“I’m not convinced American public schools are this badly run.” One time a speaker came to my high school to talk about “overcoming his Tourette’s” (?). A bunch of students Googled him and found out he's a sex cult recruiter so they told the principal, and he had to apologize over the PA system for not doing any background checks.
did... did no teacher bother to like... do ANY research about this guy that they were inviting to speak at their school like... not even google his name for half a second?
@@s0livagant_ or that he has to make a severe amount of progress to be an actual functioning adult instead of an incredibly stunted teenager with trauma that definitely does require outside help including years maybe decades of healing but yea that wont process thru his alpha chad mind
I love how casually she says shit like “Rape” and “School shooting” just because this book is so damn over dramatic to the point that these tragedies have no meaning in this world he created.
Two terms for this would include "Shock Fatigue" and "Diminishing Return." It's why Agony failed as a horror game because there was no calm in it. It also failed as a game in itself because the gameplay was so boring, but that's another story. This fails to shock because Don Onion is proven to be insane already.
Imagine this book but it’s written from Abby‘s perspective. She suffers domestic abuse from her father and also gets raped. Then we see her psychological trauma. She tries to find comfort from the school counselor, but when she finds out she’s pregnant and gets an abortion, the counselor turns on her. She doesn’t know how to find support, so she rushes into an relationship with jock 1. she writes him that she wants everyone to disappear. The relationship is very abusive, and she just wants out. She sees Greg as her savior and rushes into an unhealthy relationship with him where she sees him as infallible. Then the shooting happens and we she blames herself because of that note. Her dad gets arrested for drunken driving or something, so she moves in with Greg because his mum allows it. She confines in the mum who suggests she gets therapy and then sets her up with a therapist. She begins to heal and notices the unhealthy relationship between her and Greg.
a decent plot, but from a writing standpoint, its way too much trauma for one story. in writing, when those types of experiences are one after another after another, it loses its impact and gets tiring. after a certain point it starts to feel like a torture porn.
“I am convinced American schools aren’t run this bad. This has to be illegal.” In seventh grade, my bully of two years pulled a knife on me, pushed me against the lockers with the knife to my side and told me if I told on her again, she’d hunt me down and kill me. The security camera in the hallway caught it all. The vice principal told me and my mom that there was nothing he could do because “everyone is entitled to an education.” and maybe I should consider not going to the bathroom during class in case she was out in the hallway. Mom pressed charges against my bully and won. Also, my sister was also almost in a school shooting. (I had graduated from this high school three years earlier) The guy who had been beating up her and her friends sent a snapchat holding a rifle and the caption was a bunch of names and the date for the next Monday. My sister went to school early that day and cried with her friends, because she was sure that she was going to die once he showed up. I guess someone ratted him out because the police were there waiting for him once he got off the bus. He did indeed have a hunting rifle and a bowie(?) knife in his big gym bag. On a less “the school is at fault” note, my sister saw a kid die in outdoor education while snowboarding. He hit a bump wrong, broke his neck on impact, and died. At first, kids were laughing like “oh, haha Zach ate sh*t!” and when Zach didn’t get up, she said “there was this wave of ‘oh f*ck..’ that hit everyone all at once.” A lot of kids had to talk to the school councilor after that, my sister included.
Yeah sounds about right. I got stabbed through my hand in 5th grade, during fucking class. I got a bunch of stitches, shit head stabber got a one day suspension. If I though about it long enough I could probably write out 20 similar ghetto school stories.
The moral of this story is: Even if you are in an abusive relationship, and depressed and getting sexually assaulted, it can still get worse if your boyfriend is Onision
If Onion ever becomes my boyfriend (which is never in any of the 46,000,000,724 alternate timelines of this univserse), I would gladly plant ten shotgun slugs into his skull before he even thinks about asking me what my name is.
I didn't know who Onision was going into this, so the most shocking part was about half way through when it was revealed that this was written by a 30 year old man.
@@blueshell292 That is the very rabbit hole this video sent me on! Love TRO. These 'books' get ever more disturbing the more you know about Greg IRL, huh?
I just realized this: This is a story about a marysue who's more powerful and traumatized than everyone else, who's dating a person that has issues with their past love, overly dramatic onomatopoeias, someone other than the main character doing shit while they just stand there watching, abusive parents and rape, and the main character is clearly a goth with a "nice and cheery" friend. This is My Immortal. This is what My Immortal looks like published.
Honestly thats giving Onision too much credit, at least My Immortal was somewhat entertaining and was probably written by a 14 year old writing fanfiction in their free time and not a man in his 30s who thinks his books are hot shit.
Going back to this after watching the review of the 4th book and knowing that Abby is based on an actual girl who rejected Greg and that's why he wrote a fucking fanfiction about her makes this whole thing infinitely creepier.
The fact that your user is “Sprite” and the other person who replied is “Infires Man” is really funny to me (I’m a fellow ARMY)- Also, this is terrifyingly accurate.
"Im not convinced American schools are this badly run" >DEEP BREATH< an old friend had people pay them at lunch to run into/hit kids at recess I had a teacher send me to the principal for "reading too much" Another threated to send me to the principal for reading "too fast" Before graduating, I didnt know where Russia, China, Finland, Scotland, and more were on a map, Multiple people tried to start cults during recess's Monthly school sho*ter drills This one 2nd grade teacher said she had cancer for April fools, I was in school lunch debt for years Bus driver got fired for selling coc*ine And more....
My school went into lockdown for over an hour because of a bomb threat when I was in 11th grade. One kid was getting harassed by another kid and it took months for the school to do something about it. Students would brag about fucking in the janitor’s closets. Also when my brother was in 9th or 10th grade there were 3 separate bomb threats in 3 separate bathrooms. The 3rd one was in a staff bathroom, and all the bathrooms were closed for the rest of the year.
Very late but about the American school system: -At one point we had to write on the back of already graded papers bc the school didn’t have any -My friend’s ovary ruptured at school and was literally dying and the nurse told her she couldn’t send people home when they have their periods -The health teacher locked a girl in a closet for a class period and wasn’t even suspended for a semester Yeah, they’re pretty batshit
Bruh I went to the nurse with severe ovary pain and an extremely heavy period (later revealed to be cysts) and she shrugged and gave me the thinnest pad. I had to go back to class, bleeding all over the place, and beg my mom to come get me.
the first pages or whatever can be summarized into “i’m weird. i’m a weirdo. i don’t fit in and i don’t want to fit in. i am too intelligent for society to comprehend. i am surrounded by idiots. my name is light yagami, welcome to my ted talk.”
Her: The grammar is wrong, the plot isn't that great, the characters are poorly written, and some of the things don't make a lot of sense Greg: So you're literally making fun of my friend who died, apologise to me right now
the fact that the npcs have to be nice to greg because the writer deems it necessary reminds me of the ProZD skit "when you're an NPC whose script forces you to compliment the shitty player"
If I remember correctly. Onison wanted schools to use his literature for study. I will gladly do that by having my students rip his work to shreds. “Okay class. How do we fix this sentence?” “Is this how two characters would naturally react?” “And this kids, is what not to do when writing anything ever.”
i imagined a room full of random kids just like. ripping it. pages all over the desk and everything. that’d be a lot more effective than a school counselor
Stones to Abigail, the revised version. "I'm not some broken item for you to fix Greg, my pain is not something for you to fall in love with." Greg suddenly looks very sheepish, now that it had actually been said he realized just how much of an absolute tool he was being. "You're right, I'm sorry, I shouldn't treat you like some object that I want to fix. You're a person, and I should treat you as one." And then they become friends, and Greg doesn't try and jump in her pants. This of course could only happen if Greg wasn't an absolute scumbag.
It is kinda hilarious though how he fully wrote out that first part, thought it over for at least the few seconds he would've needed to write a response, and that response was... Greg: but baaaabe, you're troma is hawt! Abby: yeah, I guess it kinda is when you put it like that!
The manchild of 40 admitted in another book Aeons covered, that "Abby" was a real person, and that person essentially did everything to avoid him after he wrote the stupid note. Which means this fucking asshat has been obsessing over the traumatized woman like it's a fetish, for the last 20+ years, to the point he wrote a sexual fantasy about a REAL person who wants nothing to do with him.
I like how the President reveres Greg for doing nothing while Jock actually tackled the shooter. Like, there is a student who attempted to fight the guy and save himself and his classmates but it is not Greg, Mr. President.
"I read this whole book with the exception of the sex scenes" honestly, no one asked you to or wanted you to. No one should ever have to endure that kind of pain
No no, the teacher shaming the kid for peeing under the desk part is accurate. Back in first grade (coincidentally also in art class), one of my classmates asked to go to the bathroom maybe 5 minutes into class. The teacher said no, she should have gone before, and she told her our core teacher didn't let her go either (which was true). The art teacher still refused, so she didn't go. Fast forward to the end of class, we're lining up to be escorted back to our homeroom, and someone asks why there's water on the floor. The classmate that asked to use the bathroom began crying and said "I really had to go..." and the art teacher just started yelling at her and asking her if she's a toddler, all that jazz. That isn't the only example of high key child abuse I dealt with or witnessed in school, but it's among the most ridiculous. Not letting a 6 or 7 year old go to the bathroom and then screaming at her in front of everyone when she has an accident? Classy as fuck, Mrs. Y.
This is the literary equivalent of liking and agreeing with yourself with sock puppet accounts. Honestly, I wouldn't be surprised if he has done that already.
Abby be like "I was born with glass bones and paper skin. Every morning I break my legs, and every afternoon I break my arms. At night, I lie awake in agony until my heart attacks put me to sleep."
Greg be like: My friend actually was born with glass bones and paper skin, so you making fun of it equals to you making fun of my suffering friend. Think about that
"I'm not convinced American schools are this badly run." One student at my old school tore down a poster hung up on the window outside the drama instructor's office that stated her classroom is "a safe space for LGBTQ+ youth" and threatened to bring his pastor to her office if she put it back up. She cried bc she was a relatively young teacher who didnt know how to deal with the assholery of Southern Pentecostal children who got their political ideologies from their braindead parents and then got fired for being unprofessional. A different student had a bigass confederate flag mounted to the tailgate of his truck and was never told to take it down. Recently a fight broke out at my old high school bc a visiting basketball team was comprised of mostly black students and some of our students called them the n word a bunch of times. My old school is also not IEP compliant.
Sorry you had to live in the deep south. However, please don't use the south as an example of the US. Most of the US isn't as bad as the south is (despite Republicans hard work trying to drag the rest of the country down)
@@alecmullaney7957 and even then there’s a lot of good to the south, racist white people do NOT represent all of the south. Southern culture can be beautiful and was created mainly by poc, especially black people. And also the rest of America that isn’t the south can be just as racist, homophobic, transphobic, sexist, ableist, etc. Coming from someone who’s always lived in the north and traveled in both the north and south. Being a very visibly trans gay disabled person who’s very flamboyant I kinda get treated like trash everywhere. Yeah maybe parts of the south are definitely worse, but I feel like a lot of people in the rest of the country love to just point to the south to deflect from the fact that they’re extremely bigoted and unsafe as well. It’s really the whole country. Our country isn’t built for anyone that’s not a cishet, able bodied, neurotypical white man.
It’s onion soup in a shallow, parking lot puddle. No layers, no nuance, just the fact that if you trip on it your feet will smell like onions and you’ll eat shit because no only is this a slippery surface, it’s a slippery surface that hates you and everyone else who is not Greg-
Milada Schekoldin onion boy is the best mary sue, featuring such events as the president came to my school and appreciates me and raised the schools funding and everuone clapped
this sounds like the fanfics that me and my friends write as a joke by passing the phone around and each writing one sentence so it ends up really dramatic and rambling and with the most confusing plot ever
Morgan Hurlock it is lol. it’s fun at sleepovers at like 4 am once people are winding down a bit but still not asleep. you can do anywhere from one word each to like a paragraph each.
Tankzilla1 Games, Guitar, and Random Shit yeah they end up pretty funny. we generally use our names for the characters. the first one we wrote was pretty much my immortals level though. it’s pretty bad. we put it on wattpad under the acct @oh_no_stop lol. we wrote it last year to pass time after we finished sback testing but before the day was over when we were just sitting in the gym bored.
To be clear, people with ASPD are capable of empathy. There are multiple forms of empathy, if I'm correct most "sociopaths" (not even the right term) use cognitive empathy.
I'm late to the party but I once had a teacher fail me for an entire school year by "losing" my papers and then losing literal folders of that quarters redone work. He was quitting due to heart problems so my school counselor told me to quit complaining. The American education system is BEYOND poorly run
"american high schools can't be this bad" my school had two bomb threats, a shooting threat, a crumbling building, numerous drug scandals with dogs being brought to the building, three hospitalizations, a teacher hit a kid and taped another's mouth shut but still being brought back, and three teachers put on leave for racism all within the span of a year and a half.
This reminded me of Diary of a Wimpy Kid (sociopathic unaware self-insert lead, cinnamon roll best friend, pretty love interest main character is obsessed with). At least in Diary of A Wimpy kid they acknowledged Greg’s shitty actions, even if there weren’t any consequences for them, and gave the side characters a personality outside of Greg.
That line is basically "oh, yes, the floor here is made out of f l o o r", but with Gerg trying to throw in some r/im14andthisisdeep. His writing makes my (thankfully never published) wattpad harry potter fan fiction I wrote when I was 12 look like amazing literature.
@Emily Barclay Cool hahaha I call him Gerg since GREG is already the name of the fastest growing army on RU-vid (or Danny Gonzalez' fanbase), also Greg is the first name from a RU-vidr I quite like, Armoured Skeptic, and best, the name Gerg just sounds like something a swamp beast who destroyed his own swamp would be named, which fits amazingly.
That’s like the most pretentious thing I’ve ever heard. He’s like John Lennon. He says a lot of pretentious crap, thinking he’s deep and intellectually superior to everyone. The only difference is John Lennon’s pretentious crap at least sounded deep at 1st before you sat down to think about it. Onision just makes everybody face palm.
i to would like to believe american schools aren’t this bad, but here are some tales from my two years of junior high alone: (TW for suicide attempts, drugs, SA, and teen pregnancy) -girl got pregnant halfway through her 8th grade year -we went on lock down twice (once because someone said they we gonna shot their ex girlfriend, and the other time because someone said they were gonna set off a bomb at third period) -had the fire alarm pulled at least once a week -one kid i knew but wasn’t friends with ended up being a rapist and then he switched schools -i once hear our dean say “g*d i hate children” (great career choice lauren!) -girl got jumped and stabbed outside the school -kids would just,,, walk off campus,,, in front of teachers,,, the oldest kids there were 14 -teacher would regularly yell at kids to the point they would break down crying and he only got tiered after he called a kid the n word -my friend regularly got death threats after they were outed as trans and when he brought this up to the school with the names of people who have been threatening him they told him to just “deal with it” -kids would bear knuckle box at the park down the street every day after school, sometimes they would also do it in the bathrooms (they all sucked at it) -one of my friends got expelled and went to juvie for selling meth on school grounds -i knew 6 different kids who tried to kill themselves (lucky none of them succeed) -kids would regularly steal from the teachers -they had to close off the private practice rooms in the music building because kids were smoking weed (honestly the tamest thing that happened in there lmao) -some kid set a trash can on fire after they panicked and threw their juul in there after teachers went in to search the bathroom -kid passed bout pot brownies at lunch right before we all started state testing -dudes would stand outside the school passing out these tiny bibles to the students trying to convert them -school nurse would often insult people when they came in for anything saying that we should be able to just deal with it. (one kid came in with a broken ankle and she gave him ice and made him go back to PE) -one girl physically assaulted our vice principal -teachers would make girls come up to the front of the class and bend over to check skirt lengths -and there are a bunch of other stories about shit kids did off of campus but that a whole different (and worse!) ballgame (also i was a student assistant in the office so i probably hear about more things then other student but holy shit, that school was hell)
One thing I noticed as an older adult: No matter how batshit off the rails crazy a story from a teenage perspective is, they do have a good, hard grasp on their teachers. A lot of these people are questionable, and the kids know. It's their reality, and they have to move around in it, and just have to accept stuff that would be outrageous in the workplace.
I was the edgy loner kid with poor social skills who got bullied in school, but I never had this pathetic of a fantasy about getting the perfect girl, saving her from the abusive boyfriend, ect. Compared to Onion boy I'm a chad and I find that terrifying
“A sad backstory and arousing arms” The tragic part is that you have described not only Abbi to a T, but also every other love interest in his books and about half the characters
"every man in her life is clearly disgusting and abusive, except for Greg who can do no wrong..." cut to OnionBoy pelting Shiloh with candy corn & harassment while laughing at her misery
On one hand I agree, on the other, that’s just cruel to fanfiction tbh. Like, most fanfic writers have way higher standards than this garbage, unless we’re talking about like typical 12 year old wattpad content, in which case, yeah, that sounds pretty accurate
this book becomes way worse when you think about his latest book and you learn that he didn't actually get together with the girl he based this book on. he wrote her a weird letter, she got mad at him, and they never spoke again. she has no personality because greg literally didn't know anything about her. he saw one girl who brutally rejected him and decided to write a self insert fanfic in his 30s about a girl he knew of in grade school.
Friendly reminder that Onision described his character in the book as a "better version of himself". This creep is supposed to be better than the real Onision...
@Alex Evans Yes. If you look at the descriptions of each book in the Onion Boy trilogy, he explains how all of them were inspired by his youth; and how the protagonist in each one is a different interpretation of himself. In this one the protagonist is supposed to be him, but better, so that he can do more dramatic or important stuff. In the next book, the hero's supposed to be "the worst version of himself" even though the book still portrays him as being smarter than everyone else, and it even ends with one character saying he was the best man she ever knew. Then the Final book, where he has a teenage girlfriend when he's a child and kills God is supposed to be the truest version of himself. I wish I was making this up.
Guy of Minimal Importance hmm and I thought it might be a bit too weird writing myself into a scene of a story I’m writing as some drunk passed out alone on a bar table, and that was it for the character. But now i feel a lot better about that. The story is fantasy grimdark comedy if anyone was wondering for context
@Average Awesome Just having a cameo in your own book wouldn't be that weird, especially if it's just a one off thing and not a major plot point. the concept of a self insert is not fundamentally flawed. Honestly even writing a fictional memoir of sorts like this where a fictional character like you goes through similar events that you did would still be fine. The important thing about a story like this is that it has to be written without ego, acknowledging the flaws of your personality as well as your strengths, explaining how you became the person you are today. It honestly can be a good tool for self discovery by applying your own circumstances to a fictional character and seeing how you think of them from a third person perspective. The problem with Onion Boy's books is that all of his self inserts are portrayed as perfect; characters go out of their way to acknowledge how great he is and praise him. for God's sake he wrote in a chapter where the POTUS arrives and calls him a national hero. Most importantly his protagonists never change; despite being a coming of age story "James" never grows as a person, he's perfect from start to finish. In the next book his self insert is just a cool edgy boy who's morally questionable actions are only seen as sexy and defiant of cultural norms, in his final book his main character becomes more powerful than God himself, defeating both God, The Grim reaper, God's backup self; and then reforming all of creation to his design without ever making a wrong decision. A well written self insert gives an author a reason to reexamine themselves as a person, or simply express thier passion for something. His self inserts just serve to demand praise form the reader.
I wrote a book called Outcasts when I was 13 and self published it on Amazon and Kindle when I was 17 and it’s still better than all of Onision’s books combined... this may say something about his intellect...
"Your bones were not shaken, Gregory!" I love that. Also I commented this on another video I think, but like... they never explain how in the actual fuck the shooter recovered from being *punched in the throat by an adult* Like... that would lay out a full on adult into a paroxysm of coughing and trying to recover, but apparently Teen Shooter™ just went "ok boomer" and shot mcteacher, somehow.
coming back to this after hearing you read his "autobiography" has to be the wildest trip ive taken this year. hoping the girl he based this on never finds out because how uncomfortable 😭
It's wild and I love it lol Makes it similar to watching a series or book after knowing the great Twist and going back to seeing all the little clues Just in this case it's not clues, but Onionboy being unimaginably pathetic
everyone being played by onision implies hiring onision and paying onision to film as an actor. Instead we should just hire tommy wiseau like PosthumanHeresy suggested
Yes! No matter what, you have to change the dialogue when a character speaks. Another error, he has super cold writing. He needs to use some descriptive phrases. Jesus.
"I am not convinced that American public high schools are this badly run" HA the stories I could tell. My middle school principal screamed at a bunch of 6th graders for not knowing what to do in a fire drill (this was because no one told them what to do), I got yelled for the majority of my lunch period when I was in 8th grade by a supervisor because someone tried to steal my yearbook (you'd think there would be more to that story but not really), and I've had more than one teacher on separate occasions publicly announce to the class that they hate kids, teaching, and us (idk why they became a teacher. And there are many, many, more stores... So yeah.
There are multiple times across all books where he accidentally calls his character "Greg" instead of their proper name. He's just self-inserting himself in to these. And for the way I've seen him try to talk to underage teen girls about School Shootings and usually only tries to talk to damaged girls... He's trying to cause school shootings in some way...
this is an inspirational video to me, as someone with adhd and dyslexia, the thought of writing a story always seemed impossible. but hey, it couldn't be worse than this, so there's that.
