Looks good. Voice over in the beginning. middle and end are good, truly better than mine. Try croping the image, or use a Ken Burns to change it up sometimes. It's hard to get anyone to watch 20 minutes anymore so don't be discouraged. Consider making the rear camera a chesty. I found you on the Roughfish post.
Dasar eweh gawe ges menang lauk mncing hayoh d lepaskn dei lain nu gelo mg eweh gawe lalier jlma ayna mh dri pda d lepaskn dei mndingan d goreng ker dahar