Hi Lilie, Its late to comment by now, but your videos helped me to gain a 7.5 for writing and an overall of 8., Thank you very much for your methodical and clearly structured lessons!
And I gotta say, the main reason for poor scores in part 1 is mostly BC of the long and repeated sentence structure. Instead of giving a wide range of similarly phrased sentences, you give perfectly to-the-point samples for this part. Truely a savior. Went from 6.0 writing to this, i deeply appreciate your efforts, hope you can extend to other English test courses in the future🎉🎉🎉❤❤❤
Hi Lilie, writing was my weakness while practicing. Your videos helped me get a 7.5 in writing and an overall band score of 8. Thank you so much. Much Love from🇳🇬
I literally never leave a comment and I'd say it's my first comment in my 5yrs+ youtube experience. I greatly appreciate your help Lilie! Your choice of vocabulary for writing always awes me and makes me realize that I have some room for development. I already paid for some kinda online lecture but guess somehow your videos help me more than them lol. Cheers lovely again for sharing those wonderful videos! x
The bar chart compares the proportion of weekly income that households spent on eight types of essential goods and services categories in one particular country in the years 1968 and 2018.
Hi I've just received my test results with an 8 overall and 7 in writing. Had it not been for your work, this might have been impossible. Thank u very much!!!
@@LilieIELTS It is: Some people think there is no need for printed books as everything now can be stored electronically. Others do not agree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The chart illustrates the average percentages of expediture of families in one country weekly in 1968 and in 2018. Overall, majority of spent accounted for food while the minority of money was allocated to fuel and power. An average family in 1968 spent 35% of their income in a week while this rate decreased approximately to 18% which was the sharpest decrease among others. In contrast, housing expenditure experienced one-fifth of the total income in a week and this rate increased almost 20%, compared to food category. Another striking fact that, the money allocated for household goods did not see any change at about 8% in 1968 and 2018. The fuel and power that contributed the least percentage of money allocated for total expenditure saw 10% in 1968 and this rate went down under 5%. Same trend can be seen in clothing and footware category. Regular families spent 10% of their income in clothing and footware and this rate fell by half in 2018.
Hi, Lately i have been watching your videos and i really like it , i have one question regarding this chart ,accounting for 55% number of mature people i would love to hear your suggestion , is it okay to write the 1 body paragraph about the year 1968 and on the second paragraph for year 2018?
hello, thank you for the video. I have a question, please. is it okay to mention the years in the overview? because I saw many videos claiming to not use any data in the overview.
“most notably ,leisure and housing had overtaken food as the largest areas of expenditure” Can someone explain what “overtaken” means there? I think my brain is broken
Why did you say "proportion" without "S" in detailed paragraph 1, and in your last sentence why you said"all saw" wouldn't it understood that the whole categories only have less than 5%
Hi Lilie, I wanna ask about the broad comment rule. a. any of the other categories b. any other category c. any of the remining categories why in the b, the category not using -ies like the other two examples? thankyou
hello, Lilie, I am a big fan of yours. I wonder if you can answer a small question of mine, which is that is it ok to replace "accounted for 35% of the total expenses" with "35% of the weekly expenses". It would be genuinely nice of you to take a few time to answer my question. Thank you, love you.
Hi, it is incorrect to use "total expenses". The percentages of the eight categories do not add up to 100%, which means those families didn't spend all their weekly income. Therefore, total expenditure must be lower than weekly income.
The table chart depicts information regarding the both gender who were specialist in four different enterprise namely retailer, health, tourism manufacturing from 1970to 2010. The data is given in percentage. Overall looking at the graph in detail, it is apparent that manufacturing sector had maximum percentage of men whilst retailer had least. Bp1 it is clearly seen that in1970 the highest men was observed in manufacturing sector by 30/ whilst in 1990 and 2000 there had been declined by 5/ . Only 8/ female had been working in the same field however, it Rose to 3/ after a year. In term of retail sector the percentage of male was stood at more than a half whilst, the figure for women remained constant by making the difference of 2/ . approximately 25/ 23/and 21/ women were interested towards this domain respectively. A slight increase was seen in the number of male in the tourism sector to 13/followed by a sharp dwindle which accounted to be one in ten. A tiny fraction of men were specialist in health sector as opposed to 15/ women. Mam give me band score plz
While speaking about housing and leisure why didn't you mention the year 2018 when you said that those two categories replaced food as the largest expenses, and you did so with the other categories
I've added "2018" to the last sentence of the third paragraph: www.ieltsessaybank.com/the-chart-below-gives-information-about-how-families-in-one-country-spent-their-weekly-income/
@@LilieIELTSthank you for your time, if you may I want to talk about the challenge that you made many days ago I'm in Egypt so I dealed with many problems to try to charge you the $1 it was almost impossible so if you may consider some easier ways to pay the next challenge
Could please tell me the intro I wrote is right the horizontal bar graph depicts the data of a particular country where average family spend there weekly income in different ways between 1968 to 2018
Hi, the graph doesn't provide data of a country. It provides data on weekly income. So it is inaccurate to say "depicts the data of a particular country".
Mem you include year in overall, my instructor told me overall pragraph "not including any year or percentage " is that right or wrong information plz rep 🙏
@@LilieIELTS thank you mam… ☺️☺️ I have been following your writing style for more than 6 days… and i got 6.5 in writing ✍️ task at my institute. I hope I will get this score in my final assessment. 😊 thank you mam..
The average family is a statistical concept, something we read about when journalists and statisticians wish to talk about typical characteristics. It's better than an average family.
For example When starting the second paragraph Can we say In 2018, weekly income on food decreased by almost half to 17%. By contrast, expenditure on leisure and housing rose significantly to about 22% and 29%.Meanwhile, the outlay for household goods remained the same in both years
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The chart gives information about the families’s weekly expenditure in one country between 1968 and 2018. Overall, majority of spent was allocated to food while the fuel and power category contributed the least amount of money among others. Looking into more details, in 1968, 35% of the income was spent for food which was the highest amount of money contributed to weekly spending, while this rate decreased to about 18% in 2018. Also, 10% of money allocated for housing in 1968 and this spending almost got doubled in 2018. Household goods remained constant in fifty-year period at roughly 7.5%. Clothing and footware consisted of 5% of families spending in 1968 and this got doubled in 2018. The other striking fact is that, while the food category contributed the most spending in 1968 at 35%, this category was replaced with leisure spending at about 23% in 2018. Finally, most families allocated their about 8% of their weekly income to transport, and this rate rose to almost 15% in 2018.
The bar chart provides data on the mean weekly expenses of families based on their percentage of income per week in 1986 and 2018. Overall, in 1986 food was the highest expense in one week on average, while any of the other daily necessities were not given much priority. In 2018, however, money spent on leisure took the lead followed by housing. In 1986, 35% of the weekly funds were spent on food, which was the top necessity. Housing, clothing and footware came in second at only 10% of the income used on these commodities. Whilst any of the other items, such as fuel, transport, household and personal goods were all between 6-10% of the income range, with fuel and power being the least important item. In 2018, however, there was a change in the trend, with Leisure being at the top of the list of expenses at 22%, while housing came in second at around 19% of weekly income. Food and Transport were each given 17% and 13% of the funds respectively. Lastly, any of the other items namely, fuel, clothing, household and personal goods were not that popular being only at a range of 4 to 7% of the weekly income.
