LLC you’re doing a commendable job with up loading the stories. Yes, there are things that can be fine tuned, but all in all they’re good. You can’t please everyone. Hell, sometimes I wish the stories were shorter. With that said, I’m the one who was just complimenting you on a couple of 4hr ones. As long as they’re intriguing put them out. Even the sci-fi ones are good and people find away to complain about those. They’re meant to suspend disbelief. Fine tune yourself and keep grinding!!!
I think that a woman feels a certain relaxation that makes it more possible for her to get pregnant with her familiar mate . At least that is how it happened with me . She came over one time after we broke up and we had sex one time and I couldn't believe the child ended up being mine . Last time we ever got back together in a sexual way . LoL !!
Its too much nitty gritty details thats not necessary in the story. Its distracting to the story. Maybe someone can start posting a shortened version. Ill subscribe.
I finished my beer, but not quite all of it, there was still some amber elixir in the bottom of the bottle, not quite an ounce but more than half, and some suds, which some civilizations call foam, and he realized intuitively that the foam would bubble dow to more of the amber ambrosia, although the exact volume was a mystery, perhaps it would, all said and done, amount to a full ounce, or just shy of it
It’s so funny that is Wife have cheated on him throughout the whole relationship and as soon as he find out, he went down to the Black neighborhood and take his aggression out on three black men wow
The edit is botched. The scene with Mona at the funeral got cut then the cops showed up out of nowhere... then the cut went back to Mona and the rest of the funeral... Makes the story choppy.
Good story. Illustrates secveral points. 1. Your greatest strength can become your greatest liability. 2. Do not even pursue the woman that all the guys ogle, do not waste a minute, they are just background noise, and will betray you, 3. You cannot trust the cops 4. The law of the land is corruot to the core.
Ending is bull, they already revieled the paternity earlier in the story and what happened to the sister of the woman that got killed. The story ends at the middle.
The tests showed that Malcolm was not the father, then genetic material from Ian was checked and possibly showed that both of Jessica's children were not Ian's either. He told Jessica that he wanted to have him to father her children, but Jessica fooled around with someone else. That was why he's pissed off! :D
A four hour story that could have been told nicely in about one. OK, so what happened to the corrupt cops, what happened to his lawsuit with Police, what what what happened, too many lose ends.
Thanks for another stem winder, LLC 👍👍 ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️...I agree with the other commenters about the music. It's unnecessary and distracting. Not really a fan of the sound effects either. Hope you're not offended by my unsolicited critiques. Just please keep bringing us these detailed, top-notch extended stories. Thoroughly enjoying them.
I always look forward to your comments everyday. Adding music was an experiment and it failed. It's a learning. There will be more experiments, some will pass some will fail. There will be praises there will be criticism. As for you, i would be more than happy to take your criticism in a positive manner.
Dude great story 👏 i listen to the final this chick got nerve 😤 i was so sad for the guy.im happy it ended how it wad ment.yes its long but ooh omg entertaining 😊. The karma in this 🕺 💃
What kind of looney tune cops arrest and threaten the victims? Did the son have a weapon? Could they not tell who shot the mother and how? They can tell all of that by measuring the crime scene. You can tell where the main character shot from coming in entrance to protect. This should have been settled fast..😅😂😂
Why the loud music towards the last 5-10 minutes towards the end. Its too loud and hard to hear Because your stories does not have any subtitlrs to read, so to listen to against the loud music is pointless. Why add the music. There was never any music before this
Old LLC was a lot better and straight to the point. 40 minutes at most for old stories. Better writing, straight to the point, and no product placement like old radio stories.
I'm so sorry if I seem harsh LLC but nearly 4 hours of a story that's so jumbled and all over the place its hard to follow. Also once again a very rushed and seemingly unfinished ending makes the entire time of the story seem very much wasted so I'm sorry but I'm very disapointed.
It would've been ok then and that's it. The next day I would've hired a private investigator to follow her around and gather evidence because her attitude changed much too quickly. Also I would've stopped talking to her and moved into the guest room. Closed all joint accounts, credit cards etc just for the disrespect.
those poor kids his or not....lol draydel... be done.... dont start what you cant finish,,,LOL....and the kids aren;t his....what a sluoar... and her sister was the trigger woman..... ta-dow
Went too fast at the end .... what a twist ... Oh.... And all the impatient listeners the devil is in the details ..I wouldn't care if the story went on for 7 hours describing the color of their socks worn on such a day as any if it held pertinent information Ian was a shit from the first 5 minutes to 30 years down the road when the bow was tied and package delivered 😊
I’d say it was pretty good…especially given what I paid; yall stop complaining. The husband was never in any danger though; Ian’s story would never stand up. I assume he would admit he owned the revolver and police would see they were unarmed; witnesses would testify how far apart the shots were, he’d need to explain why 2 invited guests with no criminal history suddenly attacked him with deadly force and how it happened that he had a revolver ready to respond, how he didn’t even have a bruise, and most importantly, how would Ian explain why he needed to shoot a woman lying on the ground in the back of the head. All that with the eventual testimony of the son, Ian was always going to jail.
Actually I do not recall the story ever saying where the male DNA came from. It very clearly said where the kids and the mother's came from but never said he used his. The report only stated the sample sent was not the father. So was it his or the other guy's DNA that he sent in ?
Op had his own DNA, his wife's, his daughter's, and his son's DNA. Once he discovered that he was their father nothing else was needed. Another man's DNA would only have been needed if Op was not the father. Think about it!!!
What is going on LLC ? I have supported y'all for detail oriented stories but, dang, this is mind numbing. Just the encounter in the bedroom early on was so far over the top. There wasn't a reason for describing each look from the days from being in school. Seriously we are smart enough to understand a one word description of a look or action. You do not have to go back to their younger days when she remembered seeing that same look. Ok, rant off. This one, as with some others of late, have been frustrating to set through. It's not about the length of the story, its about content.
