Wow, that was epic. I also got a few stories in mind. Purple Scales And Princesses by Chuck-daddy, W.A.E. (Worst Aunt Ever) by twilightsparkle3562, and Cuddling The Caretaker by MightyShockwave.
Awesome story! I like the voicing and the pace up until the end. (Sorry but you do want opinions; yes?) I felt the ending was rushed and the annihilation of Rarity's store seemed a bit excessive to say the least. But this is your story...
I know I'm a little late here, but this didn't turn out to be as good as I thought it'd be. It's not your fault Kagome, it's just, once I heard the story, I realized that it was actually not that good, I guess my Doctor Who fanboy side is what blinded me. I think the next one I requested you to do will be better.