Fixing Five Nights at Freddy's : The Movie 

I definitely prefer how you made Garrett’s disappearance take place within the pizzeria instead of some random camping site. I also love how you inserted more of the game’s version of Michael’s backstory with him scaring Garrett away with the animatronics, causing him to feel personally guilty for his brother’s disappearance. Your take on William Afton was really good as well! Though, I do have some issues with this rewrite. One of them being that Golden Freddy doesn’t do anything and is only slouched in a corner in one scene. (At least he rides a cab in the official movie.) However, I still think that this rewrite is great in its own way regardless! Great job!

Problems: Not that much screentime of the animatronics trying to get into Mike's office and try to kill him, and the only animatronic attacking for most of the film is Foxy but overall I give it a minus A but if these problems were fixed, then it would be a A plus.

Justice for doug. Aside from the lack of a matpat cameo mention (very important) love this concept.

Scott hire this man for the next movie

This is a good re-write. More animatronics but still a good rewrite. This vid just proved that Scott should have hired fans or at least writers who are fans to adapt it to the screen. This just also shows that a live action FNAF series would have done the story more justice tbh .

This is basically your own version than a rewrite. And I love it

I would've honestly kept the opening scene from the original movie but I do love this rewrite though! Both the original movie and the rewrite are amazing! Hopefully the 2nd movie improves on the horror aspect.

I like what we got. But I love how you made Garret disappear in the pizza place. It just makes the job more meaningful to the film and how Mike scared him using the animatronics which can somewhat parallel to the games.

Whenever someone says ''I fixed something'' 9 times out of ten they broke it further, I'll be the judge of if it was ''fixed''.

Im actually fine with what we got in the movie but I have to admit this script is amazing!

I actually love this i guess one thing I can think of right now is maybe there should be a scene that establishes what the springlocks are so that the spring-trapped scene doesn’t feel random, but that’s a pretty simple part to put in, other than that I think it’s really great, I love Afton’s monologue at the end, man I kinda wanna do a short animation of it lol

I really like this rewrite, especially making garrets kidnaping take place at Freddy's gives mike more of a connection to Freddy's. although if I were to add something in, I would add maybe explain why they never check the suit, although it is one of these thing in fnaf that really difficult to give good explanation for, well unless someone removed the bodies

I’m actually making my own rewrite of this film, this is what’s happening: - The dynamic of Mike and Abby as I think it works. - Vanessa comes into the story after Mike’s friend (Probably gonna write this part out) goes missing after taking the nightshift, theres a scene dedicated to him going up against the robots. - William sneaks around as a shadow like figure, having the robots do his dirty work like luring Abby. - William doesn’t actually get into the spring-lock suit until much later at the end, he reveals himself as himself to Mike, and with an axe too, not a knife. (Vanessa doesn’t do the shooting thing in this script) - When the robots turn on William, he destroys them fnaf 3 style allowing the ghost kids to come after him. - Along the way, he takes Abby and hold her hostage, eventually, they end up in the safe room where William puts the suit on, as the characters confront each other, Abby kicks the suit a little to hard causing the spring-locks to go off, William demise happens. - As a bonus, if I had to write you tubers into this script, MatPat would be a crazy guy, and Cory would still be the Taxi Driver. - Also, paving way for a second film, Henry would appear in a post credit scene, he simple comes in, looks at William then leaves (Still deciding on this) - the bite of 87 is shown in a flashback as one of Mike’s friends explains to him about. - Mike also would know of Fazbears and would be skeptical about the job, not asking it at first, but eventually does for Abby. - the dream sequences do happen, but on a much smaller scale and aren’t as focus on (Gonna change this for sure to include more) Now these are the things I want to incorporate into my script and saying this now, it’s either gonna have one more rewrite, or two, cause I feel like adding some like the dreams Mike had more things and cutting out things like the bit of 87 flashback, what do you think, I’ll watch your vid and even incorporate thing you think would work.

I really like this approach you did with the movie. There are some things that need some work such as Golden Freddy having a more prominent role. But I think it turned out great! But yeah, I’m surprised you saw Abby as a plot device. Looking back at the movie, she kinda does play out like that. I think if Abby had a more defined character arc and had more characterization, her character could have been better. But as it is, I really like Abby’s character.

Bruh, this is INFINITELY better than the original, and I so wish that this was it. So we'll done. I truly think this is what the movie should have been

Currently in the process of rewriting the fnaf script (I'm at page 140 as of writing this), I'm glad to see other people are taking the initiative to fix this overtly disappointing film.

I feel like the lack of Abby's character kinda destroys the tension and sad story of the animatronics also being children

Man, I'm really happy with this video, I've been rewriting the film for a few weeks and I see that a lot of the ideas I had are similar to what's in the video I think this is cool, it shows that the fans have a common sense of what the film should be

This is amazing but i think their 1000% gonna make this movie more understandable in the sequels (i hope so)

They should hire you as the script writer for the second Fnaf movie.

This should’ve been the true fnaf movie, I was very disappointed in the movie we have gotten.

See I would love this movie so much more if they didn’t CUT OUT ALL THE FLASHBACKS FOR NO REASON ( idc I’m still petty Edit: I just realised the animatronics are never stated to smell Edit II: I’ll be real, I like Garrett’s death more than the bite

Afton’s dialouge goes so hard

With refining, this could have potential to be better than what we got for sure!

you gotta prewrite sequels bro this was good

I like a good chunk of this rewrite but there’s a few bits that are just off. Like it’s better than what we got but I can’t put my tongue on why it feels off.

As long as the Matpat cameo stays, then this rewrite is fantastic! Totally different take but I love it!

how does this have such low views? this needs more attention! its a great vid too

I must admit that the springlock scene makes more sense here than the movie and is better

bro you are really underrated hope you get more views

Changing the barbecue to the Fazbears pizzeria is genius

Overall i enjoyed the movie we got. However i do see why people dislike it and i think this video 100% fixes alot of the issues with the film but remember this is scotts first film so dont be too mean harsh to him about it.

This is FANTASTIC. I love this rendition of the story, and I got chills so many times. Even at the loss of Abby, I would've been happy with this as the movie.

That's a really good script, the horror is really done well and I love how Garret was taken in the pizzeria instead of some random forrest in Nebraska. Even though it's good I think you should've given each animatronic more screen time, Foxy was the only one doing attacking while the rest of them just performs. I hope this channel grows big in the future👍

Heres an idea for this that could keep doug him being mikes lawyer whos with mike when hes trying to get a new job

the movie is too much like a normal horror trope like movie without the scary horror vibes.

“Sadly, we’ll have to get rid of Doug…” *Dude’s about to lose a lot of subscribers.*

In all honesty I like this as an idea on its own and would hope for something like it for the sequel, but I don't like the idea of taking abby away and some of the other characters, it would kinda make you feel less and some of those other characters brought likeability to the movie. I would have kept the premise but just changed the scenes like had more animatronic action, jumpscares and recreated the eerie feeling of the game. I would have changed the dream sequences where garret disappeared to freddys though instead of a forest.

This is a stylistic thing, but I feel the movie would have worked better as an indie movie. Not literally, necessarily, but I think the sort of Blair Witch approach, where you make the most out of very little, just like what the original FNAF games did, would have done wonders for capturing the tone of the originals. When I watched the movie, story issues aside, it all felt so... polished and bright, where the original FNAF was rough and dingy, and it completely ruined any attempt at setting tone-unless the intended tone was corporate. (I actually feel like a short film like what Papers Please did would be even better, but obviously that wouldn't ever be on the table.)

“you can’t fix what isn’t broken” Master Oogway jk i literally have no idea who first said that :/

This rewrite is pretty good!

Let this man direct the sequel

I would have kept William putting the mask on himself when he is being Spring locked‚ it's like he's accepting his fate and is ready to become one with the Spring Bonnie suit but I really liked this rewrite.

I think it's lack of spirits thing and jumpscares... but overall is good

The movie is perfect the way it is, this video is just making it even more perfect

This version doesn't make sense. They spent 4 nights at Freddy's not 5.

God, I can’t have any original ideas

This genuinely amazing

2:33 NOOO MY GOAT

You got a point Man you see I’m actually working on the five nights at Freddy’s movie myself, but rated R with a better story and connected to the games. I was wondering if you would like to join the process and you know help if you want 😊

How i would fix the movie without changing its core plot: 1- Add more screentime to William trough MCI flashbacks. 2- Make Vanessa have small dialogues with her father across the movie. 3-Make the plot of the invasion disconnected from Aunt Jane. 4- Remove Aunt Jane completely from the movie. 5- Make Garrett die outside of Fredbear's Diner instead of a random park. 6-Less Cupcake. 7-More creepy and disturbing scenes with the animatronics chasing Mike. 8- Make Vanessa's character better. How i would fix the movie changing its core plot: 1- Mike is an Afton. 2- His little brother Garrett died in the bite of 83. 3- Mike's brother is a ghost following him. 4-William left Mike when he was little. 5- Vanessa's brother is the blonde boy, who is Golden Freddy. 6- Abby doesn't exist. 7- Afton dies after Mike activates the springlocks inside the Springbonnie suit (just like what Charlie did in the first novel).

this would have been fire

I think it would be interesting a fnaf movie about post vietna war, as afton after that war changed him (for worse), to start being abusive with his family, and being a 4ssh0l3 with henry at fredbear's restaurant, to him kill charlie at freddy's at his full madness of having entertainment with death after vietna experiences

When someone hates a long awaited so much and complain so much that they go and try to redo it themselves but fail

Freddy, Bonnie, and Chica did nothing in this rewrite.

if the end you rewrite was the post-credit in the actual movie it would be awesome

Still no bite of 83

Hey man, could we work together on a film in doing?

I was also thinking about making my own version of the movie. Should i make a video in it? It would be my very first video ever

Honestly, it needed Golden Freddy to be somewhere in the plot.

i think its alright but tbh i prefer the main movie i mean that's scotts vision and after these movies he's gonna retire i hate that people complained about it which i can't blame them even i have complains but some complaints were just dumb like spending more time in the office or whatever but if you had that it wouldn't be a movie i do admit sometimes it can be dumb but it's a understandable story for anyone new watching or fans i think the problem with some people is they see the vhs horror version and wish scott would do that but that simply isn't scotts work I've been a fan of this series since the first game and do i complain about the later games? no i just genuinely enjoy the art the series and the music i think it's good i just don't like how some fans are nostalgia blind and just won't let go of the past the movie may not be perfect but it's a fnaf movie and we should appreciate that this series came so far after so many other mascot horror game failed

Would you possibly write a full script, would be fun 👀

19:48 isn't freddy fazbear's soul gabriel???🤨🤨🤨🤨

EEEWWW I DON'T THINK I WANNA EAT SPAGHETTI EVER AGAIN 10:33

This was really well done! I love that this can also be a film for those who don't know what Fnaf is. Really brings fans and horror enthusiasts together. If it isn't a bother (It may or may not come to fruition) Can I use some of your version to make my own version for a future video? I'd of course have you credited appropriately. I'm not sure if it will happen, mostly because the plan is to make a 90 minute - 2 hour audio film. (Ambitious, I know) but I think your version perfectly showcases what Fnaf 1 is. As a fellow Fnaf-Nut, I feel like I should also undertake the task of making a rewrite.

Everything was great, but we need more freddy bonnie and chica. especially cupcake

They sold not adding freddys music box

I also wanted to Recreate the story inspiring by the past Blumhouse horror movies *Work in Progress*

This was no where near as good as the real movie but it’s still cool

I think the fnaf movie shouldn't have even been about the security guard at all. The movie focuses way too much on the gameplay and references, and barely touches the deep lore we all know.

Bro the movie wasn’t bad in my opinion atleast it’s better then watching someone in a office the whole time Also stop saying the movie was bad we was waiting 9 or 7 years for this movie so be greatful we even got one

You need more subs

Should call the movie five nights with foxy fr

This is amazing

THIS IS AMAZING

I did enjoy watching the film but however this version is better

This is the movie I Wanted

I think this would be a really good movie but we could also and some movies re stuff seeing as this video is only 22 minutes long this movie would probably be 41 minutes long so let’s add the phone guy calls so we can make Scott truly apart of this movie we can also add maybe we willam is fasting vennsa him taunting her Vennsa saying something like you have no one in your family but me and micheal you don’t have Elizabeth mom or cc and willam having flashbacks of ccs and Elizabeth’s deaths I also think that it would be cool if mike shed when vennsa came do you have some Luke connection of this place and her explaining how she uses go her and also having 2 and 4 second long flashbacks of her playing games the animantronics perfomeing and her playing in the. ball pit I feel like it would also be fitting if she said in was so cool to have your own dad own the place and also close to the end again him admitting killing all the kids and seeing shadows of them one by one in this case the pattern of when the children get taken in the begin of the movie in the sprites and I think I would keep in the scene where mike is in the hospital with vennsa and the last scene is when mike is done defeating foxy him going into the back room and finding chica standing there she slowlys leans down and sticks out her arm the cupcake launches and leans to the side biteing his leg he chica slowly walks forward and uses the teaser defeating chica but there till the cup cake he uses his flash light hitting him/her in the head knocking the cupcake to the side as he runs away I feel like there should be jump scares too so when mike gets captured by foxy maybe put a jump scare if there already isn’t and may be when Elizabeth gets captured and killed by circus may be put a jump scare and when cc dies maybe put a jump scare of his would coming out of Fred bears mouth and when phone guy dies maybe put a jump scare of of chica grabbing his head while pins him to the floor while Freddy and Bonnie put on a chica suit on him and we see the red lights turn on while we can now see scaws coming closer and closer but when there really close the scaws come as fast as possible

this was way better than the movie we got

Yeah so what if ur version is way better and more scary and mature

Yo, you might not see this comment but I might be making a remake of the fnaf film also rewritten. I was wondering if I could use some of these ideas for that?

Who is the soundtracks you used?

Part 2?

Do what you think the bendy and the ink machine should be like

you aren't really "fixing" the move. you are putting your narrative on it. the right fnaf movie is simply what scott's vision was.

Cool recreation but i dont like the fire idea it should be reserved for fnaf 3.

version spanish pliis

Yeah no, the original was better

Bruh why are people hating on the fnaf movie It was a good film a very good film and have people forgot that it took since 2015 to make and plus fnaf fans wouldn’t hate on the fnaf film (I’m not saying you creator)

You can probably keep Abby and the for scene to make it a bit more fun

Afton still needs to be British

999 person to like your video.

You didn't fix anything so stop being a baby and stop hating the movie

the movie sucked so much that its sad see the name fnaf attached to it

Thank you

I feel that Abby was really important to this film. She is the reason Mike gets the job and was able to communicate with the kids even before Mike took the gig. Also, her drawings were very important in revealing a lot of details. Not so sure I'd call Abby a plot device that means someone or something useless throughout the film. Abby was anything but that however, this is just me. I can't wait for the second FNAF film for the movie timeline. I'd give the film an 8/10.

As much as I enjoyed the actual flick I must admit this serves much better as a movie adaptation of the fnaf story Bravo! Truly a great rewrite

That lead into "I always come back" was perfectly fine. I wish the movie did it this way.

This was really enjoyable, I will say I prefer the ending in the actual movie to yours, and I think having Garrett be Golden Freddy rather than Freddy would have been better as a parallel to Springtrap. Overall, good job.

I personally think that the movie was a solid 7/10 in its own right, but there's definitely things I would have changed. I mean, not having Mike be Williams son in the story removes that complex relationship we've been so fascinated by in the games. Vanessa was meant to take on that role, but it was barely explored.