I was legitimately curious wether there was another one. I hope he covers it if and when it’s posted. Also, your writing is beyond excellent. Congratulations on a wonderful story. And thank you for sharing it.
@@douge1186 Thank you for the kind words. I have like... I dunno, maybe 1/4th of the next chapter. But real life has been kicking my ass for the past year or so. Pretty sure everyone with a job knows how it feels to get home after a long day and just indulge in whatever escapism is available. I do have a general idea of how the story will go, but it is much more complicated than this one and I'm worried about losing consistency. Magnus' story is pretty self contained and could actually be written in any epoch with very little change. Sacha's story is much more invested into sci fi and the setting (which I'm making up as I go). This means that I have to consider a lot more things when I try to tell the story so things make sense at the end. An example of this is the following paragraph, which is at the beggining of the next lesson: 'Orbiting Burduk - formerly HR7162 -, an F-Type star nearly 50 light years from Earth, it’s a mainly oceanic world with one major continental land mass. Its shape resembles a homonymous island back at the human homeworld, which - following some unspoken naming rule every species seems to adhere to - prompted the explorers who found it to slap ‘new’ on it and call it a day.' HH7162 is an actual F-Type star , and the 50 light year distance is not arbitrary. In order to explain why humanity had not come into contact with other species earlier (in spite of there being multiple FTL civilizations relatively close) I imagined a alactic mandate that established developing species 'own' all systems and resources in a 50LY radius from their homeworld to ensure they get enough area to survive once they join the galactic scene. This information might not even be actually mentioned in the story but it helps the setting to grow organically. As Sacha's history involves a lot more 'common' sci-fi elements, I've had to stop and think about these sort of things every other paragraph. And that's on top of actually figuring out how to tell a compelling story. As a side note, Burduk isn't just a random assortment of letters. It was used in honor of Viktor Burduk, a famous ukranian/russian blacksmith. I always try to put a little extra when naming things, in the same way that the Klepacki from Magnus' story took their name from the famous composer Frank Klepacki. Anyway, long story short, I'll try to provide at least a second lesson... when... well probly when I start spending as much time writing as I do writing comments.
@@deathcallscall3438 XD already looking forward to it. You owe no one an explanation on why it takes so long, you have a talent for stories, and by all means take your time and do it how you want, just a piece of advice from one writer to another, write stories that you enjoy. The fact you put this much thought into these things is amazing on its own, a lot of writers tend to gloss over stuff like that. Have a good day and best wishes and luck to you.
as a very shifty Irish advisor to an Italo-American businessman once said: "A man with a smile and a briefcase can rob more than a hundred men with guns"
"Never break a deal with a human" is pretty solid advice though. A crafty business man with a mean streak is one thing - just imagine if he had gotten _the lawyers_ involved. That would have quickly introduced the galactic community to the Human concept of "existential dread".
This reminds me of the story of when Caesar was taken hostage by pirates, he did the exact same thing as what this guy did, bet it’s based off his story, only difference is, Caesar charmed them into thinking he was a chill dude, when he finally was released after ransom paid, he made good on his promise he made to the pirates, returned with an army and crucified them all, sometimes it isn’t about getting even, sometimes it’s about sending a message, that message being, fvck with us and find out.
this is true, the story was inspired by Caesar's pirate adventure. In his defense though, because the pirates had treated him fairly, Caesar had their throats slit before crucifiying them... a small mercy but one I imagine they were glad to receive.
😂 Never tought to pick this up 40 years after learning about this in Latin class. Thx. Well done. There is some Asimov foundation timevault vibe about this as well.
Manifold is pronounced many-fold in the context that you used the word. This is literally from folding, which has long been equated to dividing and multiplying. It usually by default means multiplied multiple times. Quite often geometrically or exponentially. You pronounced it the way it is pronounced in engineering which is a noun so its pronunciation shifted, though it does refer to components or structures that multiple or divide or have that appearance being parts that take in multiple conduits for some combined purpose.
I have NEVER heard it pronounced many-fold, even when used as an adjective. It's ALWAYS Man-i-fold. Like manifold blessings, or manifold witnesses. Even looking it up online, the UK variant is Man-E-Fold, not Many-fold.
@@colinsmith1495 It comes from saying two fold, three fold, etc. Though fold has somewhat fallen out of favour as it's not clear what a fold is. It's not an exact number. Is it a multiplication, addition, etc? It depends how you fold. If you fold in two then its powers of two, that is, orders of magnitude at base two. Otherwise well it could be anything. A lot of people end up just using it the same as times which is simpler though it also makes it redundant. However, many fold is still useful. Some of the problem comes from normalisation of spelling and the convention of using it as a suffix. Usually it should be two words, like two times, two fold, not twowords, twotimes, twofold. Normally it would be spelt manifold except for the convention of changing y to i when adding a suffix to a word ending in y. If you think about saying it in different contexts it will likely make sense. The size of the enemy fleet increased two fold. The size of the enemy fleet increased many fold. The engineer had forgotten to replace the manifold. It gets more confusing because many fold to manifold has been converted into ever more types of word. In this context, when he is saying that the man's fortunes multiplied manifold, because he's specifically specific the version that is like saying times, that is specifically numeric then it's actually many fold and should in that particular case preserve that format. Otherwise when used as a synonym of a sort for many times it would be like saying manitims instead. I would argue that it's actually a borderline typo in the text that should really say many fold or manyfold rather than manifold. I think there are around half a dozen or more usages for the word manifold which you can see converging with manifest and for varied partly likely owing to it being more obscure than times but for this specific usage where it is being used in place of many times it should still actually sound like many. Though the usage of the word is increasingly messed up. It's often used in place of simply many on its own purely for emphasis.
This might have been my fault... I think I messed up there. How I read through that like 10 times and still forgot to fix it just shows how foggy things get when you've gone over something so much.
@@deathcallscall3438 I think it's quite a natural pitfall. It stood out to me because for a few reasons including a background involving a lot of writing on issues involving numeracy. However, on actually looking up the word manifold and many fold I can see that the English is so all over the place with the evolution of usages of the word and all its various quirks that it's just a mistake waiting and wanting to happen. Mistakes do often become the dominant form. That is disconcerting.
@@peterwalls-qf7ii yet you have enough power to run a time dilation stabiliser and connect to old earth net, are you running on the big hamster wheel to power your phone and steeling wifi from the old guy next door, that's watching The Big Bang Theory 🧐 Cause that's how I got here 🥸
@@peterwalls-qf7ii a human would make the tritium. Like the famous captain Kirk and his crew on more then one occasion. Necessity is the mother of invention. Like what happened to the voyeur crew.
Extract: 'She joined the armed forces after reaching maturity, being appointed to the naval branch. While initially serving as a strike-fighter pilot, her leadership skills saw her handpicked to enter an officer training program. Graduating with flying colors, she continued her career serving in many vessels with distinction. Humanity’s peaceful disposition meant she spent more time in exercises and war games than actual fighting, only seeing action a handful of times against pirates and outlaws. On her fifteenth year in the navy she was transferred to the garrison on New Sakhalin and promoted to Commander, effectively becoming the top ranking officer of all forces defending the planet. She would spend a further five years in this position during which she personally led patrols and defensive actions both in space and on the ground. Having chosen a fellow officer as a mate, she finally retired after twenty years of service in order to marry, giving birth to a daughter the following year.' I'll finish the next story at some point... how far in the future... I can't tell.
FINALLY I've been getting really tired of all the "death world" nonsense. Especially since I understand the flaws in the concept. Only the stories taking place in the lore with the sentient eating Hunters has been done exceptionally well. The other stuff with us as death worlders is basically human propaganda. Oh, and well done Netnarrator. A fine reading as usual.
that was my feeling exactly, I wanted a different perspective from this overused concept of humanity being exceptional. Propaganda is quite accurate I'd say.
To some degree, all /r/hfy is human propaganda. You want it to make you feel good for being human, or else it fails at its genre. What makes a HFY good, beyond basic storytelling, is when that feel-good comes from genuinely human traits in some way. When we **ARE** actually like how the story makes us feel. I've seen some good deathworlder ones, that pass all 3 checks. Hell, I've seen at least one good deathworlder one where it makes us a lot more average.
