that novel you wrote in middle school: 

Oh it's you

In my ridiculous stories they were always some secret order training the younger generation to be “strong” and to develop psychic powers by…treating us like utmost utter shit 😂

@@wandaruth3833 dawg…”secret order training a younger generation to be psychics” is literally the plot of a thing I’m writing…

I hate it when I'm being chased by the jets from transformers and a bookseries about bears

@@zarkflappysheep lemme guess.... the Seekers?

no way it's that personality guyyy

hi fank jrames

Holy shit funny personality man

English teachers:

It's the MBTI dude!

Yeah, the war against "said" makes people afraid of writing dialouge.

I like that sleeping with your wife is considered comparable to humanity being obliterated.

A couple years ago i would scour the Internet for “100 synonyms of said” websites, because using that word was somehow the equivalent of summoning Satan and bowing to him. And now I don’t give a frick. Ahhh, the freedom.

“And now I don’t give a frick. Ah, the freedom.” They said.

- wattpad

Maze Runner

@@im4ft622literally lmao

@@im4ft622 As much as I did legitimately enjoy Maze Runner, it was guilty of this trope. The Reavers, the Maze, the Scorch, etc.

That's when it happened. _The Erection._

have you happened to have read the book The Testing

Every. Isekai. Ever.

@@majunior1944 No the self insert power fantasy part is way higher in those.

@@majunior1944 more like 99% self insert power fantasy

And a 100% to remember the name! Man Carrying Thing that is. I don't know his real name 👁️👃👁️

@@Shashank7170 No different from any Superhero medium. They are all power fantasies.

This quote feels like it comes out of a Max Payne Junior kids show

this sentence... it hurts me. It always did.

This comment is 10x more relatable than the whole vidéo

OH GOD PLEASE, MAKE IT STOP. THE MEMORIES ARE PAINFUL

@@kabardino1337 I thought of Max Payne too lol

Look it’s great to be creative and all, but also totally fine to look back and cringe at the utter garbage you created.

something chatgpt would say

@@higztv1166 I feel like you think you were either creative or funny. You were neither.

@@Rhewin 🤓🤓🤓

​@@higztv1166 😎😎😎

“I like the feeling of getting stabbed repeatedly.” -Your main character probably.

@@plumjet09 You just let your shoe knife raw dog you like that?

@@thekingscrown8931 You don’t?

I like to think the knife is embedded in the protagonist's flesh and they haven't taken the shoe off in six years.

It is soon revealed that he calls the time capsule that he and his brother made his ”shoe.”

The moment I looked back, I realized that I was drowning in the unwritten manuscripts of my dark past. If I wanted to escape them, then I would need the help of the Wizard...

So many started novels... none of them have more than 2 chapters.

@@alexf225 But you at least have an outline of titles for those unwritten chapters, right?

Stop coming for me this hard! LMAO

I feel personally attacked by this comment.

He has to jump so high and so hard to escape the deepness.

The Deep would be proud.

On an unrelated note, I'm 14

Deeper than he knew he was capable of.

@@rishidharan6294 m.ru-vid.com/video/%D0%B2%D0%B8%D0%B4%D0%B5%D0%BE-izGwDsrQ1eQ.html

Fuck, I already have all of the criteriums filled - HS Novel: Political and war story that was done in my own style - College: Historical fiction novel that kickstarted my entire passion project - Elementary: Zombie novel that was doing a parody of the genre and established tropes - Kindergarten: Hand drawn comic "book" about a dumbass crashing onto an island

The university/college one is written in the 'style of James Joyce' - nothing makes sense and nothing happens

@@deadpan904And the one you wrote in kindergarten has an average of 75 misspellings per page.

@@plumjet09 and only 74 characters 💀

"there was once a cat that liked to bye tings and it fell of a clif"

Well I mean, remember, he's talking about his face, so it makes sense

Good writing is just using a thesaurus to make every word in a sentence seem -fancier- more sumptuous

Modern journalism

use as many metaphors and similies as possible

@@plantnation5932 my English teacher made us study movie reviews to enrich our vocabulary because he said that even though he had been working as a translator and an interpreter for decades, he'd always find at least a word he had never heard before in every movie review he read.

Wait, it doesn't? /genuine question from someone who wants to be an author

The One Orb was a mythical legend, and some people didn't believe it existed. but i did. I knew the truth. i guess you could say i wasn't completely normal. i knew that was true when military army soldiers burst into our classroom out of nowhere

@@shradibop “military army” as opposed to non-military army

@@ch33les99 a.k.a. an angry mob

@@ch33les99 Salvation Army.

When I looked into her eyes, I thought I caught a glimpse of the orb but little did I know that I was sucked into the void of uncertainty and it’s only when I woke up I realized that I had a dream, swimming in a never ending sea with its pitch black, trapped in a sphere that was her pupil

Why are you attacking me

That just sounds like erotica

@@FreePalestineFromGenocideNOW They say you should write what you know

I wrote a romance once. Deadass page one 😭 it was slow burn

This is literally me, but with every ending of a story I wrote

We sure did

yeah lol

Were the "Seekers" invisible to most everyone except the self-insert protagonist in your guys' versions, too?

Humanity is a hive mind

@@chompythebeast Oh god, they were 😭

Levels here I didn’t think existed. But this is a very real skit. Too real. The reality shakes me down like a….oh God. I’m doing it again.

man carrying thing knows me better than I do

I did nothing but write pretentious fanfic all through my teen-age years, this skit physically shook me

Man carrying my secret shame.

@@demondeacon5175 cringeception right there brah

The bread is so bad that as soon as it’s taken out of the oven it immediately becomes stale and develops mold. Don’t ask how.

Also, foregone is a word. A very old word, but a word nonetheless. A quick google search would tell you that, an English teacher of all people should know that. It's no wonder so many kids are failing their classes if even the teachers don't know how to do their jobs.

Your English teacher was a failure of an English teacher. Foregone isn't even that abandoned of a word to say it's not real. People still say "foregone conclusion", meaning an outcome that's not going to be changed. For instance, your English teacher's failure as an English teacher is a foregone conclusion. Also, people don't talk like most styles of writing, even if it's not poetry. Everything is exaggerated in some way that isn't natural in actual speech. They're characters, not people.

Are you writing again? :c

Not only is "foregone" a word that's still in common usage, the present tense/participle ("forgo"/"forgoing") are also sometimes used as a synonym for "abstain/abstaining from". Although I suspect from the "people don't talk like that" comment that this specific teacher may have had some difficulty in correctly defining terms such as "tense", "participle" and "synonym". Technical failures aside... it was schoolkid poetry. If you're an English teacher and you respond to even the most execrable schoolkid poetry with anything other than encouragement and positive suggestions/constructive criticism, you're incredibly shit at your job.

​​@@IceDragon978 I've never heard of the term "foregone conclusion" but yeah that English teacher was a huge dick

Great memory

😂 i’m weak

this made me laugh out loud hahahahahah

That's cvte

Lemme read that bro

yep infamy for sure

i n f a m y

better to be feared than loved

@@Laittth Oh no, run! It’s the guy who made a novel in middle school!

@@Laittth did I use the wrong word here

That sounds epic.

This sounds honestly amazing

I wish I could find the floppy disk it was on and see if it’s as good as I remember

@@dixonbuttes so... did you find it?

@@daliblue_ no, I think it’s lost. Way back when I moved out, I imagine my parents assumed it was nonsense and tossed it. Mark my words, it was gold though.

no lie, that's actually a pretty interesting plot idea.

the government could use him very well

Now, I think I should end by mentioning his win in a red light drag race in a crappy car against another crappy car. Already used his luck but thought it was skill.

Nothing to run away from?? What about my parents? Society?? *The Seekers?*

Vomit your bad writing from your system right away.

Oh my god diary of a Minecraft zombie I swear I never thought I found find anyone who knew about that book

I remember in middle school when I wrote 2 chapters of my Minecraft fanfic starring Herobrine as the main villain haha

Like most avid book readers I have tried to write myself. After about 200 short stories I have come to the conclusion that I am great at world building but royally suck at characters.

Oh god, not the INCIDENT Edit: Nevermind, I was thinking about the “not since the accident” from Jeaney Collects’ videos XD

@@Maria.Mirabella Same hahaha

* gasps *

The Incident...that changed everything...Veronica was in the BEFORE TIMES...now it's THE AFTER TIMES!

@@Maria.Mirabella sauce?

What the fuck

Do it.

I'm impressed you kept going. I would have gotten bored after a week.

The angsty supervillain backstory that keeps going just sounds like doofenschmirtz

Bruh that sound wholesome

Can you write one where I make tons of money?

Aw that's awesome

Reality warping superpowers.

Did any of the characters die? 😮

That is the hard part

if it makes you feel any better i laughed at this

Parker istg this made me wheeze so hard, you're funny okay

@@PichuElric sick

Sometimes you dont laugh at your joke but other people can! I wrote "funny" novel back in the day tht i didnt think its that funny, yet i got multiple fan-emails complimenting how funny my novel was. Have some faith in yourself!

The Deathmen is a sick band name though

im sick and i'm laughing and coughing so hard because of this

You always have the plans for the big moments, but everything else to lead up to those big moment are _________

I just keep feeling more and more called-out in the comments here lol

So you're basically Steven Moffat.

@@87axal I laughed way too loudly at this. Absolutely brilliant

There are way too many of those. Young Adult and Pre-teen novels are kind of bloated and don't give people at that age justice in what they can grasp about life. So a lot of it is just publishers pushing hard-fan fics (usually people that already have a following on some internet forums). But when you look at good Young Adult fiction, it's usually novels that deal with hard topics from a teenager's mind: S.E. Hinton's 'The Outsiders' and Eiie Wiesel's 'Night' Come to mind. Even older novels like "Old Yeller" or the French classic "The Little Prince" deals with hard themes that some kids already experience in their personal lives but don't have the words to express it yet.

Damn. Never got past 5k words in the shit I wrote when I was 12. Or 13. Or 14. Or 15. It was at 16 when I finally reached a few tens of thousands of words for a story. Then I spend a year trying to make a second draft. Then I gave up. Then I got to about 20k in two other attempts at a story. Then I wrote a short story of 6k words this spring, which I really liked actually and it's the first time I've shown some of my writing to other people. Since then I've been working on a longer project again. I'm somewhere over 60k and I would estimate that I'm only halfway through the story. I'm also 19 btw.

​@@legrandliseurtri7495 Congrats on having written 60k! That's a big achievement. My latest project, which I spent months planning, is currently sitting at 3k words, and I haven't touched it in weeks. I think the problem is that, right now, I am too aware of how bad a writer I am whereas 12 year old me just didn't give a fuck and wrote anyway. Oh to be 12 again...

Me, I just get distracted by other things and never come back to it, ever

same 😆

or it's just your ability to recognize bad writing, but not the writing skill itself

​@@higztv1166This.

*Luc Besson:* XD

@@higztv1166that is the first step tho 🤔

When you look back on how far you've come as a writer but that means you have to remember that one cringe story or world

Dude are you an English major because 😭 I'm getting called out in an educational way I can understand and I don't like it

@@PichuElric LMAO English isn't even my first language but thank you haha

What’s wrong with proper nouns?

@@antfruit nothing per se, but if the reader is confronted with too many words that don't make sense to them yet, they start to sound overdramatic and silly rather than being something that sets up expectations and excitement

I still feel these until now i need to go to classes again i need proper training i feel sorry for my readers who read my fics

Why only dark haired love interests?

@@sehrish1837 because I took myself so seriously at the time I would mistake my personal preferences for objective beauty standards lol

I need this

Why does this sound like a fucking amazing, self-aware satire story lol

If this were a full novel I would hope it just ended on "The bugs win" without any sort of elaboration on the battle itself.

can you publisg this

Or writing the same story but with a different beginning.

This comment is a personal attack

@@primoridalspatula663 Noooo not the dozen beginnings......

Its more like idk how to continue the story or end it. All i thought was some cool scenes for a story and don't know how to continue it lol

Every middle schoolers write stories in different ways idk how parody could work

It would be actually really badass, if this somebody didn't just do simple parody, but write like a deconstruction of teenagers' psychological and existential status, all based in the universe of middle school novel tropes. Like, knowing how to use the tropes to squeeze meta narration out of it, not just making a joke of its absolute badness.

@@cothinker680 Well clearly from the reception of this video, there's a pattern of writing that middle schoolers tend to aim for. At least middle schoolers of the last 15 years of grim-dark, dystopian, gray, katniss-esque landscape of YA fantasy and Sci-fi literature.

@@cothinker680 man, you're literally writing this comment under an outstandingly good parody of the middle-schoolers' novels. Teens tend to write stories with lots of emotions, inner dialogues, mystery, fantasy and drama. Nothing wrong with it but they kinda misplace it due to the lack of experience. IDK why but that's what you like when you're a teen😅

Not exactly a parody (to my knowledge), but there IS a whole novel similar to this style, it's a Harry Potter fanfiction called My Immortal

“Who’s also 7”

dean koontz books (without the 6 foot)

In that situation I found it ironic, and I was so distracted I didn't notice the water going into my deep blue eyes. Veronica used to always tell me how pretty my eyes are, and how handsome I am, but everybody else thought I looked ugly. I arrived at the Tree of Souls, and I spoke in Yytivrian in order to unlock the mysterious, blue, glowing portal that the Old Man in Yogsdale told me about. I don't know how, but I knew that the Seekers were close, and I felt my heart beating faster and more intensely. Time seemed to slow down as I went through the portal, an air cold as ice going across my body, my hairs standing on end. They were right behind me, I could feel their terrifying presence. I remembered Veronica and, in the nick of time, that gave me the boost of adrenaline in order to go fully through the portal just before it closed. I heard a shriek, which immediately stopped. Now, I was safe. Except now I was in the Seekers' lair, where they killed Veronica. But now I have the One Orb, and I'm ready.

@@plumjet09 "I walked to school, uphill, both ways, on one leg! My other leg was starting a business."

@@kantraa I get that reference, I too use words.

Who the hell are *The Seekers* you're speaking of? Did you mean _The Seekers_ ?

_The Seekers_ who seek out the One They Seek 😳

Are they Dogs with human intelligence or Bears?

@@Celestial914 you would have to seek them out to find the answer to your theories.

@@Celestial914 Neither they are giant alien robots from another planet that turn into jets and are led by someone with the most grating voice ever

the seekers will probably come from "sector 1" as it is hunger games clone, and they will serve _The Capital_ while for some reason never making any attempts at a coup d'etat when the government is shown to be incompetent and detached

Veronica will not be important because she's dead, it should have been me though, but they got to her first, my emotions are like a noose of love around my neck, but with rope instead, the rope burn while it gets tighter around my neck made me feel like a cuddle.... Of love

"Xander was a tall, lean-mean kid, with a long, piercing scar running across his jaw; an emblem as to how dedicated he was. Dedicated to what, you'd ask? Immediately, you'd be met by a cold dead stare. Then unto you, Daniel would solemnly utter the words: "Many moons ago...""

Not enough description about the colours of Steven and Xander’s orbs.

@@anerrorhasoccurred8727 Oh yeah sorry. They were so blue… that they were silver.

I love how 'My Immortal' this sounds 😂

@@microdavid7098 Sounds like a Stephen King novel lol

Me, a fanfic writer, in a variety of grade-level classes: _you underestimate my power_

Oftentimes the complete tech illiteracy of actual, paid movie writers hurts my soul.

@@firstNamelastName-ho6lv my favourite thing is when they made an entire movie out of the myth that humans only use 10% of their brain

@@lmaolol6337 Oooof! What movie is that?

@@firstNamelastName-ho6lv Lucy (2014)

I can tell you were probably a fan of Maximum Ride.

Show it to me. For research purposes.

link it

i need to see thia

Send the link don't be shy

Thank god, all my fanfics has gone with the death of Ucoz servers xD

post 🤲

dude that's fucking fantastic

Holy crap thats sounds amazing

I genuinely want to read this

Holy heck that's great.

But present tense is always better!

I typically prefer present to past tbh lol

It takes a REALLY talented author to pull off present tense, and of course that's what they tell you to do in middle school because it's the "easiest"

I will literally go broke to the point of destitute and penniless, I will literally sacrifice weeks of eating to be able to afford whatever this will cost.

That would require the whole thing actually existing. Let's be real, this is the book we wrote one and a half chapters of and left unfinished halfway through a sentence.

​@@billyalarie929damn

"Or was it?" *VSauce background music*

I'm just picturing a video game character hopping down the hill to increase his speed because there's no run button.

The unnecessarily descriptive writing style made me feel physical pain

Please post a link to your novel so we can laugh

Idk why but ''double spaced'' actually made me laugh out loud.

My middle school novel was 783 pages long (I fell asleep on the enter key)

Wait why am I finding you here- hello

Is it still up?

@@giantpinkcat - Lord no, I deleted it lol. If I didn’t I’d gladly show it to you.

I'm in tenth grade and I just submitted a 5 - page story about a wolf murdering children and selling their meat to a cannibalistic witch, who just straight up chokes in the meat, which prompts the ending where the wolf gets arrested for his involvement in the dead of the witch because I wanted him to get arrested. She just asked to write a fairy tale.

@@matthiasdiallo538 That actually sounds cool lol

@@matthiasdiallo538 little red riding hood after hours.

Children surprise me everyday by how tone deaf they can be.

I mean, was the teacher really expecting a lighthearted story with that prompt? lol.

Why is that making me imagine a literal city just growing legs and going after some random guy

That is literally the plot of Mortal Engines lol

So this is all your fault then?

That's not an advantage

Because you never write

@@Inanedata -I do a little, but I rarely finish anything substantial- Why are you people on this video if you don't get jokes

@@Hedgpig Glad you never wrote anything🤢

@@user-vi4xy1jw7e You're going to look back at this comment in a decade and cringe

Ah, good ol' comma splices. The one grammar error I can't seem to get away from

@@Ten_Thousand_Locusts when you put, a comma where it shouldn’t be in a sentence

@@Ten_Thousand_Locusts i, kno,w ,,, ri,g,h,,t,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

A fantasy novel I was going to write had a dream sequence in the beginning that spoiled the ending. I was going to finish it, but never did. It also no longer exists, since every accessible form of it is gone thanks to me.

@@Ten_Thousand_Locusts eh, I think I’ve improved enough where I feel confident my writing won’t be shit. One thing I’m going to learn is that not everything should be 100% taken seriously in a story

Which members cameoed?

@@calowenby1654 a lot of magik and night crawler. But I found one recently that began “8:56 pm Xmansion “ and went on talk about cyclops yelling at jubilee to turn her music down 😆

@@mintghost Lol that's great

I don't remember who said it but someone on Tiktok made a comment about how in order to be "cool" at something you have to allow yourself to be "cringy" first. It really resonated with me as while I don't consider myself to be some blessed, show-stopping, prestigious wordsmith, I can definetly relate to the "climbing cringe mountain" mantra. Looking back, I'm grateful I made all those mistakes because I can now come from a place of understanding when I'm helping my students identify/fix them.

a society spy LMFAO

ACCURATE, I used to make my best friends write down their favourite powers just so I could make them “the best Fire/Water/Dragon Mage in the 7 kingdoms” 😭

@@anerrorhasoccurred8727ah yes my favourite element, _dragon_

@@anerrorhasoccurred8727Me who showed up with a period table (I can bend all 118 elements (only like 65 or so are useful))

same lmao

I wrote about a purple cat with a top hat who was a god of chaos (He also constantly broke the fourth wall)

@@Celestial914 bruh just accidentally made the Cheshire cat

​@@coolgamer7999I accidentally created the whole dwarf race without even knowing they existed(short people who live underground and create magical things). I was just inspired by Leo Valdez from the Percy Jackson series.

What did you write about?

You should go back to writing. I’m pretty sure that most writers produced bad writing when they were starting out.

@@Ten_Thousand_Locusts press x to doubt

Well that's a little mean of your family.

@@Ten_Thousand_Locusts nah mate, you're on your own of you haven't realized how bad your writing was back in the day yet

That's actually a pretty compelling opening, you can get a lot of mileage of out bodily fluids.

@@_Ciaran_Maher Was it blood? Sweat? Tears? Something else entirely?

@@unsightedmetal6857 probably all. That's why they used this general term. I would do this at least. And be really proud of my creativity and innovativeness

I think she was naked and fell down a hole or something it was open ended and gave no clues to how she got there. I think it was meant to be a metaphor🤔

@@unsightedmetal6857 ;)))

What about Mr. Sandoval’s 2nd hour Social Studies class?

Or Mr. Baker's 1st hour history class

or even ms. walker's homeroom

"Maybe I should start when all the pain truly began. The moment I was born."

Sounds more like a journal entry

I feel like this writing style would be perfect for a jaded or cynical character who's just given up on life.

Sounds like the average 1984/half life citizen

@@zabbee2323 I was thinking the last part sort of reminded me of something Max Payne might say.

@@0therW1z”Sometimes I dream about cheese”

These kinds of novels usually stop at chapter one

Lol I’m glad you got a good mark at least 😂

Terminator 8 looks amazing

Honestly, you are in the middle school, you are allowed to write however you like! Don't let that get to you!

Just focus on enjoying yourself and finding a “style” you like. Also get into the habit of planning your story first! Improvement will come naturally. (Oh and contrary to what your teachers say, “said” and “asked” are perfectly fine.)

Yeah don’t let the fear of being cringe hold you back from writing. All this practice and experience now will make you a much stronger writer later!

Man! Everyone has one of these, so clearly it's more of a "What to start with and improve on."

@@zenithquasar9623 True but I think it’s good to figure it out preemptively. It’s like learning from criticism in a way. Different than feeling bad about yourself or your writing. If anything, I think this will give them a head start and that they have the right idea.