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It would be cool if the brands had nothing to do with what happens when they die, and people actually were just judged on their deeds. You could have them die in an accident and have a “What are YOU doing in heaven??” kind of moment where they discover the truth.
This is super interesting! I’m going to add my two cents because I have no self control, but I like the idea of a sort of post apocalyptic world where a group of religious elitists took over the world through decades of political plays, elections, lobbying, and other shady activities. These people then created a system using the concept of heaven and hell to segregate the remaining population, throwing the average person into a dystopian hell hole and hoping that they’d tear themselves apart and destroy any shred of humanity they had to get rid of them and their generations of offspring while saving the rich, powerful, and people who believed in their message/religion. “The Saved” have been brainwashed and misinformed to the point where, a couple hundred years later, they don’t remember a thing about what happened and truly believe that the segregation system is just fate, while the damned have had story’s passed down relentlessly - they’re just silenced. I also like the idea of the trigger-incident that starts the story being a viral news story about a mother who carved/burned/otherwise made the brand on her baby’s forehead unreadable - so now nobody knows which class it belongs to, or what to do with it. I’m so sorry, I know I should just stay in my lane but I just get super excited. Obviously you can disregard these ideas lol love you girl
i actually have a woman in the story who i didnt get to mention in this video who gave birth outside of a hospital which is unheard of in this world and the baby didnt have a brand but later on the baby was taken from her and they tried to brainwash her into thinking she had a miscarriage and made up the baby in her head
I really like just the simple doctors controlling everything story. It makes more sense to me. And would be very interesting considering people would expect something more supernatural or strange than just greedy people. Great story concept.
I really hope you do continue on with this story someday. My favorite ending was the one where the doctors are doing it. It just feels so real and like something that could happen in real life with our society and this world.
I like the one where the being fucks around with everyone. Like the protagonists come face to face with it and question what’s the purpose of the markings and the being goes “Naw, you humans are funny to mess with XD!”
What if the whole society was plunged into chaos when a damned martyrs themself in a huge way (like keeping a big bomb from blowing up or something but dying in the process) and their corpse is found with a saved brand instead of a damned one? I feel like that could lead to a lot of interesting situations where people try to change their brand/ keep their brand from changing because holy shit, they can change!
I liked the story, not to much of a fan of the english words appearing on the forehead. I can see the struggle, going threw different ideas. I love how the picture turned out
I really like the idea of like, some kind of diety put those brands as a moral dilemma onto the world. People are still 100% decided by their actions wether they are put into heaven or hell, but the god or whatever that created the universe or shit put this choice onto the world. And its theory was coreect, the people in the saved society do end up being kind of assholes and vice versa. Idk it could be a cool metaphor on classes in society in shit idk
Ok I can't help it as a super big Supernatural fan (The show) I have to point this out and see if it's just a coincidence or if you accidentally got super inspired, There's a Supernatural fan fiction made by someone who's now abandoned the story called *Two steps from hell*. In this there are two caste systems, the Perfect and the Imperfect. While unlike what you've made in this world it's decided later in life, if you are chosen as an imperfect then you are permanently scared and then "Perfect families" will decide on if they want you to become a "servant" in their home, if they don't choose you then you are deemed a nothing and are sent to Nowhere. A place out in the wilds, very similar to what you describe in your video. This fanfiction was made back in 2014, August 19 and was intended to be part of a series called *Bad Blood*. I don't know if this was intentional or not, I mean heck for all I know you could be the original writer of that fanfiction! If you see this I'd love to get a reply, I'm not trying to attack you or defame you. I just want to know how this all came to be so early similar.
i think it would be more interesting if this was some sort of closed community cult that was started by someone with a god complex and everyone believes that the brand really tells them if they are going to heaven or hell, just a thought though.
Heaven and Hell could not be the afterlife but In life if you are a saved you get to go to a form of Heaven on Earth but if you are the opposite you go to a form of hell in life it doesn't have to be in the afterlife
I know Its random but what if the damned girl flatlined but came back tl live and then tells the other girl that she soor an engel who said that she was going to heaven (not like a lie) OooOOooOOH PlOt TwIsT
