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TOEFL Writing for an Academic Discussion - Practice Question with Sample Answers and Templates 

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Here's a video about the new TOEFL writing task! Call the "Writing for an Academic Discussion" task, it will appear on the test starting July 26. This video contains a practice question and a couple of possible responses.
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@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
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@SalihaMohammadi-hp2pg
@SalihaMohammadi-hp2pg 5 месяцев назад
Hi, I'm an Afghan girl and as you know that nowadays Taliban don't let girl to continue their lessons. So for continue my lesson I must pass the TOEFL exam and get scholarship in another country. Please I need your help to pass the exam.🙏
@asmaasy2252
@asmaasy2252 8 дней назад
You are one of the best explaining and teaching Toefl, big thanks.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 дней назад
You're very welcome! I am so happy to have helped a bit! When will you take the test?
@holynadahjl
@holynadahjl 11 месяцев назад
Always the best! From the looks of it filling the essay up with fluff is the way to go for people with poor grammar and expressions.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
Possibly. The e-rater is flukey, so another strategy is to simply avoid the sorts of mistakes it easily notes. I've seen some really poor answers get scores of 5.0.
@ronn-qo4lu
@ronn-qo4lu 11 месяцев назад
This video is so good for me to prepare TOEFL! Thank you so much for the video!
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
You're so welcome!
@user-zx9kj8ot8o
@user-zx9kj8ot8o 11 месяцев назад
I am fully convinced that social media influencers have a huge impact on marketing, especially among the younger generation. Since the use of social media has grown among millennials and Gen-Z during the last decade, it is evident that social media influencers would target these groups of people into buying what they advertise through their internet platforms. I believe that celebrities have a huge impact on sales because they are quick to catch up with current trends and many young people take inspiration from them in order to be trendy as well. Therefore, when a celebrity advertises a product or service on their social media, the mass audience would get the incentive to pay for the product, and thus it would make a huge profit. Thank you very much!
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
Nice work! I think this one would score about 24 or 25 points. There are a few grammar and language use errors, but they are not major.
@zikraaaa
@zikraaaa 11 месяцев назад
Thanks for this video! My response While social media influencers have had a significant impact on people’s purchasing power recently, I believe that social media are becoming not as influential as they were a few years ago. I can relate to both Jack’s and Emily’s opinions, but I would like to add that there are too many social media stars nowadays and furthermore any usual person may start their career as a blogger so the people’s confidence in products, promoted by influencers hardly decreases. But in spite of this fact, platform TikTok affects consumer’s minds the most. As an example, there are many videos of beauty influencers on this platform making hauls on what they bought at Sephora or other drug stores. After those videos it is very hard for consumers to find promoted products in stores because of a huge fan’s interest in the product or brand.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
This is pretty good work. There are just a few minor errors like: "are becoming not as influential" (just use "are not as influential") "any usual person" (use "any normal person") "so the people's confidence" (should be "our confidence") There are other errors, but you get the point. I'd say this one would score 22 or 23 points.
@hazemsoliman7394
@hazemsoliman7394 11 месяцев назад
Highly informative! Thank you.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
Glad it was helpful!
@Carolina-qj9lg
@Carolina-qj9lg 11 месяцев назад
In my opinion social media platforms such as Facebook, Instagram and TikTok abound with influencers who have a serious impact on consumers behavior. As Jack mentioned, people tend to trust influencer´s opinion about something without checking if the product meets quality standards. Moreover, companies are taking advantage of this phenomenon to control their customers through influencers. They send several products to these people so they agree on showing them on their videos. Most of the time, influencers promote products that they did not even try. From my point of view, people are losing their power to decide what to purchase because someone else is making a decision for them. Thanks a lot for your help. I really appreciate it I got 90 points but I need over 100. I have 5 months more to get prepared. I hope you cand upload more videos like these ones.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
There are some grammar and language use errors here. Like: "on consumers behavior" (needs a possessive apostrophe) "tend to trust influncer's opinion" (should be "tend to trust influencers' opinions") "that they did not even try" (should be "that they have not even tried") You should also try to use more conjunctions. Your grammar lacks complexity. I think this one would score 20 or 21 points. Do keep in mind that if you want much more detailed help you can try the paid service: www.toeflresources.com/writing-section/toefl-essay-evaluation-and-scoring/
@user-zf9qg7vc1s
@user-zf9qg7vc1s 9 месяцев назад
Thanks a lot!☺ My response While I appreciate the points mentioned by Jack and Emily, I think that the impact of social media influencers on consumer behavior is definitely important. First and foremost, many people spend lots of time on social media. So who use social media can be exposed many times to some products by influencers. Plus, influencers also have lots of fans as a celebrity. Their fan used to buy the products that the influencers promoted or bought. Sometimes they don’t consider usefulness. To illustrate with an example, my friend Amy always buys cosmetics that her favorite influencer buys. Some people, including Emily, may feel that influencers don’t have a significant impact on consumer behavior, but I think that influencer’s impact on consumer behavior is powerful.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
Can you be a bit more specific than "important"? That's really vague. Don't start sentences with coordinating conjunctions like "so." The e-rater doesn't like that. Note the missing plural on "their fan" (should be "their fans"). There are other issues, but I will leave it at that for now. I think this one would score about 22 points, but I am sure you can do better!
@constanzadelafuente8645
@constanzadelafuente8645 11 месяцев назад
Hi! This is my answer: The way I see it social media influencers definitely have an impact on the consuming preference of society. Not only because of what Jake states about how people look up to these mediatic figures but also due to how they tend to believe in absolutely everything they say. Moreover, I believe the problem is that consumerism is shown by them as an activity to spend your free time and not to satisfy basic needs. In my opinion, a solution to this issue is to educate adolescents in this topic since high school, by teaching them how to be skeptical and selective of what they are buying. If they are raised to be aware of what they consume, the impact of social media influencers will be reduced.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
This one would probably score 24 or 25 points. Your work is solid, but it sometimes sounds awkward and unidiomatic. I mean phrases like "the consuming preference of society."
@NN-qz5hs
@NN-qz5hs 11 месяцев назад
I believe that social media influencers play an important role in the selling process. There are two reasons to support this idea. Firstly, the cost of hiring them is cheaper than paying for well-known celebrities. For example, companies can hire 10 influencers from varied backgrounds for the same cost as hiring one famous artist. This action will provide more advantages for the products to be recognized by many people from different walks of life. The next reason is that influencers are more creative in introducing new products to their audiences. Social media influencers understand what their followers want; for instance, they can create short stories or host live sessions on their own accounts. This allows them to communicate directly and attract their followers' attention without the intervention of others. In conclusion, using influencers to promote or sell products on their accounts can significantly benefit companies.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
This is good, but it looks more like a mini essay than a post in an ongoing discussion. Try to use something like the templates I've recommended.
@enesmahmutkulak
@enesmahmutkulak 9 месяцев назад
Thanks for the video my response, I am on the same side as Jack. I think social media influencers have a significant effect on users. Firstly, an average of people spend 3 hours each day on social media. During that time they get suggestions from a wide variety of influencers, and they gradually embrace some of them and form trust. This type of relationship causes them to buy the products that the influencers suggest. However blindly buying products brings a really big problem, selling scam products. Since there are a high amount of people who will buy just what the influencer suggests, the companies can earn money by selling even harmful products that have not been tested or validated.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
Good afternoon! This is decent work, but there are a few errors. Like: "an average of people" (should be "an average person spends...") "brings a really big problem" (should be "causes a really big problem") "by selling even" (should be "by selling") Meanwhile, make sure your word count is about 100 or 110. I didn't count the words here, but your answer seems a bit short. Overall, I think this one would score about 22 points.
@banouehsanpour7023
@banouehsanpour7023 10 месяцев назад
thanks a lot for helping us💫
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
My pleasure 😊
@umutaimaarazykova5329
@umutaimaarazykova5329 10 месяцев назад
hello here is my response This is a challenging topic, but I think that social media influencers and celebrities with large number of followers have a huge impact on consumer behavior. I strongly agree with Jack’s idea that people who follow them and admire them will trust their recommendations.I would add that most followers of these social media stars are people who want to be like them. Consequently, if the celebrity shares products or services that they use, their followers would most likely like to use them. While Emily raised the relevant point that today there are a lot of different influencers promoting various products which makes it difficult to choose whom to trust. I half agree with her there. However, I would like to add that nowadays there are different advertisements everywhere and I think influencers’ suggestions do not differ from them. From my point of view, their promotion is another type of advertisement and helps consumers to learn more about specific product or service.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
This is solid. I think it would score 26 or 27 points. There are just a few little issues like "if the celebrity" (should be "if a celebrity"). Nice work.
@mohammadjafarimech
@mohammadjafarimech 11 месяцев назад
Tnx a million
@hunchoo.0
@hunchoo.0 11 месяцев назад
i have 17 days from now for my toefl ibt test..im nervous but ur resources is helping me .thannk u
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
I am so happy to have helped! Let me know if you have any questions.
@linspberry
@linspberry 4 месяца назад
Thank you so much
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 4 месяца назад
You're most welcome!
@rahinzarei2044
@rahinzarei2044 11 месяцев назад
Thank you Michael for this helpful video and detailed explanations. I haven't practiced writing that much before. I was mostly focused on reading, listening and speaking and I have just started practicing writing and my test is in two months. I don't know how much I can trust the e-rater. I have practiced four samples that ETS has uploaded, got 2 fours and 2 fives. I don't know how well I actually write. Do you think we can trust the score that the e-rater gives?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
The exact same tech will be used on the real test, so I think it is trustworthy. THAT SAID, on the real test you will also be graded by a human rater who could pick up on other problems.
@lanamoreira3183
@lanamoreira3183 5 месяцев назад
Hi, Michael! Thank you for the video. Could you review my response? While I appreciate the points mentioned by both Jack and Emily, I think that social influencers do have a very significant impact on consumer behavior. First, we are currently seeing a lot of brands looking for partnership among these social influencers, and the reason is not only because they became very popular among social networks, but also because their followers are committed to what that person says, does and what products they trust. Furthermore, Jack states an important detail about the veracity of these recommendations given by the social influencers. It’s likely that many of them act out of financial interest nowadays, rather than genuine taste for the product offered by the brand they are associated with.
@user-wo2ds9es3z
@user-wo2ds9es3z 9 месяцев назад
Many people nowadays are concerned about the impact of social media influencers on consumer behaviour. Though Jack has a good point of view that many people especially the young one are more likely to imitate and trust social media infuencers, another key factor to consider is adolescents have the desire to try new products, especially those that have been advertised by social media influencers. while I agree with Emily's point of view, I would like to qualify that despite the high number of people following the influencers, there are many people who are more aware when they buy certain products because they know very well that there are side effects and not all feedback is true.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
I recommend slightly shorter sentences. The second one really got away from you. Meanwhile, remember to start every sentence with a capital letter. Don't use "I would like to qualify." Instead use "I would like to add". I think this one would score about 21 points, but I bet you can do better.
@prachishah898
@prachishah898 5 месяцев назад
Thank you so much for the video My response I definitely believe that these new tagged celebrities: social media influencers actually influence the market as a whole. As Jack has aptly suggested, not only young social media users are attracted but also elderly people trust and buy through these advertisements. However, I believe that not all the influencers can be trusted, due to the role they play in these videos or photos recommending products but, most young generations benefit from discounts and coupon codes offered and provided to buy a service or product by the influencers. Furthermore, Emily has contended that it is cumbersome to trust the influencer but she is overlooking the broader context in a way that is advantageous to not only customers but also to miniature companies trying to establish their brand globally. To make a long story short, I personally believe that they modify consumer behavior through their honest and trusted review.
@marthalaurahernandeza.6971
@marthalaurahernandeza.6971 8 месяцев назад
While I appreciate the points mentioned by Jack and Emily, I think that nowdays social media influencers have a strongly impact in the endorsing products and services. Even if people is looking for a product they search an influencer on instagram or tiktok to have more options and feel safe in their election. Although, we have the possibility to read the comments from other people that have used the product before and sometimes we can obtain a percentage off with the codes they share in the stories, this is another interesting point for people that is looking for a product. However, some influencers have lost credibility because some people think that their job is to endorse as different products as possible to earn money and that sometimes they do not use the products. This is a challenging topic but I think influencers will continue influencing people.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
This is good, but there are a few little language use errors like: "have a strongly impact in..." (should be: "have a strong impact when they endorse..." "even if people is" (should be "even if people are") "search an influencer" (should be "search for an influencer") There are others, but I will leave it at that. I think your answer would score about 21 or 22 points. Try using something like "Grammarly" to get a better idea of the mistakes you are making.
@mariaelisaalmeida1021
@mariaelisaalmeida1021 11 месяцев назад
What do you think? While I was reading Jack and Emily answers, I realized that I agree more with Emily. Despite we have those social media influencers all day long doing advertisements, we are in a society that have lots of information, not only what Instagram or RU-vid says. I believe that when we are interested in a product, we look for other information and not only what the influencers says. For example, If I were alone, reading or watching what a famous social media influencer has to say, I would not believe in that at first. I will probably ask the opinions of people around me, people that I trust and know that have knowledge.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
This one is just too short, I think. I'd give it about 18 points. Try to state your actual opinion in the opening line. Don't JUST say who you agree with.
@afghangirl2758
@afghangirl2758 11 месяцев назад
Please, make more videos like this🥺
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
I will! Just make sure to sub to the channel.
@annrose1167
@annrose1167 8 месяцев назад
Thanks for the video! My response While I appreciate the points mentioned by Jack and Emily, I think that the public are not completely influenced by social media. Nowadays most people read and review the products before they buy any. As a result, they would not blindly buy any items online without good ratings. Remember that most people purchase only according to their needs rather than making any blind guesses, so they are most likely to check the authenticity of the brands they are about to buy. Some people may feel that online products or services are all true, but many of them will look into the product’s or services' quality before buying any. Thus, I believe that social platforms don’t have a significant impact on the costumers' purchasing preferences.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
This is really solid. I think I would say "the public is not completely" but I bet others disagree. I would also stick a comma after "nowadays" when it begins a sentence, but that is somewhat optional. I would use "As a result, they DO not blindly buy..." since that sentence is just a generalization about how the world works. Overall, I think this one would score about 26 points.
@annrose1167
@annrose1167 8 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources Thank you for the reply and the comments
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
My pleasure! When will you take the test?
@annrose1167
@annrose1167 8 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources Taking it on November 1st
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
I wish you the very best of luck!
@sarahfarouk2098
@sarahfarouk2098 9 месяцев назад
Personally, I can guarantee that social media influencers have massively impacted purchasing power nowadays. Especially among new generations and youth. I strongly agree with Jack’s point of view. Influencers have their own ways of attracting people and engaging them to follow their opinions and recommendations. For instance, I have a young niece, who follows a Facebook blogger, and she imitates her in everything. Therefore, she buys lots of trivial stuff only because she watches reviews about them on her RU-vid channel without even reading other customers’ reviews. The blogger’s feedback is so reliable to her. However, Emily’s opinion may be right with seniors or adults who validate and buy only what they legitimately need and also read reviews for each product they buy.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
Use the simple present tense instead of the present perfect tense when "nowadays." As in: "social media influencers massively impact purchasing power nowadays." Avoid using really colloquial language like "stuff." Try "products" here. Reviews are "of" things, not "about" them. There are other minor issues, but I think you get the point. Overall, I'd say this one would score about 24 points. Nice work.
@hanooone1
@hanooone1 11 месяцев назад
While I appreciate both opinions, I think social media influencers have a significant impact on consumer behavior. I totally agree with Emily's point that most people are smart enough to know what they need. However, sometimes the power of the advertisement makes you need something you are not thinking about. Additionally, the most targeted audience on social media comprises young adults, who are highly susceptible to these advertisements. Overall, social media influencers have a significant impact on our lives. Undoubtedly, that is not a good thing and we have to be focus on what we need.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
You need conjunctions! There is a lack of grammatical sophistication here. Try using both coordinating and subordinating conjunctions. I think your answer would score about 21 or 22 points.
@user-lk3cb1mu9y
@user-lk3cb1mu9y 9 месяцев назад
Could you please clarify if there is any additional time allocated for reviewing the task and responses in WRITING TASK 2, or if the total time is limited to 10 minutes, including both reading and composing the response? I appreciate your response in advance.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
Total time is ten minutes. That is ten minutes for both reading and writing.
@user-pk5rq4ye3b
@user-pk5rq4ye3b 11 месяцев назад
Thanks for your detailed explanation and tips. By the way, I have a question for your first example. Why 'While' can be used at the beginning of the paragraph? As we know, there are two meaning for the word 'while' a s a conjunction. 1. During the time 2. Whereas I guess if you want to argue against Jack and Emily, it is natural to use while for 2nd meaning. But, I felt the paragarph insist in the same way with Jack and Emily. Can you explain more about my question?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
In this case "while" is closer in meaning to "even though".
@manasabharadwaj
@manasabharadwaj 8 месяцев назад
Hey, this is my answer. Could you please tell me whether I need to make any changes? While I appreciate the contributions made to this discussion by Jack and Emily, I believe that social media influencers play a major role in consumer behaviour in today's world. Almost everybody has access to social media nowadays, be it teenagers or working professionals or older adults in their 60s. The world comes together and interacts on social networking sites thus making these platforms a hub to market products to a vast audience in a short time. In such a scenario, social media influencers play a crucial part in attracting a large number of consumers towards the products that they choose to endorse. These influencers have an enormous amount of followings and are popular among younger audiences that are often the target audiences for various brands. Influencers today have the ability to captivate our minds and bring us to buy something that we may not necessarily need. Although I agree that some influencers may not spare time to verify the authenticity of the products that they're offered to endorse, it is hard to deny the impact that they have on social media users thereby manipulating consumer behaviour.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
This is superb work. I wouldn't change anything.
@aaryaharkare8683
@aaryaharkare8683 9 месяцев назад
Can you also suggest an opening line for when we are agreeing with the students or making an independent point
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
Try something like: "I agree with xxxxx's idea that...." to agree. Try "While XXX and YYY make some good points, I think that..." to state your own point.
@mervanamohtaseb5747
@mervanamohtaseb5747 5 месяцев назад
here's my response : This is a controversial topic, but I personally think that social influencers have drastically affected consumers behaviors. When a person sees an advertisement done by their favorite influencer for a certain product, they will going to want to buy it no matter if they need it or think it's good or not. I strongly agree with Jack's view point about whether the products they promote are trustworthy or not. And I would like to add that as I've seen, most of the time people realize these products end up being highly unreliable. While Emily raised the relevant point that consumers are capable of choosing what they need instead of what's promoted, she neglected to mention that a lot of costumers unconsciously make those decision. So, to sum up, I believe that influencers have definitely changed our decision making abilities.
@dinaolz.gadisa9166
@dinaolz.gadisa9166 11 месяцев назад
Thank you Michael
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
My pleasure! When will you take the test?
@dinaolz.gadisa9166
@dinaolz.gadisa9166 11 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources Hello, Michael Thank you once more! I'll actually take the exam on August 5th.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
Let me know if there is anything I can do to help before then!
@dinaolz.gadisa9166
@dinaolz.gadisa9166 11 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources Thank you very much, Michael
@cagrfatihcelik2871
@cagrfatihcelik2871 11 месяцев назад
My response The rising of social media influencers also affect the advertisement sector and the effects of these influencers on consumer’s behavior has generated much discussion in recent years. My personal belief is that they have a huge impact on society. Because they are usually followed by the people who find them sincere and warm. So the followers have a tendency to trust them and the tendency makes easier for them to buy the products which the influencers have promoted. But, I also understand the concerns of Jack over reliability of the influencer’s comments, but I think that he misses another crucial point that most of the influencers also use the products for some time before they promoted it. Therefore, they are also one of the consumers and if they continue to use it, this shows the reliability of their support to the brand.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
I think this one would score about 20 points.
@saeedupdate8311
@saeedupdate8311 11 месяцев назад
Social media influencers have become increasingly popular in recent years, and their impact on consumer behavior is undeniable. With millions of followers on platforms like Instagram and TikTok, influencers have the power to sway people’s opinions and purchasing decisions. For example, a study by the Influencer Marketing Hub found that 63% of consumers trust influencers more than traditional advertising. This is because influencers are often seen as more authentic and relatable than celebrities or brands. Additionally, influencers can provide detailed reviews and recommendations for products, which can help consumers make informed decisions. However, there are also concerns about the authenticity of influencer content and the potential for misleading advertising. Despite these concerns, it’s clear that social media influencers are here to stay and will continue to play an important role in shaping consumer behavior.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
I would likely give this a somewhat low score. Maybe 22 points. Your answer lacks a clear position or "thesis." It seems to consist of random sentences without a coherent argument. The good news is that your grammar is really strong.
@saulabrahamgranadoscarmona6611
@saulabrahamgranadoscarmona6611 10 месяцев назад
I agree with Jack because nowadays, there are a lot of famous influencers on social media who are paid BY big companies to they endorsing their products. My personal belief is that if influencers had not existed, then people would buy fewer things. There are a lot of people who buy certain things only because their favorite influencer is promoting them. In addition, it is very common that people spend a lot of time on the Internet looking for something to buy. I think it is a kind of addiction. For example, it is well-known that people who spend a lot of time on the Internet, also buy more stuff, even when they do not need the things.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
I think this one would score about 22 points. A few things are worth mentioning: 1. Just write one paragraph. Smush all of this together. 2. Watch out for typos like "BY." 3. You should have written "to endorse their products." There are more errors and issues, but you get the point!
@thecaptainindia9790
@thecaptainindia9790 9 месяцев назад
Thank you for ideas. My response - The topic of Social media celebrity has generated much discussion in recent years. My personal belief is that social media influencers do not possess much talent, so I would not consider them role models for the society. I must admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. I remember when I was in high school, my classmate Rina started her won social media account, where she used to show her luxurious life. Her father was a Pilot and subsequently, he collected a lot of wealth. She does not have any talent of her own and she just takes pride on her father's money. This negatively impacts the life of kids who consume her content and feel sad about their lives. Especially, children from the lower strata of the society face stress from such type of content. To add, I totally agree with Emily's point about the numerous influencers who promote different product, many times this influencers take advantage of the competition between various companies and charge more money for promotion. For instance, Rajdeep star, an influencer, endorses both Puma and Reebok which have competitive interests. To sum up, I do not prefer social media influencers as celebrities.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
I think this one would score about 23 points. Your grammar is decent, but there are a lot of sloppy typos like "Social" and "won" and "Pilot." Be careful.
@Camila-mz7rm
@Camila-mz7rm 9 месяцев назад
Thanks for the video my response, Personally, I believe that social media does have an impact on the goods and products we consume. I agree with Jack’s thoughts, in this new era we live in, influencers have become almost like movie stars. Take the Kardashians as an example, they have millions of followers on their platforms and charge hundreds of thousands of dollars to post stories or pictures with a specific brand. We might ask why? The answer is simple: because they drive sales. The vast majority of people want to buy, wear, and consume what these celebrities do. Regarding Emily’s comment, I think generalizing that most people are smart enough could be a misconception. Data shows that most users of these platforms are young people who can easily be influenced, and manipulated.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
This is okay, but there are a lot of grammar and punctuation errors. You should resist the urge to use so many commas. You should have just used a period after "I agree with Jack's thoughts" and "take the Kardashians as an example." I think this one would score about 21 points, but I think you can do better. Keep practicing!
@user-rg2sl4gn4v
@user-rg2sl4gn4v 11 месяцев назад
Please make more videos about TOEFL essential
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
Really? I didn't think that was so popular...
@user-rg2sl4gn4v
@user-rg2sl4gn4v 11 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources some universities accept it and it's more affordable.
@Sureshkumar-zy8tf
@Sureshkumar-zy8tf 11 месяцев назад
Can we include personal examples related to the topic
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
Yes, I think so.
@zs7487
@zs7487 11 месяцев назад
Thanks a lot for your great effort.🙏🏽 However, I think ETS made this change because they can't handle the influx of students using AI to learn and ace the independent question. So, they're hustling to cash in by tricking students into thinking this is an upgraded deal. It's a money-making machine company. Ever since the new executive director took over, ETS has been making all sorts of messed-up changes. That's why more universities are accepting Duolingo and IELTS now.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
The changes are certainly a response to the massive popularity of the Duolingo and Pearson tests. ETS is likely desperate to get some of their marketshare back. It is worth mentioning that ETS has always been a revenue-seeking organization. Entire books were written to criticize ETS for that even before I was born.
@Eli-bz4vv
@Eli-bz4vv 4 месяца назад
I have a question, Can I write something like this “ while I appreciate the points mentioned by Emily, I agree with Jack’s idea that…” or should I just say “ I agree with jack’s idea that…” and not even mention Emily’s pint of view. I am planning on sending my all assay to your e-mail but I want to check with you before. Thank you so much for all the you do.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 4 месяца назад
Both are totally fine.
@Reyhane-ys2eu
@Reyhane-ys2eu 7 месяцев назад
Hi Michael, Thanks in advance for your valuable feedback. In my opinion, no one can turn a blind eye to the fact that people are impressed by influencers. I strongly agree with Jack's idea that young people count on celebrities a lot. I'd add that influencers are role models for youngsters, and they follow and imitate their standpoints blindly. Youth tend to keep up with the new trends in society, so influencers' comments are of great importance to them. While Emily raised the relevant point that most people make wise decisions about what to purchase, she did not mention that juveniles believe everything. As they are less equipped and experienced, they are unable to distinguish an authentic point of view from a destructive one. For example, when I was a twelve-year-old child, a popular singer advertised a cell phone on TV and showed it much better than it really was. Although it was an ordinary product, the majority of my classmates purchased that cell phone.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 7 месяцев назад
This is a strong response. There are a few grammar errors here, but they are very minor. I think this one would score about 26 or 27 points. Great work.
@Reyhane-ys2eu
@Reyhane-ys2eu 7 месяцев назад
@@ToeflresourcesThank you so much for your feedback.
@Reyhane-ys2eu
@Reyhane-ys2eu 7 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources The maximum score I can get in reading, listening, and writing sections is 26. How can I boost my score?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 7 месяцев назад
I don't have an easy answer for that,@@Reyhane-ys2eu . You need to study and practice.
@linelazrayev9355
@linelazrayev9355 9 месяцев назад
Hi, thank a lot for the video. here is ny response While i appriciate the points mentioned by both Jack and Emily, i think that at the beginning of social media and influencers back to 2016, people did not really understand what is behind all of this inuncers they were not aware that those who they trust and follow benfith. However, years passing by and people start to understand that some of these infulncers promoting different types of think that do not work together, For example when influencers that i follow once recommended about retinol serum and moth later she recommend about other serum and said she used them together which as a result cause about thirty teenangers girls to burn their face and eventually this teeangers went to court. In the end, regarding some cases people understand they should not trust any influencer.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
This one is about the same as the other one you posted. Focus on grammar and language use.
@user-ll2kf4su5e
@user-ll2kf4su5e 9 месяцев назад
Thanks for the video. My response. The topic of effect social media influencers on consumers is much debatable these years. I believe that people nowadays are addicted to social media, and try to follow most of the things displayed on these platforms. Social media influencers take advantage of these scenarios and can be biased in promoting a product for their financial gains. I understand Emily’s point that the number of such influencers is too high. However, she is missing a critical point that even the number of people using these social media platforms is proportionally higher. These influencers can significantly affect the consumers selection of items for sale and can be hired by companies to increase the sales of their products. People nowadays need someone whom they can trust. To sum up, these are the reasons why I believe that social media influencers can sway consumer behaviors to a great extent.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
This is okay, but there are a lot of little grammar and language use errors. Like: "is much debatable these years" (should be something like: "it debated a lot nowadays") "most of the things" (should be something more specific) "take advantage of these scenarios" (should just be "take advantage of this") There are more, but I think you get the point. Focus on improving your language use. Study grammar. I think this answer would score about 21 points, but I am sure you can do better.
@user-ll2kf4su5e
@user-ll2kf4su5e 9 месяцев назад
Thank you for your valuable feedback
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
My pleasure! When will you take the test?
@Nur-to2sj
@Nur-to2sj 10 месяцев назад
Do you have online class speaking and writing part? My level is intermediate. Thanks
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
Yeah. You can contact me over here: www.toeflresources.com/sample-toefl-essays/contact-us/
@winrosegitonga740
@winrosegitonga740 10 месяцев назад
Thank you sir for the video.What do you think about my response: "With the rise of social media,a lot of influencers have taken it as a full time job where they promote different kinds of products on their platforms.I agree with Jack about influencers having a significant impact on consumers but I'd like to add that it can be both positive and negative depending on what they are promoting and who is watching.For instance,we have influencers who promote sex toys, don't get me wrong,there is no harm in toys but they don't have control over who is watching or purchasing.Teenagers might end up purchasing and using since a they want to imitate a certain celebrity.On the other hand,others may market something like land or a hotel which leads to a lot of people checking them out due to their massive following and the trust people have on them.But one thing people should know is that they do all this for money. In light of the reasons mentioned, I strongly believe that influencers have an impact on people's behavior.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
I think this one would score about 22 points. Your ideas are fine, but there are some grammar and language use errors. Honestly, you should probably avoid writing about "sex toys" in your TOEFL test. You don't want to trigger any "offensive content" flags.
@winrosegitonga740
@winrosegitonga740 10 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources thank you very much.
@ursulafiorelanavarro2074
@ursulafiorelanavarro2074 8 месяцев назад
I just have one question please. I heard that we should not use informal words in our responses. Meaning that, I would use "do not , will not , would not " instead of "don't, won't, wouldn't". What are your thoughts on this?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
It is totally fine to use contractions.
@BilalSarwar-bq6qs
@BilalSarwar-bq6qs 11 месяцев назад
Kindly make video upon speaking ❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
There are already a ton of videos in my channel about speaking. Just check the main channel page. :)
@user-cu4hm5up5i
@user-cu4hm5up5i 8 месяцев назад
How is this? Personally speaking, I think with the advancement in technology, social media marketing is on the rise and is reaching much higher levels than previously seen. These new "digital economic giants" referred to as social media influencers have a huge part in this upshoot. With new phone releases like the "iphone series", just anybody can become a social media influencer. Hence, I believe Jack has a point when he questioned the authenticity of the products. Many of the social media influencers are not experts, so the validity of the products they recommend can not be verified. Besides, a lot of then are more interested in the monetary compensation they recieve from the companies that work with them. Social media has become deep rooted in our society especially amongst the new generation. I believe the swaying abilities of these influencers is only going to increase. Day by day, parents are slowly losing control over the wants of their children. The average 15yr old would rather take advice from his favourite youtuber or tiktoker than his parents. This is the extent of things.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
This is pretty good. I think it would score 24 to 26 points. Your grammar is really strong, but your word choices are a little unidiomatic. That is, they sound a bit unnatural to me as a native speaker. Also, never use "15yr old." Write that out in full!!
@user-cu4hm5up5i
@user-cu4hm5up5i 8 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources thanks for the feedback.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
My pleasure! When will you take the test?
@jaahnavijaanu8797
@jaahnavijaanu8797 10 месяцев назад
Great video! Could you please take out a minute to rate my answer? - The trend of social media influencers has been on a rise in the recent times and thus, we have been witnessing a sky rocketing of endorsements on every platform we visit. I believe the influencers have a considerable impact on the consumer behavior. While I do agree with Emily on the point that there are too many people Endorsing different products, making it hard to choose from, I don't agree that most people are smart enough to refrain from buying the products. First of all, the products are meticulously marketed to target the buyers and often claim to address their issues in a better way than the other products in the market. For instance, hair care and skin care products claim to be all natural and chemical free to appeal to people. Thus, even when people are unsure about the authenticity, they might get convinced to give the product a try after seeing the advertisement multiple times. Because even when people think they're smart enough to not fall for marketing strategies, they could still find the ingredients and claims to be plausible and try them.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
There are quite a few errors here. I mean stuff like: "has been on a rise" (should be "has been on the rise") "in the recent times" (should be "in recent times") "a sky rocketing of endorsements" (should be something like "a huge number of endorsements") There are more, but I think you get the point. Try your best to reduce your error rate. I think this one would score about 20 points, but I am sure you can do better.
@drnavkiran7202
@drnavkiran7202 11 месяцев назад
Thanks a lot for great efforts, it is really helpful, can you post more of academic discussion tasks, where can l find ,on google or youtube, kindly guide n help ,need it ,thanks
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
I have a ton of them over here: www.toeflresources.com/toefl-writing-sample-questions-and-answers-discussion-board-questions/
@drnavkiran7202
@drnavkiran7202 11 месяцев назад
Thanks ,l will see
@mohammadamanalimyzada1462
@mohammadamanalimyzada1462 11 месяцев назад
Heyy Michael! Thank you so much for the great work you are doing here for us, all the test-takers. I have written a post on this prompt and am wondering if you could give me some feedback. Since i am from Afghanistan, I cannot do any online transactions so the only way for me is to use free resources to prepare my self for my test which i will be taking on 29th this month. I am of the convection that social media influencers, with a large number of followers, have a considerable impact on the consumers and hence their purchasing and preferences. As known to all. most of their followers are people who try to follow what these celebrities do and imitate their behaviors because of the trust they have in them. Therefore, if they advocate for a product on their social media platforms, the followers are also most likely to go and purchase the same good. On the other hand, if these celebrities campaign against a commodity, it will also have a significant impact on the market for such commodities. For instance, a few weeks ago, Cristiano Ronaldo, who is a well-known footballer, pushed away two bottles of Coc from the scene in an interview. This simple action resulted in more than 3 million dollars loss of the company's shares.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
I think this would score about 20 points. There are multiple errors like: 1. "I am of the convection that" (should be "I am of the belief that...") 2. "As known to all" (should not be followed by a period) 3. "the followers are" (should be "their followers are") 4. "the same good" (should be "it") There are more, but I think you get the point! Focus on grammar!
@mohammadamanalimyzada1462
@mohammadamanalimyzada1462 11 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources got you man!! Thanks a bundle
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
My pleasure! When will you take the test?
@mohammadamanalimyzada1462
@mohammadamanalimyzada1462 11 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources I am taking it tomorrow on 29th July.
@afghangirl2758
@afghangirl2758 11 месяцев назад
@@mohammadamanalimyzada1462 did you pass the exam? I have an exam in the next month .Can you tell me about your experience in the exam? Your exam was online at home or in exam center?
@Beerusgurung8200
@Beerusgurung8200 11 месяцев назад
Does a score of 5 from the e-rater ensure that you will get a good score from the human checker as well?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
No, no. The human rater doesn't see the e-rater score.
@mariacristinaenjutocrespo6043
@mariacristinaenjutocrespo6043 11 месяцев назад
hi @beerusgurung8200, I saw you replied to some of the writing posts, I am looking for practicing my speaking with someone else, would you be interested?
@Nisha-ib9sg
@Nisha-ib9sg 10 месяцев назад
and how do we come up with supporting reasons?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
Well, try to think about the question in terms of these four common categories: work, family, education, health That sometimes helps.
@yazminmartinez6952
@yazminmartinez6952 11 месяцев назад
I am doing practice of it.... but sometimes, I dont know that writer...
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
Do you mean the topic is too challening?
@ranas.4939
@ranas.4939 10 месяцев назад
My response is: If I were to choose, I would definitely say that social media influencers have a strong impact on consumer behaviors. My personal belief is that when a product is promoted, we see it on social media as it is advertised. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. For instance, I am overly influenced when I see on social media a pretty girl putting skin care products on her skin. I am, to be honest, easily convinced by the idea that the product in question will purify and enlighten my skin as it does for her. I understand Emily’s point regarding people having their own choices and acting towards their own needs, but I believe that she misses another critical point: the undeniable effect of idolization and social media. It is tremendously hard to step back and think logically when faced with a glorified advertisement, with a chilly music in the background. In light of the reasons mentioned, I strongly believe that social media influencers have a major power on our society, especially on young people.
@ranas.4939
@ranas.4939 10 месяцев назад
Should I mention both of the students' viewpoints?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
That's optional.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
I think this one would score about 26 points. Nice work.
@ranas.4939
@ranas.4939 10 месяцев назад
thank you so much for your time!@@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
My pleasure! When will you take the test?
@ChrisDMReloaded
@ChrisDMReloaded 6 месяцев назад
Hello , since i have to listen to the lecture , Can i replay that audio as many times as i want to write my summary? because it won't be always a question made by the lecturer or Did they change it?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 6 месяцев назад
I think you have the questions confused. This one has no lecture. Just reading. The OTHER question has a lecture (which you hear one time). Read this page: www.toeflresources.com/writing-section/
@levsiii
@levsiii 9 месяцев назад
I am open to any feedback! I believe that social media influencers are the strongest marketing force in our generation. People became easily influenced by others, especially individuals with huge followers and viewers. This can be either positive or negative. For example, Jack mentioned a good point by questioning the authenticity and realism of social media. Many influencers care about nothing other than money, which drives them to promote low-quality and poor products, and their followers can be easily tricked by that. However, these same influencers can advertise helpful products that could change people's lives. So, I assume we should raise awareness on whom and what to trust on social media and never be tricked or easily influenced by others. And always have an independent opinion.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
I think you mean "people ARE easily influenced by others" in the second sentence. Otherwise, I like this a lot. I think it would score about 25 or 26 points. Nice work. Just avoid starting sentences with coordinating conjunctions like you did at the very end.
@levsiii
@levsiii 9 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources thank you so much! this was really helpful and motivating ❤️
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
Happy to help,@@levsiii ! When is your test?
@levsiii
@levsiii 9 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources this Saturday actually
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
Good luck,@@levsiii ! Come back and let me know the result.
@raynercardoso_7038
@raynercardoso_7038 11 месяцев назад
If I’ll be taking the test on 26th of July, which pattern will the examination follow?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
According to ETS, yes.
@raynercardoso_7038
@raynercardoso_7038 11 месяцев назад
The new patter right?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
@@raynercardoso_7038 yes.
@somalkayani7584
@somalkayani7584 11 месяцев назад
While the growing significance of social media influencers on consumer behavior is undeniable, I disagree with the point that it holds power to shift the consumer’s perspective. It just makes today’s consumer more aware about the options available. This trend is in favor of product or service providers as they now have a better platform to market their products or services that can reach to millions, and it is a cost-effective marketing strategy as well. In addition to this, this era is of intelligent consumers. They understand that there is a tendency for influencers to be biased towards a product. Therefore, service or product providers should consider this new avenue an opportunity rather than a threat.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
I think this one would score about 23 points. There are minor errors throughout the answer, like: "today's consumer" (should be "today's consumers") "aware about" (should be "aware of") There are others, but I think you get the point.
@somalkayani7584
@somalkayani7584 11 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources Thank you so much! Your input means alot.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
My pleasure!
@edwinquinonespardo4768
@edwinquinonespardo4768 11 месяцев назад
Thanks for the video!! Could you please check my answer While I appreciate the points made by Jack and Emily, I believe that nowadays influencers have a large influence on how we buy products and services. Years ago, marketing companies focused their efforts on creating unique TV advertisements so people could buy their products and services. However, that has changed with the expansion of platforms such as RU-vid or Instagram, whereas if you live in New York or Antartica, you probably pass your free time watching your favorite influencer on these platforms. As a consequence, many of us and even more of the younger generation are susceptible to being influenced by these influencers, who do not hesitate to promote companies products without making sure about their effectiveness. Overall, nowadays influencers have great power, and I do believe they make a difference when talking about consumer behavior and marketing.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
This is fantastic work. I think it would score about 28 points. Well done!
@drnavkiran7202
@drnavkiran7202 10 месяцев назад
Sir, kindly tell ,do we have to read the entire paragraph of each student or we can read first 1-2 sentences from each student's reply. Can this serve the purpose? Do guide ,thanks
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
I think you should read them all the way through, but quickly. Don't worry TOO much about comprehension. Just skim.
@drnavkiran7202
@drnavkiran7202 10 месяцев назад
Thanks sir for giving your time
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
My pleasure! When will you take the test?
@drnavkiran7202
@drnavkiran7202 10 месяцев назад
I plan to give shortly ,little held up, but going through all uour materials especially writing ,thanks
@mariaelisaalmeida1021
@mariaelisaalmeida1021 11 месяцев назад
hey, guys! You've been very helpful! Can you see more texts that I made? Economic growth and protecting the environment I believe that the question made by our professor is very interesting and polemic. The importance of economic growth and protecting the environment are two essential thing that every person must be concerned. In my opinion our top priority is to protect the environment. Since we think of the nature and the lives that are involved on this, being sustainable, we have our first problem solved. Then, naturally the economy will be articulated with our future. It’s a big problem to human beings when they prioritize economic growth instead of thinking and protecting the environment. Because of this thought, we should think: how could we live in this planet, if we don’t take care about the environment? Soon, there will be no planet, no life at all. The ethics of targeted advertising Our professor brought up a polemic discussion concerned with the ethics of targeted advertising. Our technology has advanced, and we now face some problems and not only happiness. For example, the targeted advertising phenomenon happens every time in our daily lives. Let’s think of a situation where a person is interested in a product that is being sold on the internet. When a person starts to look for the best price and store to buy, suddenly a lot of targets advertising starts to pop up on the screen. The person doesn’t want that, but this is above her choice. Therefore, I agree that there is a big ethical problem that has no way to resolve, unless you restart all your history on the website used to search for the product. The effects of social media I believe that social media and its effects on human lives is an important issue, that should be discussed with the population in general. We are here in an academic place, so we must know that we are thinking different from people in general. We have backgrounds, studies that help us to discuss and help us to have a critical look about this issue. For instance, if I came out with this polemic issue to know my mother’s opinion, probably she wouldn’t care about it. Social media to her is a place where she talks to her friends form childhood that no longer live near here. On the other hand, if this question will be brought in a class at the university, the controversy will be big, since we will be dealing with young people that use social media every day, since they were kids and don’t know how to deal with life without it.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
Ah... just post one at a time. I want to make sure everyone gets a chance to get some comments. :)
@mariaelisaalmeida1021
@mariaelisaalmeida1021 11 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources ok! I’m sorry! I can’t change what I have sent. Can you see the first text?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
Uh... if I haven't already checked it you should just post again.
@manishamehta1964
@manishamehta1964 11 месяцев назад
Thank you for this video. Can you please rate my response? My response In my opinion, social media influencers have a significant impact on consumer behavior. I agree with Jack's point that people trust their recommendations. I would add that if we check the product online they only mention ingredients, and how to use them, and the product is nice to use. But influencers will provide honest reviews about products after using them. So, this is the advantage for us to know whether we want to buy that product or not. For instance, I want to buy makeup products say a foundation. First, I will check with my influencer person's page which brand she is using and what's the review. After that, I will buy that product for myself. Second, we sometimes get discounts if we use their promo code which is cheaper than buying from the store Therefore, for those two reasons, I will get honest reviews, and save money I feel social media influencers have a remarkable influence on people.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
Stop starting sentences with coordinating conjunctions. Use them between clauses. That will please the e-rater. This reads a bit like a mini essay rather than a message board post. Consider follow the structure recommended in my guide: www.toeflresources.com/new-toefl-writing-task-description-and-guide/ I think this one would score about 19 points.
@raptorhacker599
@raptorhacker599 2 месяца назад
are you that miCHAEL? FROM the official video?
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 2 месяца назад
Sadly, no. That is some other dude.
@seo7467
@seo7467 10 месяцев назад
Thank you for your videos! It helps me a lot. Could you please give me feedbacks on my answer? There are many discussions about social media influencers impacting consumer behaviors and purchases. Personally, I believe that celebrities have been affecting the way that consumers perceive goods and services. Firstly, as influencers these days are not only people who are famous, but are people with large numbers of fans who love them and would like to imitate them. This could mean that consumers are likely to follow what the influencers have been exposing on their own social media accounts, based on their admirations. It is true that most people are smart enough to choose their own decisions, however, it is true that admiration towards the celebrities are increasing as well, influencing the choice of customers largely. This shows that people with large followers on social media must be cautious of what they are posting, with the responsibility that they could alter audiences’ viewpoints and choices.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
I think this one would score about 21 points. Your ideas are fine, but the sentences are hard to follow due to grammatical errors and unidiomatic word choices. This task might be easier for you if you make your arguments specific rather than broad. Try talking about specific examples of products and how they are promoted.
@seoyoonlee5832
@seoyoonlee5832 10 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources Thank you for the feedback!
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 10 месяцев назад
My pleasure! When will you take the test?
@user-ll2kf4su5e
@user-ll2kf4su5e 9 месяцев назад
Hi, this is my response. It will be of great help if you can rate this. Thankyou Thanks for the video. My response. The topic of effect social media influencers on consumers is much debatable these years. I believe that people nowadays are addicted to social media, and try to follow most of the things displayed on these platforms. Social media influencers take advantage of these scenarios and can be biased in promoting a product for their financial gains. I understand Emily’s point that the number of such influencers is too high. However, she is missing a critical point that even the number of people using these social media platforms is proportionally higher. These influencers can significantly affect the consumers selection of items for sale and can be hired by companies to increase the sales of their products. People nowadays need someone whom they can trust. To sum up, these are the reasons why I believe that social media influencers can sway consumer behaviors to a great extent
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
Don't use "is much debatable these years." Use something like "is often debated nowadays." "most of the things" is a bit vague. Can you be more specific? I don't know what you mean by "that even the number of people using these social media platforms is proportionally higher." Can you rephrase that? Overall, I think this one would score 20 or 21 points, but I bet you can do better. Keep practicing!
@Scarsight
@Scarsight 8 месяцев назад
I don't get why you are giving everyone a mediocre score of around 20 when your own response is not even that special either. Their minor grammar mistakes resulted in a dramatic score decline, but your "nowadays. Nowadays" response got a perfect score. How's that even fair? Smh
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
Yes, grammatical mistakes result in large score drops. It is that kind of test. You can be angry at me, I guess. It is worth noting that I have given very few people here an estimated score of 20. The average is much higher than that.
@Scarsight
@Scarsight 8 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources Not angry at all. Just confused.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
@@Scarsight check this out: www.toeflresources.com/blog/more-toefl-e-rater-explorations/
@Scarsight
@Scarsight 8 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources Interesting blog, I might pay more attention to my lack of specific vocabulary as well from now on, but how could you tell the difference in the score between the response with commas and the one without them using e-rater? Is this a free AI tool? It seems pretty useful to practice with it for the writing section. Thanks in advance.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 8 месяцев назад
Oh, you don't know about access to the e-rater! Check this out (scroll to the bottom): www.ets.org/toefl/test-takers/ibt/prepare/practice-tests.html I don't really have time to input more answers into the e-rater right now, but you can experiment yourself with and without commas.
@elise6850
@elise6850 6 месяцев назад
Thank you for the video, it's very helpful ! Would you mind checking my essay please? That's my first one. I do not believe social media influencers have changed the way people consumed. As a matter of fact, I think social media influencers are only replacing television adds. Advertisers have noticed that less people watch TV, which means that less people see their adds and they are now asking influencers to promote their products since there are more and more people on social medias. Moreover, I agree with Emily and I believe most people do not buy products just because they saw it on social media and that they think twice before purchasing something. The only people who could do that would be children but they don’t have a credit card, and are, normally, not allowed on those platforms.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 6 месяцев назад
This is pretty good, but there are a few small errors. LIke: "people consumed" (change to "people consume") "less people" ("fewer people" is better) "saw it" (should be "saw them") There are others, but I will leave it at that. I think this answer would score 26 or 27 points. Nice work.
@elise6850
@elise6850 6 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources Thank you very much 😁
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 6 месяцев назад
My pleasure! When will you take the test?
@elise6850
@elise6850 6 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources tomorrow haha, I didn't have a lot of time to prepare
@hinafatima2815
@hinafatima2815 9 месяцев назад
i write 100 percent same answer and got 4 point not 5, you are claiming wrong.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 9 месяцев назад
ETS does adjust the AI now and then. They've likely changed it since I created the video.
@TastyPoison1396
@TastyPoison1396 7 месяцев назад
abOOt
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 7 месяцев назад
What are you talking aboot?
@drSumanBhattaraiVetNepal
@drSumanBhattaraiVetNepal 11 месяцев назад
Title: The Paramount Role of Marketing: Unraveling its Transcendence The topic of marketing has ignited extensive deliberation in contemporary times. In today's fast-paced world, where time is a precious commodity, it is imperative to explore the changes made by influencer whether, can sway the behaviours of consumer by endorsing products or services. In my unwavering conviction, I firmly contend that influencers stands as the catalyst for aligning the changes in consumer's behaviour, exemplified by people's choice of buying the products used by their influencer and have them in advance. People's often love to see those products in their hand, if their influencer had mentioned about it before. Not only did they follow all trendings created by them, they also love being called their fan's, wearing the product's they endorsed. While I comprehend Emily's concerns regarding trust issue, I posit that she overlooks another crucial dimension. Trusting and following them unreasonably is the act that the true fans usually make. Usually, so they don't have trust issues. Instead, they follow them blindly. Subsequently, it becomes patently evident that following them blindly and not having trust issues is of utmost significance, hence warranting meticulous attention and nurturing.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
It looks like you are trying WAY too hard to use fancy words. That isn't helping. Indeed, it makes your writing look unnatural and awkward. I think this one would score about 18 points, but I think you are certainly capable of better. Also, don't give your answer a title.
@drSumanBhattaraiVetNepal
@drSumanBhattaraiVetNepal 11 месяцев назад
@@Toeflresources sir, cant we use fancy words overly or , does it lower our marks using those fancy words.
@Toeflresources
@Toeflresources 11 месяцев назад
@@drSumanBhattaraiVetNepal You can use fancy words. But if you use them poorly (as you did) they will hurt you.
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