I've seen step porn never once have I even thought about or even conceived of the notion of sexual relations with my relatives I think it all boils down to the person and if you're really sick inside. a fantasy is a fantasy but being obsessed with it is different and acting it out
Don't intercut clips from movies and TV shows to act out the things you're talking about. It's an extremely annoying and amateurish technique. I understand you're trying to make the edit more interesting but that's not the way to do it. The footage and script are good. You'll figure something out.
I think it’s more the tone of voice that doesn’t match the clips. It’s like it’s talking about something serious but then comedy mixed in but I think it could be done better
