Hi Mr Salles:D another great video so I want to say a big thank you:) I came across your youtube channel about 1 month ago, and have literally gone through loads of your videos as I have found them to be exactly what I needed. I had been working at a grade 7, and with your help am hoping to get into the 8/9 region, but our teacher wants PEEE (point, evidence, explain, evaluate) paragraphs, and she is very very assertive on 'zooming in' 'zooming out' and 'evaluation' analysis. Make point, quote,explain, zoom into particular part of quote, explain in detail, and then zoom out and evaluate. I notice that the more i zoom in and analyse, the overall higher mark I get. So since I came across your channel, we have been set 2 homework's over the past few weeks, both asking to write ONE PEEE pargraph from an extract in Macbeth that we are currently annotating. It's not a high mark essay, but just a paragraph, and I was wondering if it was okay if you could have a look at it and give your opinion on what grade you think the paragraphs are at, and if I continued throughout, what grade I'd get overall. The difference is though, I have used a lot more of YOUR techniques, have not necessarily followed PEEE too much, and have focused a lot on context, which for some reason, my teacher simply doesn't give ANY marks for and just puts a question mark by it. I'd be really interested to see if you'd give the same grade that my teacher gave me. Thank you once again:) (we do WJEC Eduqas) 1st Homework ---> How Does Shakespeare show Macbeth Changing in Act1 Scene4? ---> Shakespeare shows a change in Macbeth in scene 4 of Act 1 , by initially presenting him as a great, noble hero for his country who is Duncan's 'worthiest Kinsman', and 'a gentlemen on whom I [Duncan] built an absolute trust', as a result of guiding Duncan's army to victory. Shakespeare's use of the adjective 'worthiest' suggests that Macbeth's actions have led him to the highest of regards by his king, highlighting him as a great warrior. However, this image is quickly contrasted later in the scene when Macbeth reacts horrified to the news of Malcom, becoming the new 'Prince of Cumberland', envisioning the news as a potential barrier to the witches prophecies: 'for in my way it lies.' Macbeth visualizes this as a 'step on which I [Macbeth] must fall down, or else o'erleap,' implying that evil is now engrained in Macbeth, and he must use it to gain the crown. Macbeth wants to 'o'erleap', and step over Malcom, a part of his personality we are yet to have seen, and showing a contrast of a supposedly 'noble' hero. Overall, Macbeth's change in scene4 of Act1 from good to evil foreshadows a downfall of a great man, later in the play. Alternatively, perhaps Macbeth may have shown this change to portray the instant supernatural effect of the witches on Macbeth. They have forced a change in Macbeth which to him is uncontrollable, emphasizing to the reader the power of the witches, aswell as the fear and horror aspect of Macbeth and the witches, which would have been in a Jacobean audience. 2nd Homework ---> How Does Shakespeare present Macbeth's state of mind in his soliloquy at the beginning of Act1 Scene7? ---> Shakespeare introduces the motif of guilt, when portraying Macbeth's early mindset in Act1 Scene7. As Macbeth emphasises Duncan's great qualities, 'great office,' 'virtues,' and 'faculties so meek', Shakespeare's negative illustration of the 'horrid deed' intensifies, impacting Macbeth's morality, and foreshadowing a potential moral failure of once a loyal hero. The positive adjective 'meek' conveys a clear image of a kind, gentle and dedicated ruler who Macbeth pictures in hope to resist his ambition, and persuasion of his wife. This inner-battle involving ambition and what is morally correct implies that Macbeth is confused, showing his mental weakness and , once more, foreshadowing to the reader a loss of endurance, resulting in declining heroism. Furthermore, perhaps Shakespeare outlined Duncan's great qualities to emphasize the pure evil concealed within the witches who possess 'complete' control over Macbeth, highlighting the fear of the supernatural aspect of the witches and their demonic influences which would have been in a theater in a Jacobean environment. Moreover, perhaps Shakespeare may have done this to sympathies to King James IV's convinced and defined approach to witchcraft and dark magic in hope of gaining positive impression with him. Overall, Shakespeare introduces Macbeth's earl guilt and confusion, by associating his deed(to kill a kind, God-chosen king) with increased darkness and evil. There is an obvious difference in both homeworks, homework 2 was done later, and I am learning new things every day. But i was wondering what your opinions are. Sorry if this was long but I would be really interested:) What mark would you give? How to improve? Do you agree with my teacher on how to answer these style of questions? Thanks Mr Salles:D
Thanks, My guess is that English is not your first language, and so you are making really ambitious language choices which don't quite work, or you have tried to show off a vocabulary which you are not familiar with yet. You clearly have top grade understanding of the play. However, you are cramming too many ideas into each sentence, so that I am not always sure what they mean. It is also not helpful to ask you to write in a single paragraph, as that too contains too many ideas, and makes it hard for the reader to follow. My advice is to rewrite it with plainer English. Demarcate with sentences with no more than two ideas in them. Paragraph. You will then spot where you are unclear, and need to add clarity. As you know, teachers will always disagree about marks - and I don't teach WJEC, but I am sure if you applied the mark scheme, you'd have a pretty good idea of your standard! Do post your amended version of a paragraph.
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish Hi Mr Salles, Massive thanks on checking out the two paragraphs, it means a lot. My teacher gave me a 7+ for the first one, and a 7 for the second. I was trying something a bit different though with the use of lots of vocab/terminology (inspired from Live Dash's 100% essay that you posted) but clearly I over-did it, and so it ended up not making sense. My teacher said the exact same thing as you did:) Usually I would write in much simpler English, and I guess where I lacked back then was that I wouldn't do enough analysis. I've only started properly revising English for a month or so though, so these 2 paragraphs are the only ones I've done were I actually had a clue what I was doing even though I was getting higher before lol(7-8 ish.. not much higher, infact pretty much the same) I re-wrote the second essay, and I'm still not 100% sure it's what you're both looking for. It just doesnt feel right, because I didn't analyse a quotation and rather the use of euphemisms, so I didnt 'zoom in' properly like our teacher asks to, and I think I've still over-complicated it massively words wise. But that's okay, I'd still love to see what you think. Here it is: --->How Does Shakespeare present Macbeth’s state of mind in his soliloquy at the beginning of Act 1 Scene 7? Shakespeare presents Macbeth’s state of mind as dis-orientated, confused and nervous as he contemplates over the assassination of Duncan in his soliloquy in Act 1 Scene 7. Following Lady Macbeth’s ideas surrounding usurpation, Macbeth deliberates with himself over whether or not he should act against the divine right of kings, but finds he cannot even say the word ‘murder’. Shakespeare’s use of euphemisms including ‘assassination’, ‘horrid deed’, and ‘intent’ illustrate a character who is attempting to hide his own guilt from himself by covering up, and not clearly stating his considerations of regicide. Furthermore, if Macbeth must resort to references of the word murder and cannot even say it himself, the audience is made to wonder about the massive struggle he would face from killing Duncan and becoming a tyrant, as well as the guilt he would face afterwards. Shakespeare does this to foreshadow a potential loss of moral endurance for Macbeth, leading to mental decline later in the play. This puts him in a role of a tragic hero if his hamartia, his hubristic character, is triggered, and if he chooses treachery despite knowing that what he’s doing is morally wrong. I will send you the next PEEE paragraph we are asked to do as homework, and will try and make it more simple, with increased analysis and evaluation. Hopefully, it will be more what is right. Sorry if this is not much of a change from last time, but what would you give it yourself? Another key point I had no idea about was that Context is NOT assessed in EDUQAS exam board for Macbeth or Inspector Calls (Only in Jekyll Hyde) (they're the books we do). Thanks once again Mr salles, I will send you hopefully a much better version in the near future, but after I spent so long on this one, I would prefer to send you this anyway as well. Also, English is pretty much my first language (since 2/3 years old) :) Thanks anyway, it means a lot hearing your feeback:)
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish I just wrote a new paragraph and it may be a similar problem, I'm not too sure, but I feel a bit more confident on this one. ---> Write about how Shakespeare presents Macbeth as a troubled character: (I talked about the scorpions quote in Act 3 Scene 2) Shakespeare constructs Macbeth, the protagonist of the play, as a troubled character who keeps his plan, the assassination of Banquo, away from his wife. Macbeth’s mind being ‘full of scorpions’ metaphorically portrays his early internal conflict. The animal imagery of ‘scorpions’ illustrates a predatory animal with a deadly sting, which infects Macbeth’s mind with poison. Shakespeare uses this mental infection to foreshadow Macbeth becoming unhinged later in the next scene. Moreover, this early mental infection, after only recently committing regicide, becoming a tyrant, and planning to kill Banquo, foreshadows an overall loss of moral endurance and a mental downfall later in the play, and further, in the denouement. This incorporates Macbeth into the role of a tragic hero by Shakespeare. Furthermore, the adjective ‘full’ conveys an image of Macbeth being crammed with chaotic thoughts, revealing him as a troubled character. Macbeth’s mind is ‘full’ and with any more trouble, his mind would burst, implying that he cannot mentally take anymore. However, the audience knows that there will be more trouble (along with scorpions) coming his way soon, as the scorpions are completely uncontrollable - they’re there without him wanting them to be. Overall, when Macbeth’s hamartia - his hubristic character was triggered by the witches and he committed regicide, Macbeth knew of the trouble he was signing up for, but he didn’t know that it would be this bad. This presents him as a troubled character, and once again, portrays him as a tragic hero. Shakespeare does this to emphasise the brutal consequences that treachery would have resulted in. Would this one be a bit better or is it maybe still too complicated? The bits I think may be too much is the 'moral endurance and a mental downfall' part, and maybe the 'uncontrollable scorpions' part. Also, maybe the 'tragic hero' part, ---> HOW is he a tragic hero? does the explanation make sense? THanks Mr SALLES:DD
'Anymore' refers to time. 'Any more' refers to, for example, "She could not look any more beautiful." OR, "Would you like any more eggs?" There is a difference. Trying to understand this myself. Thank you! 🤗
Hi Sir, I am in a little dilemma :) I REALLY want to get a grade 7 or even 8 in my GCSE English Literature, however, my teacher is good at teaching but TERRIBLE at marking (not that she doesn't know how to, just that she never does it, e.g. I have given her multiple essays to give me feedback on, in the past, only to never see them again). It's not that she doesn't agree to have a look at them, she does, then she promises to give them back to me, but I never end up getting them. I don't want to be rude so I have dropped hints in the past but she ignores or doesn't take them. It may be because of a heavy workload or that she forgets but, unfortunately, I can no longer rely on her :( So I was wondering whether it would be possible for me to send you my essays and get some feedback from you (If you do decide to help me out, I apologise in advance because I know that teachers generally have a lot of work to do already) Also, the essays are handwritten and I do not have the time to type them up so I'm trying to imagine how I would get them to you I look forward to hearing from you Thank you
Sir how would you recommend I learn new vocabulary to add to my work and change some boring words? I keep forgetting new words that I learn (>_< ) Thank you for the video btw! (^_^ )
I know I know, you'd prefer sir to answer, but the way to do this is to read a fiction or even a non-fiction book every night before you go to bed. I love to read Bill Bryson books but its all up to preference. Every night could help you but if not, find some words which are sophisticated enough and relevant to how you write through a thesaurus or a youtube video! Copy them down on post-it notes and-If you have them-stick them up in the house or your bedroom so every day you glance back at them before and after school.
@Mr Salles Teaches English Hi! I’ve just come across your channel after panicking about knowing enough for my English GCSE exam in 2 weeks!! I’ve searched for videos like this for the last few days until I finally found your videos. They have been so helpful, I’m currently binge watching them while eating a bar of chocolate 😂 I just wanted to let you know how helpful these videos are. English has always been my gift until I’ve been doing other exams which need short and sweet answers! I struggled since I’m a bit of a waffler- I finally got used to it but my English skills dropped since I was used to getting straight to the point. Your lessons are helping me improve my writing skills and English again! Thanks a lot 😄
In reference to your above writing of 'It's grill', 'its head', a question. Regarding apostrophe 's' which is correct? Explain please as this is my greatest offence where writing is concerned. I just wing it sometimes, placing one here, and one there...on a wing and a prayer. Thank you. 🤗
If you haven’t already found out the definition (since your message was six months ago.) apostrophes usually replace letters so when i says it’s its ususally referring to ‘it is’ another example of this is ‘don’t’ this will usually mean do not. To summarise this they show possesion over something or replace letters
@@kieranoreilly1102 Thank you. I've this solved now. I've been writing quite a lot in the last year, this has helped. Practice makes perfect. We learn by doing, hey.👍
Please could you possibly do a video on how to use semi colons and colons correctly? I only understand that you can use a semi colon instead of saying because
