I'm a huge Carpenter fan, what influenced me most writing this one is the faceless masses in his movies- like Ghosts of Mars but also Assault on Precinct 13 and arguably The Fog too
@danielwilliamswriter that is a feature of his movie : Prince of Darkness, when the possessed homeless people are gathering around that old church. That is an awesome movie.
Bruh I hate stupid characters. Everyone at the wedding was torn apart. Maid of honor was torn in half. How would anyone see the bride survivor in her dress and think "Yea this chick definitely killed all these people in the most brutal of ways."
31:00 I knew it! I soon as the mc kept repeating the words- orders are all that matters. Like a song I heard long ago say- soldier is just another word for slave 🎵
Hey my Friend's at Team Cosmos. Please bring back the Theodore voice AI. He well it done a awesome job. Its not gonna be the same without him. Im sure other listeners feel the same way
I’m curious, how does this channel work exactly? Is it a collaboration of multiple creators with their own channels, or perhaps a team or something like that?
Story 1: Slightly jumbled military terminology, and really glosses over some important stuff (like how big their unit is, and some amount of suprise at suddenly fighting the people they are there to help might have been good). Predictable ending but well enough executed. Story 2: No world building at all. Monster attacks on this planet are frequent but its a tourist destination, but it also doesnt get regular traffic? They thought a bride had physically ripped an entire wedding party apart? How would they even suspect her? Is this a setting with super humans or cybernetics that would allow a normal seeming woman to do such an inhuman act? The military are completely unable to fight off recognised and known creatures from a nearby planet. But dont forsee the twist? And the creatures are completely unstoppable by heavy ordinance and fortified bunkers? Can't help but feel the ending was a rush job to close out a story that was intended to be mich longer.
This better be good....cause if it's not....I'm gonna cry.....!!!!! Weird background music...I'm not sure if it's AI....too many ads.... Ok so it's a cool story!!!!!! Big deal!!!!!
I've served with a couple of RL Women Marines who could cut it in combat and maybe even in command. They are virtual unicorns, but they do exist. And in Fictional Tales, I always prefer a mix of men & women; if for no other sake, then for eye candy.
Ok, so the narration isn't bad, the background sound effects are cool and help with immersion. But, none of that makes a poorly written story good. For one thing, if you don't understand military lingo, command structure, how they operate, don't write military based stories. You tell a team member to "take point", singular. As in one person takes the point position for the formation, to scout ahead of the main force and prevent the entire element from getting ambushed. You don't tell an entire team to "take point" as you stay stationary, I mean come on! Team lead would give the command to set a defensive perimeter, set security, etc. Aside from that, there was NO description giving the realization that the people they were there ostensibly there to rescue, had turned hostile. You're jumping straight into "so anyways, we started blasting", with no thematic reason why, other than they're apparently hostile without it being shown why. Sorry, but this is really, really bad writing, I couldn't make it 10 minutes without giving up. Do better next time.
The narrator speaks so slowly that I want to increase playback speed, but all of the characters speak at a normal pace which becomes too fast if sped up. Sorry y'all, I can't listen to this one.
