am good at logical reasoning,maths and Science in general but when it comes to literature I can't tell a story well and what's wrong in taking help in that.

there's a fine line though

If you actually had a hard life, that's drama not melodrama. Many kids have not actually have much of a hard life and pretend that simple things in their life were absolutely grueling, amazing or otherwise hyperbolic. That's the issue.

Thank you!

i hate that i read this comment cuz now i'm annoyed at the camera tilt too

I can’t stop seeing it now 😭

It feels like her books are about to slide off her shelf

nooo I didn't even see it now its I all see

WELL NOW THAT U BROUGHT IT UP

That's the problem with us teens. We just Have to do the things we were said not to

I’m an adult who just finished grad school and it made me feel that way 😬. I don’t get this and it has upset me 🤪😬.

XD

How did things turn out?

Just start writing

shmomo *ends up like Amy Winehouse*

bro lmaooooooooooo u do NOT understand how fuckin hard I laughed at this. literally best comment ive ever read not even exaggerating

Melodramic

Stamford coming out

I dont want to die

Hello

SAAD SLAYER that's a great idea!

Hey, do you still have it?

Hello, do you still have it ?

Siddhartha N nope

I believe it is Harvard material

How does divorce and robotics relate? Also, I'm not trying to minimize your harships, but divorce is pretty common.

Did you get into Ivy?

Yina Yang in the comments, people are volunteering to read each other's essay. If you want, I can read your essay and provide feedbacks as I don't know you, that would be helpful. You can send it to me @samriddhisangraula123@gmail.com

Mood. My essays are due in 5 days and I'm just starting. Now I feel like I have to rewrite everything.

For real, I already messed up lol

张孟晋 what do you need ?

You should do random drawings for prizes

Hi! Do you know the relative location of where you’d like to study? If you want to come to California, Cal State schools are great.

@@tmdsb2655 im down to go anywhere as long as i get good financial aid lol

barbara semidey lol same

What school are you applying to

idk if you submitted it yet, but i personally think thats a great topic! If its written well, I think itll be something admission officers really like

I’ll read it if you want

My SAT is a 780 math 690 reading/writing, and my gpa is 3.43 unweighted 4.0 scale and 4..08 weighted 5.0 scale

Amazing !! I️f you want to email it would be easier for feedback

Prompt 1: Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story. To most people, the stock market is an indicator of economic strength or a way to retire, but to me, it has become a game. However, when I first came into this “game,” it was out of necessity, even desperation. “We may not have enough money saved for all three of you to go to a university,” my Dad explained to my two sisters and me. Our jaws dropped like pianos from the sky. My parents said were supposed to pay for our college using their 401ks, but they lost a lot of the money they saved in their accounts during the 2008 recession. I knew I would need to find a way to pay for our education. Unfortunately, my parents forbade me from getting a job, preferring that I focus on academics. Besides, even a part-time job would not pay for my parents’ retirement and my education. That’s when I found a way to make money while helping my mom with the math on her MBA homework: stocks. One problem: I did not have enough money saved to start an account with a realistic return to pay for college. However, my parents had recently switched to IRA retirement accounts, which allowed me to individually buy stocks on their retirement savings and hold a sufficient amount of capital. During my free-time, I studied finance, calculus, and economics so I would be able to offer my parents good stock tips. I watched RU-vid videos of interviews and lectures featuring financial advice from successful investors, such as Warren Buffett. During my studies, I found a helpful equation to calculate the fair price of a stock: the Discounted Cash Flow. Finally, our opportunity arrived when the stock market fell due to the Brexit voting results and fears over the 2016 election. At that time, there were many undervalued investment opportunities. Unfortunately, the stocks that we purchased stayed down due to continued fears over the election, and they stayed down for a while. On top of this, balancing stock trading and school work was difficult since the market was only open during school hours. I would text my Dad stock tickers to buy in the middle of class, and then value stocks (perhaps ironically) using calculus during my algebra two class after I finished my work. My stocks eventually made a significant profit at the end of the year. The portfolio went up over thirty percent (not including investments outside of the portfolio like ethereum and other cryptocurrencies, which would bring that percentage to about one hundred percent), which is higher than the average annual return of even the most successful investors. Eventually, I made enough money to pay for the entire college tuition requirement for both my older sister and me. Something that started out as a necessity turned into both a passion and a hobby. Finance has instilled in me an undying confidence that makes me a better student and a better leader. I found the importance of learning from my mistakes. On the investments on which we lost money, I had to evaluate my missteps in order to never make those mistakes again. Also, I became a stronger reader. I can often tie what I learned from my readings back into financial theory. Managing a portfolio has made me a better leader by improving my decision-making skills as I compare the risks and rewards of every move I make. Though I have done quite well, there is certainly more to be learned. As fun as this “game” is to me, I want to master it well enough so that it is no longer gambling. That is why I am excited to pursue finance.

i like the topic of the essay and it has great potential. However, I really didn’t feel a sense of emotional connection with the younger version of you. Yeah, it’s great you solved a significant problem and found a passion along the way, but try and incorporate sensory aspects to engage the admission officer with your story

Enchantix Harmonix Yup... Can't wait to here about you on the news :)

Enchantix Harmonix right

This one is so funny I-

"theoretical cure for cancer" uhhhhh did you do any hands on research or are you just capping lmao

good luck and I applied too

Bey Whitaker good luck to you too !

Bey Whitaker do you think you have a good chance ?

hey ... I can help with that

youssef refaat how would you like me to send it ?

Megan Cruse nope

nah dude same, i'm a freshman and watching this 😀😂

I'm not saying don't be deep-- I'm saying AVOID MELODRAMA which is making stories out to be more grandiose than they actually are-- it's being overly dramatic and acting like you saved the world when you just volunteered one Sunday at a soup kitchen. And I also say don't be IMPOSSIBLE TO UNDERSTAND -- I want you to go deep but you must be CLEAR and READABLE and I must be able to understand what you're talking about (i.e. you must explain jargon, etc.)

Yes.

Very

Patrick Remi that’s hilarious

I guess so...she assumed all people needing to write a college application essay was a teenager! WRONG.

lmaooooooooooo

Patrick Remi hi Patrick how you doing

Did you get in?

suzy z ??

Get in ?

Andrew Casterella I Don’t Believe Soo I Think She Was Just Saying To Not Be Too Passionate To The Point There’s No Connection Or That You’re Not Relatable.

@@clinealle Don’t capitalize every word lol

betseat kibret I’ll read it if you would like

I can read it if you want

Exaggerated

Overdramatic

Reasonable, likable