RWBY, but BETTER - Response and Addendum 

with the silver eyes problem, have the silver-eyed warriors be a holy tale or fairy tail, with the silver eyes begin a gift from the gods themselves, no real powers just some status. which could be why ruby's mom would be a very favorable and remembered member of the church, which would bleed into why ruby would get more praise and recognition from her father and the church, begin a diving point with the conflict with yang.

Turning Blake into Komi-san is cheating, stop manipulating me.

"How are LGBT people treated?" Of course that is one of the things RWBY fans would ask.

someone should make a fan comic out of this.

Screw RWBY. I want this story.

Ruby idolizing Yang only for her to ultimately hospitolize her in a match will need some serious framework put in place so the audience doesnt instantly villify one of its main cast members. It is interesting however that after Yang finally lets her pent up feelings out and regrets them immensely their dynamic has suddenly reversed. Now Yang is the one attempting to get forgiveness from a distant Ruby. Tai's reaction is also important, does he understand his part in this tragic event?

You addressing the LGBT question, and making it logical that some countries dislike it is very smart

I feel Salem would fit nicely as the Satan to this Remnants God. Keeping the boogeyman status of hers that you spoke of while also being a fine justifying factor for Avanism. With it instead of being simply Ani vs Grimm, it could be Ani vs Salem, with the empire caught in the middle of the war between two gods and ultimately destroyed by the battles.

I'm not sure how to articulate this properly. But it felt honestly a bit odd that they never show the character Qrow in any commited relationships. It's hinted that he is a sexually active man, i.e. the mini skirt joke in vol 3 and the fandom at large had thought a pairing of him and Winter was possible due to it being one of the few scenes in the show proper to have some interesting character drama/history/tension. What I'm getting at is maybe Qrow could have a son or daughter in this rewrite. And to subvert the whole dead mom thing that is already a part of ruby's character, we get ourselves a new aunt character to see. I just feel having a trio of kids in the rose/yang/brawnwen family would be an interesting way to start up some character dynamics and scenarios. This kid could maybe play a non combative role and be some kind of medic or weapon's smith. Maybe play a role like winry from fmab where this kid allows the story to show off different aspects of the surrounding world from a non hunter's perspective. Another option could be that qrow never got married, but did have a bastard child with a woman years ago and this kid converts to beacon under thier mother's maiden name to show that they can get there as a hunter without a strong family name. This character could allow yang to be able to connect to a family member who also had troubles with their father. A bit cliche, but I think the whole part where Qrow's reaction to such news while drinking booze would be worth it alone. I'm sorry if this is poorly written. These thoughts came to mind while watching your video and I could see how much more fun this rewrite could be with how free it is. Thanks to anyone who reads this post and please let me know what you think of my ideas.

Salem is the virgin queen compared to the Chad Queen Myrrah from Gears of war

The lack of *me* is a very good feedback I believe. Pls hire me

The only character from the Rwby antagonists that I feel needs more time is Mercury. I really don't have many ideas to what he could do but anyway I'd like to see him as a bigger bad guy and not only a henchman. (You can even tell he's gonna betray Salem already

"How did you get so good at makeup, Blake?" "Hahaha... Yeah..."

Reminds me of the works of Coeur Al'Aran who uses the RWBY characters to make his own stories. You've gone even further to develop a completely original world and I like the idea. Well done!

Could the silver eyes be a genetic trait from before the Empire so and is known as a royal power which in the worldview is the ultimate race

Doesn't it make more sense for the weiss based team to be called "viper" WYPR

I actually have a story for Qrow and Raven, specifically involving their father and the terrible person he was to make them the fuck-ups they are today. It’s a bit grimdark, but that’s actually quite fitting considering how convoluted your au is. I’d like to say mine is better, but... In all honesty, my au’s purely about characters. Grimm are monsters themselves, but they reflect the cast’s inner demons and are often harder than anything in RWBY-Former. Every character’s overhauled to give them some depth other than a cliche archetype, with the biggest one being the villains from RWBY-Former. I’d love to discuss this more openly with you in private so I can get a critical ear to help me iron out the issues born of my bias, (how’s that for irony) so I’ll just leave this here as a means to get that ball rolling since this community’s *way* too fucking toxic to discuss any aus without getting pulverized with jackhammers covered in barbed wire and acid

If you wrote a book I would buy it in a heartbeat and sell my kidney.

5:11 Judeo-Bolshevism is the word you are looking for.

"Ozpin could be super secretive and control things from behind the scenes" So...ozpin?

I have an idea for Salem to be seen as a figure of pure mystery that interacts with all the nations Salem is a parasitic grade four Grim that has developed a both intelligence and enlightenment from over hundreds of years of her existence and purposely decides to take the host of young adult women and preserves the bodies to last her at most 200 years before it starts decaying. Although the creature known as Salem is a twisted being as for a Grim it does not particularly have any true malice or instinctual hatred towards humanity. When it had became enlightened, it instead has developed a fondness of human nature and wishes to meddle in the development of humanity and wants see whether the humans and fanus will survive and grow or suffer and parish. Salem has no control or rule over the Grim and is merely just another Grim at the end of the day, but even so Salem self-proclaims herself as the representative of the Grim to provide communications and knowledge of the demons to give humans a better understanding of the world they walk through, but Salem isn't so charitably to go visit humanity to give advise to them and instead has them travel to her home in order to seek her consul. Salem lives at the top of the mountains in a forgotten palace that boarders off most of the Grim from entering Terria all at once, but the journey to reach her home is very treacherous indeed with many Grim from grades 2 to 3 roaming around the Mountain Palace 24/7 will spell certain death if one is not prepare for the journey. Anyone who is brave or completely desperate for knowledge will only travel to where the Witch's Mountain Palace to gain truths beyond their of understandings. But there is a major issue with the knowledge that Salem provides, since she has no alliterative motive beyond curiosity, no one can truly get a read on her decisions to help aid humanity and many question why is her information can be consider a creditable. On a few occasion of the doubt towards the Witch led to her "death" by very many skilled Huntsmen and Huntress who only saw her as a monster at the top of the palace, but in most cases people would distort the knowledge they received from Salem to gain benefits for themselves and their group, assumed that the witch meant the opposite of what she had claimed, to trick a nation to fall for the supposed trap provided by the witch, or even hide information that could be seen as harmful to their own group. This distortion of information has led may nations to have a different perspective of Salem making her a vague being that could seem like a messenger of God or a disruptive force of chaos. How Salem acquired such knowledge is due to her intelligence and enlightenment, Salem is able to use a forgotten art known as 'magic' to gather her information across Terria for centuries at this point. Magic is this story of RWBY is nothing like the former, 'magic' in this story is a complete and utter chaotic force that it could whip out humanity if not utilized properly, especially if it is one of the four core elements ( Fire, Water, Air, and Earth), but the magic that Salem uses has no clear combative capabilities, instead Salem focuses on Clairvoyance, Physical and Mental Illusions, Soul mending, and Dowsing arts. Salem's Clairvoyance is by far her most impressive art she possess, being able to see the current state of every single thing that occurs in Terria giving her all the information that her audience my want to know or see. Even though she can not directly kill her opponents she can often times than not, break the will of those that decide to attack her whether it is Man or Grim. Salem is only on Salem side and she has no interest in aiding her kinsmen or physically aiding humanity for a better future. She will forever be a force that rest upon at the top of mountain and fulfill the role she set for herself to do for the rest of her life.

Why does Blake even wear that "bowtie" on her head? In this world are bowties even real disguises? If people have real cat ears, and people with real cat ears and other animal parts are discriminated against in a given country would that country allow for the making of bowties for normal people to wear, and would there even be a market for that? If there was a niche market wouldn't the rest of society discriminate towards those customers? It wouldn't be seen as hipster, it'd be seen as "fauna supporter" by normal people and as...like a weird form of black face by fauna. I doubt schools any would allow much less a school in a discriminatory country

I wanna keep Semblances because let's be real, super powers are just cool, let's not pretend they aren't. But to fit better with this setting, I wanna make a few changes. Number 1, Semblances stay, Aura goes. And I when I mean Aura, I exclusively mean the fucking force-field that everybody has until damage. It's the one thing about RWBY that I've grown to hate more and more as the series went on, as it completely kills all tension into a fight until's broken (or just decides it doesn't wanna work-oh hey Adam, what's up?) Number 2, they aren't free anymore. Yes I know that technically, Ruby doesn't get to spam super speed all she wants without getting tired. But that's not what I mean. Even in the OG show, it's basically confirmed that using them requires tapping into your, like, 'Soul Power' basically. Your soul. The thing that makes you ALIVE. Using that shit should be a last resort, clutch out a win, "either use it now or literally die" kind of ability. Even short bursts of her speed should make Ruby nearly pass out. Maybe that's a little extreme, but what I'm saying is there should be clearly defined consequences for using this things, make them more special. Anybody else got any ideas for Semblance changes?

Oz could be the reason why the beacon church started, to keep as a prisoner or deity.

I like the idea that Blake thinks her parents don't know but in reality they knew for years from the signs. First was the growing pains inside of Blake's ears which didn't have a medical explanation, then there was Blake changing her hairstyle very quickly to cover her ears (perhaps she was really into earrings or having her hair up in a ponytail before her ears transformed) and then there were the new hair accessories. The bow wasn't too much of a clue to them but it was the insistence on things like earmuffs and headphones they were more concerned about. Just a thought.

I'm liking this solely for the single use of that riff from The Ecstasy

I'm almost an adult and I would love to see this as a series, it works for a young adult fantasy story, I remember The Mortal Instrauments and Lunar Chronicles can be pretty dark and can have some really intersting things. I would totally read this as a story and I would love to see it.

"It was made to spite RoosterTeeth." I get that!

Cinder could be an instructor that Ruby’s mom trained and she blames Ruby for her death. Mercury and Emerald could be Cinder’s favourites that she uses to bully Ruby and her team. Helps give many sources of conflict with Yangs inferiority complex, Weiss not wanting to get her family involved and Blake’s secret being found.

What about some ideology that just the existence of the Grimm inspire: for example, there are some settlement at the very edge of the Frontier that would kill or exile people because of their dark emotions (which is either still a thing or just part of this ideology)

No CRDL (or that one team with the bully character) and team JNPR becomes the sorta rival to team RWBY

Bro I did that shit at the end in my schools computer lab

This is only for everyone here and probably wish everyone could discuss this story more. Would a discord be a good idea? If not then keep this unliked.

Would be interesting if Cinder and gang work together with RWBY against the grimm

Maybe in the case of Blake's parents not knowing she's a faunus, maybe she went to some sort of boarding school before Beacon or she didn't see her parents much around the time her traits started emerging, so her suddenly wearing her hair long and a bow will just seem like a new phase to them.

Silver eye is like a tide. When it shows up it pushes the fronter border back/ liberates old citys or is heavily prosecuted and pushed in to the fronter thus pushing a small part of the frontier back or silver eyes is a desirable trait in Ruby's religion (THOUGH OUT IDEAS AAAHHHHHHHH)

I know this is late, but I need to get this off my chest. Whew boy, this...is is certainly something. This really isn't a fix it fic. This is just different world building and trope swapping, most of which isn't even any good. Some of them are downright terrible. On the other hand, some of them are basically what's in the show already! Weiss does have abusive parents! Or at least one abusive parent. The other is a bit of an absentee/neglectful parent. We saw in Volume 4 that her father does abuse/manipulate her. That's nothing new. Others feel like the person has a wee bit of an agenda. Some of it seems to be making the world a little darker and edgier, like Faunas being mutated by Grimm, which kinda cheapens the whole discrimination thing IMO if they're literally part monster...like, where's the subtlety in that? The Faunas subplot is probably the weakest part of RWBY to me, but this somehow makes it worse. It seems like they're trying to justify why humans hate Faunus, rather then going with the reason the show does, which is that humans are just inherently shitty sometimes and hate that which is different, just like in real life. They don't need to be part-monster and adding that just makes it seem really hamfisted. I know RWBY isn't exactly known for subtlety, but c'mon...this is way more in your face. It also seems they're going for a more morally grey-world by having a bigger focus on governments/religions and other challenging topics...but then Adam is just 100%, genuinely heroic. Which is kinda weird, and a little dumb to me, since Adam was morally grey, as Blake says. He started out good with good intentions, but as time went on he slipped further and further down the rabbit hole of madness and spite, and became the broken man we see in Volume 6. Why not have Adam in this story start out as good as of his first appearance, and then we see his descent throughout the story? People still like Adam even though he was pretty damn monstrous in most of his appearances, so even more would probably like him if we actually start with Adam as a good character from the get-go. Moving on to the whole Ruby/Yang thing...why change that? I find it rather refreshing that these are siblings with no ill will, no rivalry, no dumb drama between the two of them. They get along rather well and are basically best friends. That's nice, wholesome, and really seems a hell of a lot less cliche then competing siblings, which is the majority of sibling relations in fiction. The outfit changes...that seems like the person has a little bit of a chip on their shoulder about...something. They want RWB to be more modest (for no specified reason) but Yang to be skimpier? That seems more then a little weird to me. The random age/species/name changes...they don't really matter, nor do they make it better, unless there's solid reasoning behind them. There is none. How does any of that make the story better? Why the hell would Ren and Nora be spies? Spies for whom, and why? Beacon Academy is now the Church of Beacon...but is it still a Huntsman academy? What actually happens there, or is it still basically the same Beacon, just renamed. Name changes don't really matter that much. How does its function change? What difference does that make to the story? These are the things are rewrite should focus on. Not just changing the name and appearance of everything. All the stuff about governments and religions...doesn't really sound all too great. Why would a religion debate whether or not killing the soulless monsters who want to kill all of humanity is moral? The dumb rename for Grimm implies they're still exactly the same as they are in canon, so nothings really changed there. It just sounds like the writer is trying to put in moral greyness everywhere they can, but not actually putting forward why its grey. He's just saying "People disagree about this" or "This is controversial" in a roundabout way, but not actually getting into what the opposing views are. Like Pyrrha being infamous for her fathers political views. What political views, and why are they unpopular? More importantly, she can still be a star athlete and have a controversial father. One does not exclude the other. There's a bunch of other character changes that seem pointless and doesn't improve anything, like Sun and Penny. What does changing them do to anything? How does it make the plot better? Blake being a straight up Ninja...good gods how horribly cliched that would be if Blake is just a copy-paste ninja, wearing entirely Japanese clothes, using entirely Japanese weapons. Literally the easiest and most generic anime/fanfiction character possible. Pass. All that nonsense about lost technology...nah. It works perfectly in canon to have Kingdoms with a technological disparity, because countries in real life, especially going through the industrial and early modern ages, had huge technological disparities between them. Also, calling this bygone age "The Imperial Era", having it end in "The Fall" and the end result being rare, ancient and ill-understood technology that anachronistic states fought over all seems a little too similar to Warhammer 40,000 for me. Probably wasn't intentional, but seems that way to me. But the biggest and most important thing about this whole mess is that it doesn't even "fix" RWBY, its not even really RWBY at this point. Its a story that just copies and pastes some elements of RWBY then throws the rest out for some other stuff. There's no real suggestions about rewriting scenes or story lines, no reworked characters arcs, except for some light stuff with Ruby/Yang and Adam. There's no ideas about how the series grand conflict would be changed, or even what it is. Is this RWBY if it followed them through Beacon for 4 years? RWBY if they spent more time doing actual monster hunting? RWBY if the kingdoms were at war, or a combination of the above? Is this RWBY with literally the exact same plot, but a different world? Tl;dr: This isn't RWBY, but better, this is a totally different story and world using RWBY names.

One thing i dont understand abort your new Rwby is What is the over all plot, What are the themes ?

Yeah let's make sure no real life politics is in RWBY because it's forced, unnecessary, bad writing, and nobody likes it. Plus there may be a hidden agenda behind it.

man, youtube's copyright system has been working double overtime it seems ._.

Anicism and Avanism sound way too similar. People would forget which is which.

Now this is hot

Why does lgbt stuff needs to be present? I mean that shouldn't be even a plot point, who sleeps with who should be left to the imagination

Can we make this go big in the community? When I saw a lot of RWBY Community went nuts and mad about the last season, it only encourages that the series is full of problem and it’s getting worse (so far) instead of getting better, seeing this video (and the previous one) open up a whole new world and potential, it’ll be great to actually have it as an actual story written (and maybe drawn)! Btw You deserve more subs and View You rocks!!

For the part about who the target audience was in RWBY former. I think that RWBY was supposed to be a beat em show with amazing fight choreography and over the top weapons, that was the appeal of the show ( at least the 1st 2 vol.) hence why the over all story and layout was generic. There's a RU-vidr called Gigguk that had a discussion on RWBY when it was going through it's " is it really anime though?" phase, and he comments on how rediculous the weapons are, to where he says " the final boss is gonna have a rocket launcher that turns into an apache attack chopper" ( something along those lines) and I found that hilarious ( I recommend watching that video). In the later half of Vol. 3 rooster teeth decided they want to go for a more world building story rout and well we all know how that turned out.

I feel like somewhere in this conceptualized world, there is an individual that was remembered in history by the name of Oumi Mont, and what he wrote and had published initially by proxy was the equivalent to Sun Tzu's "The Art of War". Mind you, he wasn't a novelist, poet, or any other artisan for that matter, but he was damn good in how engagement of fights/battles/campaigns went, (read that in any way you will). And he had a clear philosophy on why people fought to protect. And this would go as far back as to how old the "Art of War" would be in conjunction with the "time setting" this world is set in.

After reading the comments on both videos I have not seen any discussion on Yang and how she comes to being on a team with Ruby, Blake, and Weiss. Does her original team get destroyed on a training mission with her loosing an arm. Do they drop out over time? This would centrally bring conflict to Ruby with Yang being basically demoted to a first rank just as the sister she is envious of gets in.

I think the White Fang should stay and become an arc for Blake returning to the White Fang after being sent to Beacon as a spy and the rest of team RWBY and JNPR try to get her back on their side. I have an idea with Adam being a sorta mentor to Blake, Ilia, and 3 or thereabouts characters (Neon[I think that’s her name], Velvet[pobably rename], and a sorta combination of Sun and Neptune as a Shark Faunus who’s semblance is to control salt water but it takes a lot of effort.

Adam should be working as the leader of the white fang just to hid the railroad from the public

13:43 Out of Spite Great Reflection This much Effort in such little Work Amazing Vibe Surprisingly Competent Overview

HAHAHAHAHA THE NEW VID GOT TAKEN DOWN IMMEDIATELY

I like that idea about Adam helping fanaus people escape in the underground railroad

I really enjoy ur format of this fixing up broken worlds and it's amazing seeing ur thought process behind these. Please do more, though that's wishful thinking cause these probably take forever to do but if you're going to make one again just know u'll get at least 1 view from me. Also, the next one doesn't have to be on RWBY I enjoy the show but it's pretty much dead now, I don't like what ur doing cause it's on RWBY but it's just how creative u are with these worlds rebuilding and how much better u can make these worlds again. Don't know any worlds for u to rewrite but any one u'll do I believe will be good on what i've seen so far. Please make more

Silver eyes could originate as legend or folktale from 'Ren's country'. It could be brought up late into the first arc or midway into the second arc as throw in with Ren and/or Nora chatting about random topics. Then later in another arc where Ruby explores the rest of the continent, someone from the Ren's country comes across an injured/ travel weary Ruby. He helps or tries to rob her and comments on her eyes. After the encounter she thinks back and realizes she had heard the story about silvers eyes before but didn't know it was a old folktale known almost exclusively known to local tribe within 'Ren's country'. Ruby later pieces together that Ren originates from that country and decides how to confront him about it the next time they meet

I imagine Torchwik being a mafia boss who stands at the top of organized crime which is easy enough to fit in to this setting, and Cinder I think would be best as another sort of protagonist who is maybe a close friend of rwby taking the spot Yang once had in rwby former

Silver Eye : well...maybe something bout ancient bloodline of people who have something to do with grim. Unlike power to destroy them like in OG , but power to control grim of some source. Adam : I agree , he start at railroad member but after sometime(in story not past) some event happened and change his world view. And he begin to go down a dark path, but as morally grey villain. He's first as "only self defend" , but after that event and gather some follower . He begin his guerilla war against those who try to attack his people . At least him and his crew still chill enough to not attack civilian unless they become a threat , but that doesn't mean he is kind enough to let any of aggressor go after messing with him and his group. Salem : ...Just pack her with the Grim . No need for lackey like Cinder group . Just her and advance grim/humanoid grim who act has her general and she is their queen. Oh and if possible , change her eye to become silver too . I would love to see Ruby find out what "silver eye" meant....and it's not a good one for people who know what it is. For short , Salem is ancestor of Ruby or something . But down the line one of her children (maybe Summer herself) want to live a different life and try to escape . Salem sent her general to pursuit and capture them but in the end have to kill them all but that's what she think . Last survivor came into contact with human and escape to human world without Salem knowing. And if you think why they didn't use their power to help escape , they already did...BUT!!!! Even if those who flee share the same power as Salem , the ability to control grim . They won't have the same authority as Salem so it won't work when Salem directly order their capture or kill. So basically it can stay the same as you write until event Fall of Beacon . Salem know about the existence of Ruby and try to capture her at all cost , She just want her great great grand daughter back(or at least kill her if necessary). And here is the different between OG and my version , My version of Salem love her family(those who shared her bloodline) so dearly but because their betrayal(try to escape)....even if it pain her to kill them she won't hesitate. She can't risk any possibility for someone who had her power to be on opposite side until her final goal was realized. To destroy god. Ozpin : Still kinda the same as his OG counterpart. But not as immortal ancient as in OG , he is the only few people who know about "silver eye" and it connection to Salem . He also the one who help Summer escape to human world(which at that time he won't know what special about her). He just one of many Huntsman who was sent to the east territory and by chance..meet Summer. And that is why Salem want his head.

The amount of changes put into RWBY Former by your "But Better" version are drastic enough to where it could potentially become its own IP if you just swapped around a bunch of names. After all, terms like Grimm aren't exactly copyrighted by Rooster Teeth.

I've never watched more than the first season of RWBY. I couldn't get into it and heard the later seasons (or volumes?) didn't do much better. But I got to be honest, this whole "RWBY, but BETTER" idea really makes me wish it was a real thing. Especially the conflict with Ruby and her sister leading Ruby to abandon her naive childish nature and try to be more of an adult. Maybe a more "game of thrones" approach to the characters. Like no one character is the main and any of them could die. Adds fear and uncertainty when dealing with the grim, making for much more emotionally gripping moments. Plus, going from an adolescent to fighting giant creatures would be terrifying. You could do everything right, but still something wrong happens. The whole concept and world building sounds really cool. If the thought ever came to you to somehow legitimize this, i would support it. I'm sure many would love to see it through.

Do you have any ideas for original characters that you would add with this world

I really like videos like this it’s so interesting to see what Rwby could of been

I watched old rwby for the monty fights but I am loving the setting for the story and characters

It's not RWBY when you change everything about the Series. Changing what made a character who they are changes what the Series is. Your ideas are great, but changing the RWBY world makes it not RWBY anymore. A great original take on RWBY. But the world and characters are completely alternate universe in comparison. Some lacked depth, others became nothing more than one-shots. Their is a RWBY anthology manga that adds depth to the team RWBY that the show lacks. It shows why Ruby is how she is. I don't have any negative remarks about your work. It's your take on the show. But if the RWBY series has hundreds of followers it's not for lack of story-board or character abandonment. It's because certain things just don't really matter at the time. Overall your "Revision of RWBY" is quite good. I doubt I could do that in just a 35 minute video.

I wonder how these characters would fight the Grimm if dust doesn't work the same way and aura and semblances don't exist.

Just a suggestion for the silver eyes power Silver eye is a dominant trait that pass down through the generations that allowed the user to wield ancient empire technology weapon/ vechicle. Like it grants the user a signature aura that the technology could recognize And add half breeds of the silver eye that only temporarily active it via only one eye turning silver when agitated or something

Is this where the RWBY 3.0 art work came from

I have an idea, if you will hear me out. What if, during an investigation both Blake and Wiess are assigned to, they encounter Adam and the other faunus trying to navigate innocent out of the country. They think he is a bad guy, considering the build up reputation of the White Fang, but after a quick fight with some Grimm that sneak up on the caravan, Adam and his brother (yes, I am giving a brother and he totally looks like White Fang Lieutenant) save them and give them a chance to explain. Adam explains he just wants to keep everybody alive and well, and the two huntresses say they won't reveal their secret, though Wiess acts more suspicious. Adam's brother is less trusting and says they can't leave without helping them with a small operation. See, for the past few days, the caravan has been hounded by a lack of Grimm, which is unusual considering Grimm do not generally help each other while attacking. Adam's brother and Wiess go to on a mission to a canyon the Grimm have yet to follow them through and set some explosives, blocking the only way through. Blake stays behind with Adam to help everyone in the camp get moving, and Blake realizes how much worse for her family things could have been, creating a strong need to get involved with helping them. Her and Adam bond over shared interest (there could be a scene were Blake stumbles upon Adam's collection of bird drawings and he gets embarrassed) and Blake gets to experience a bit of faunus culture. Meanwhile, after arriving at the canyon, Wiess and Adam's brother (let's just call him Cain) start setting up the explosives, but while they are doing this, something falls out of Cain's satchel. it is a red and black amulet with a solid dust core that starts rippling with red energy. Wiess confronts him about it and after a quick skirmish to wrestle it away from Cain, he says it was a gift from his dad before Adam was born and that it gives him the ability to understand Grimm speech. (we can go into specifics later) Just then the Grimm arrive and Cain begs for the amulet, which Wiess correctly assumes has been attracting them. She ask why he would endanger everyone like this, and Cain justifies it by saying how he thinks he can use it to control the Grimm and that the reason he came here was to see if he could get a better signal closer to the Grimm. He begs for it back and Wiess reluctantly does so when more Grimm show up. Cain puts on the amulet and is able to stun the Grimm, giving them the chance to barely escape through the canyon and trigger the explosives. They starting heading back to camp when Wiess gets a call from the people who hired her and Blake while they are stopping to rest. Right now Cain is acting unstable and attacks Wiess until the amulet is knocked of. Wiess runs and assumes that Cain and Adam are working together to control the Grimm and that they could be a serious danger to anyone if they lose control. She alerts her employers about where the camp is and does not tell Blake. After getting back to camp, Adam and Blake share a sweat moment and the two leave promising not to speak of what they have seen. The next day, news gets out that the government is in hot pursuit of the notorious White Fang, leaving Blake stunned and worried and Wiess relieved if not feeling a bit guilty. So, what do you think?

Ozpin being shady and morally grey sounds amazing. please do it.

My first thought for what silver eyes would be is a phenotype displaying a rare genetic trait, believed to be relatively common among devout religious warriors and heroes in the last age by the church at Beacon and other places, that improves ones ability to fight in a number of ways, such as: allowing one to handle extreme physical and mental strains; having a large boost to the effectiveness of adrenaline rushes, hysterical strength, and second winds; improvements to overall physical endurance and mental agility and precision (so as to help them keep up with their better physical capabilities and with formulating battle strategies). These aspects of it would not be very well known and would mostly be rumored about by religious folk and those who have seen silver eyed people perform great feats rather than scientifically tested due to the nature of when the benefits are apparent and the rarity of the trait itself. It is not a fully fleshed out idea, but the idea behind it is to both give credence to the beliefs of those who we would see regularly holding the trait in high esteem and to set Ruby as special from the rest of the capable fighters in the cast. It could be the only reason she is able to survive that deadly battle with Yang which is where the effects of the trait start to become apparent to the audience. I also had the idea for Ozpin to have silver eyes too, though it is a fact that he goes to some lengths to hide in order to keep as low of a profile as possible. Switching gears to Ozpin, I imagined him being a "chaotic good" character that is the counterpart to Salem. He would be highly manipulative and cunning, working towards uniting the human, and eventually faunus as well, to work together and destroy the Grimm totally. He would cause a lot of problems on the way to doing this, and would not be fully trusted by the main cast by the end of the second season. At this point he would switch to being a scheming background character (like Salem) that causes issues the gang has to deal with in the name of creating a lasting peace across all of Remnant. I don't know how well a character like this would fit into what you are thinking of for this version of things, but I personally always wanted to see Ozpin be a good-but-not-entirely-good good guy that has a great affect on the political happenings of the world. Other things I want to give an opinion on: Blake's parents would 100% know she is a faunus. There is no good reason for this to not be the case, and the simple fact of them knowing and not rejecting her makes for a decent baseline for their characters. Sun (or whatever takes Sun's place, since having a Sun-like character is a good idea even if you don't want him specifically) should totally be a human who cares about the faunus and is one of the first to figure out what Blake really is. Having him be blatantly faunus while Blake tries her hardest to hide her faunus nature doesn't make much sense, and keeping the faunus trait a rarer thing would have the discrimination be more understandable. If they are everywhere some people would start to see it as normal and that would work against the role they fill and the conflict they are supposed to generate in the story. Also, the rarer it is, the more reasonable it is for people to assume that it is a detestable mutation instead of a normal genetic trait. Adam Taurus could be a introduced of as a villain but later turn out to be a benefactor of the faunus. He should also keep his negative traits like getting overly angry at the injustices he sees and how he can be obsessive about things - and people - he cares about. Having him be upset with all the evils he sees yet constantly reining himself in to try to fix things through peaceful means like the Underground Railroad type idea you had would help him have meaningful and understandable short arcs that don't need a ton of time to set up and explain. I don't quite know how he should be in character interactions though. He could be a love interest for Blake that contends with Sun at a few points, or those characteristics could be limited by having his zeal be at the forefront of his design instead. Wow, this is much longer than I planned. Hope someone enjoys my thoughts on things or is able to use them to add to this whole idea. And I do think it is a great idea too, by the way. You should try to make this a thing yourself if you are able.

14:46 I saw an OLD Fallout 3/NV vid about this very concept "You can tell how much depth and effort and logic there is to a world if they answer where does the food come from?"

I keep thinking about the world and how it starts, and I think that If you were to write a story or make a animated series on this (which oh gods I SORELY want to do) you might want to start at the beginning. Where everything goes to shit. I also think that you could possibly put Ozpin in as a disciple knight of a long lost God named "Arura" (Where Aura originates from) who fought in the last battles of the empire, and for him to keep his position as headmaster of Beacon, but he's thousands of years old, and awaits the final battle for the future of humanity. Also, Semblances can be explained as "Gifts" from Arura, bestowed upon those who are "One with their soul" (Have their aura unlocked).

*Me, watching these videos, with no knowledge or interest in RWBY:* I don't understand A Thing, unless explained, but I'm weirdly interested and want to see more.

the white fang is evil, i totally called it, and i'm bringing you daughter back!! (indeed it is an amazing line)

Do you know what time it is? IT'S GANDALF TIME!

You know, I like designing magic systems so here we go with fuckin Aura. Aura is understood by scientists as a specific class of energy produced by natural lifeforms and understood by pastors as caused by wibbly wobbly souls and proof of whatever their divinity is. No prior record of aura has been discovered dating to before the empirical collapse besides some heavily mythologised stories of women who supposedly used it to influence the weather, commune with devils etc. These stories are basically viewed in the modern age the same way we view stories of witches but most popular fairytales in Marathon are about them, though they have no universal name. I like this because it makes the origins of aura subjective and mysterious and also provides a basis for old myth. People at large gained access to it after the empirical collapse. Whether this was some god's intervention, or the defensive response of human souls to the grimm or faunus infection, or even a result of a new cooperative organism in the microbiome (which I would mainly throw in to mock mindichlorians) is up to one's interpretation. The secret as to its true nature is possessed and heavily guarded by the higher-ups in large governments and the fortress monasteries because they both want to limit the amount of people with superpowers, for religious and political reasons. Whatever they do however, sometimes a random guy in the countryside just gains the ability to crush houses with his mind and causes a good bit of damage before the military can put him down and hush it up. As to how it actually works, in simplest terms it's energy. Different people can transform their natural aura into different classes of normal, proper physics energy and these are referred to as semblances. (I.E Ruby's is kinetic energy, Phyrra makes magnetic waves, Yang makes fire, Nora makes lightning etc.) Semblances are categorised, not unique, but within the categories people do different shit with their fire, or electricity, or force. Ruby's quirk could just as easily be punching people really hard but she chose to train to put it into her legs. Overuse of semblance destroys the body over time. Another natural byproduct of being able to use aura is that the body gets a surplus of energy, meaning aura wielding warriors heal a bit faster, possess a bit more physical strength, a lot more endurance and can survive without food water or sleep for a good bit longer. Aura also seems to have some kind of larger medium that covers all known land and allows some to intuit what's happening to other aura users their energy has mingled with on an extremely small and basic level. It's a popular saying that if you fight by aura, you die by aura, as even if the Grimm don't get you eventual overuse will. Uhh, the Grimm are also connected to it somehow? Like, having a Dark-4 Grimm around will naturally disrupt the auras of people close by it, and aura effects how the Grimm see you, but so much of aura is poorly understood that nobody really knows why. So it's a magic system that everyone has theoretical access to involving scientific elements that people get their unique abilities from by specialising in specific uses almost like fUlL mEtAl AlChEmI-

I personally enjoy the idea of Semblances still existing. Perhaps they could be a side effect of 'The Fall' much like the Faunus and Grimm appearing? Maybe Semblances start out pretty much useless or dormant, and Hunters are trained to bring out that power to better the fight against the Grimm. It also would help heighten their famous and celebrated status, as they would basically be superheroes. Since Weiss' Semblance is said to be genetic and known to the Schnee family, that could play into the whole arc about her bloodline being a curse to her. She's reluctant to use her Semblance because its from her family that she doesn't necessarily enjoy being associated with. I also think, in general, it helps add some more individuality to the characters and makes Hunters all the more legend-worthy.

The maiden powers should be introduced as a special ability found in 30 percent of the population caused from an apocalyptic event prior to the universe.

I think making aura a extension of the soul used to protect, heals, and strengthens the individual whilst semblances are more like signatures of the soul an unique ability that is more like an expression of that persons soul, and I also think that these concepts should be shrouded in some mystery with people not knowing everything about them or how they work since the source is the soul rather than anything immediately quantifiable.

With these two videos I believe you have easily earned a like, a sub, and a bell ring.

Possible idea for the sliver eyes as its a good fortune to be born with sliver eyes

This is more of a better discussion about your alternative world of RWBY & characters, then the official RT one that only care to talk about shipping.

RWBY is what western think of an anime... And make anime out of it... *WE NEED MORE **_JOJO_** like Anime!*

Thank god I wasnt the only one who noticed that rwby is being draw out to a breaking point.

Based on what you’re saying, I think you’d LOVE to watch “That time I got reincarnated as a slime.” The world building is on POINT.

Maybe being a fawnus or whatever doesn’t deletus parts all together. Four ears sounds like it could help Blake as a hunter and make fawnus traits a bit more “mutant-y”.

Silver eyes could be considered more akin to small noble families who have been bestowed the power of Gods light. They have a history of military service like Jaunes family where they can make the most of their gift. While some hold high commanding positions in the military of their home territories they are typically found in Special Forces and Squad Leader roles where they can have the most use combat wise. These could be dubbed "Silver Squads" consisting of 1-3 silver eyed people and hunter veterans for front line combat as well as search and rescue in unknown territory. Summer Rose could have founded Beacon with the Schnee family to bring more hunters together to help in the war effort and bring the nearby Silver eyed families together under the pretense of training the next generation of Silver Squads. This could pressure Ruby to make friends with the other Silver eyed and upperclass students so when she graduates she can work with them effectively to live up to her mothers expectations.

I'm not sure I entirely agree with you but I'm very interested in the world you built and would love to hear more about it.

Honestly, as someone who does enjoy the original show for the potential lore that comes out of it, and whilst I don't agree with certain elements you state within both this and the main video...Bra-fucking-vo on creating an amazing world like this. As someone who's been wanting to add my own re-write to RWBY for YEARS it's taken somethin' like this to actually spark my own interest in remaking the world of Remnant again. ONE BIG THING THOUGH: Yang, I feel that her as a character in this whilst being more of the 'one sided rival' could also be something of a delinquent? Like, she tries to get the attention of her family in whatever way she can, even if it means doing partially illegal stuff like going to pubs when underage and all that jazz. The fight with Ruby would of course lead to her wanting to seek forgiveness from her sister...but I think she would still resent Tai. Like, take what Raven is with the whole constantly done with everything attitude and put it on Yang...but maybe add a lil humour to it. That's just my take on it, overall ya did good!

A thought just occurred, while watching FMA funnily enough, maybe if you can’t figure out what to do with semblances use an FMA style magic system that anyone can learn and formulae can be carved into weapons to manipulate dust like Alchemy uses for generic matter. I could totally see Torchwick rocking a Roy Mustang finger snap flame alchemy for example

Holy shit, why the fuck have I only found this now. I have yet to see season 6 cause I just never got motivated to watch or pay a subscription. So then when I find this and go to the comments to invest myself in something I thought was so super basic is mind blowing to me that I am just finding this! I've not been this invested in something like this in.... wait I don't know, I can't think of a time. This is extremely interesting and love your take on this broken series. Hope for the best of your vision. also rip I got spoiled about Adam... shit why they do that?!

This is getting better and better

Music of the Spheres at the end tho👌.

really? no semblances? come on man, those are awesome! it gives a reason for every character to build their own weapons and fighting style so you don't just end up with "they had the better gun because they were rich, they win" or "everyone only uses the best and normal guns cause they work" add some spices to this amazing dish! just some food for thought *rimshot*

Did you wright this world in Wold Anvil or something because if not you should think about it. It can give us accesses and might make everything more understandable to the average viewer just a thought tho. Still love the work you have put into this keep it up.

They get their food from the desert vacuum!

It's funny that Salem's subordinates are only humans and faunus even though she's the so-called queen of the grimm

I figured out that the gang already has everything they need to kill Salem. Her immortality can be removed when she learns “the meaning of life”. They have a *allknowing* gift so take it to her and wish everyone in the room to know life’s meaning. Then rush raid her to death. It’s even too easy since Ruby can silver eye now.

Here's an idea for Salem and Ozpin: The event that brought the destruction of the Old Empire was Salem attempting to devour Ani a la the eclipse in FMA. Salem could be anyone from the past from crazy scientist to even the Empress of the Old Empire desiring to be god herself. During the "ritual" Salem absorbs a decent amount of Ani's but he escapes and is wounded, hence the destroyed moon. This incomplete "ritual" leads to the creation of the Grimm (who might be citizens of the Old Empire) and Salems transformation into the Grimm Queen. This leads to Salem and the Grimm to hunt down Ani wherever he fled and any "fragments" of his power dwell to complete her transformation into God. But because of her actions she does not underestimates humans due to the fact she was human and almost killed a god. If anything she can and will work with humans to get her goals achieved in a time that humanity is growing stronger, so much like in the show she seeks to divide them and weaken humanity as a whole. Ani severely weakened, is barely more than a human with who is immortal. He might have power but it would be very limited. In his years of hiding he would take up the name Ozpin. To me this would be interesting since the all powerful Wizard of Oz was just a weak man, but here its a weak human who was a god. He could be a teacher at Beacon who watches the cast grow. He would not have the same influence that RWBY proper's Ozpin would have except for maybe Qrow. Also no Oscar, we don't need that so no soul switching. The other "fragments" of Ani power would be The Maidens from RWBY proper, but here they would be more important the just keys to get some magical mcguffin. In this setting the instead of Maidens they are Witches/Wizards having remnants of Ani's power. Much like in RWBY proper these Witches/Wizards pass on there power to those in there last thoughts. These individuals are VERY RARE! They are often hunted down and killed for many view them as just as inhuman as the Faunus if not more so leading to a history of Witch Hunts in some of the more zealots areas of Remnant. It could be in this time of conflict some nations might be looking to find the individuals to recruit or be forced into the military to be used as living weapons.

How do you not have more subscribers you put so much effort in this videos

I remember listening to a RT podcast where monty explained that the remnant world map was originally a ketchup stain on a napkin that he drew continents onto. Good times, also cool ideas.