Thanks so much!! Can you hire someone to pitch a script, or help you sell it? It's a true Story, About Evel Knievel's Body Guard. Gene could be famous for several things that have been written in a Hollywood movie. He was a motorcycle jumper, heavy weight boxer & more. Gene's father is the subject of THE ODD COUPLE movie. His real Father is Ernie Nevers. Who has fame in 3 Professional Sports. He invented the hook shot; Pitched to Babe Ruth; Saved the NFL & has the oldest 4 NFL records. Ernie was a first inductee to the NFL Hall of Fame. George Clooney made a movie; Leatherheads about him. Gene's GREATEST privilege is about the lives he has saved, even famous people. Just by an inspired thought that came into his head... instead of using his fists. His fists that were going to fight Ali, Joe Frazier, George Formen, and the heavy weights of His day, before Rocky Marciano died in a plane crash. He even had a thought come into his head when he invented the first Skido, and did a stunt in San Francisco. He sent the blue prints to Honda and Kawasaki with no patent. But that voice in his head said "undo your helmet strap", and it kept his head on his body to respond. The movie script starts with his famed WW2 Command Bomber Pilot mother, buzzing him and his brother in a Crop Dusting Plane, bombing them with toilet paper rolls. Gene was the longest touring motorcycle jumper in the world, flying a bike through flames of fire, when there were only 5 motorcycle stuntmen in the world. He's highly regarded in the stunt world. You can watch him speaking to a King, or doing Evel Kneivels Funeral on our channel. Thanks for your advice. Ceci
Still valid tips I think. My friend has brought up the same theme for a short film for probably 10 years. He always describes it the same way, short and simple with a sudden ending. It's like an ear worm that won't go away so we're going for it. It was interesting that this segment mentioned the film "Whiplash" which I thought was brilliant in its delivery. I don't care for jazz fanaticism and disliked practically every character in it including the protagonist but with that film it doesn't matter - I accidentally clicked on it and I was hooked start to finish.
I do believe what's important is whether the Film story or the idea is worthy or not, focusing on other details may shift it to a job interview instead, and that's why we are watching many Low movies nowadays.
I spend hours playing with action/description format. Specifically in regards to general scene description versus characters versus interactions with objects from the description, what order to introduce and how to space it all…. It’s driving me insane
Good tips, but it took you almost two-and-a-half minutes to get to the first example. That's 20% of the entire video devoted to introduction and setup. You can do better than that. Less YOU and more content, please.
There's nothing wrong with the lead-in descriptions as long as you introduce those two characters during interactions. There are many ways to describe a character and one effective method is by having them >show< you who they are by their behaviour, instead of narration >telling< you without that behaviour. You can't ignore the many coloured ways we artists write.
Most people know ZORO, and afraid get bullet proof! THEY MAY HAVE one piece of the PIZZA. I SEE ALOT CRUSH AND BURN. AND TODAY you can do it in AI, or animation. I SEE video that are great. A LOT OF GARBAGE OF COPIES OF A COPY.
Honesty isn't always the best policy. It's objectively weird that you have pen ink on your tongue. What you should have said is that you had a blue raspberry Jolly Rancher just before you made this video because now the only thing on my mind is how you could possibly get ink on your tongue.
Some screenwriting gurus are lunatics. Many classic films have phone conversations in them, as well as recent, high budget ones. The real advice is don't use phone conversations if you can substitute a face-to-face, but gurus always take things to extremes to support some invented dogma they are clinging to. BTW though "EXT." stands for "Exterior" not "External". In line production "External" means supplied-by-third-party footage, "exterior" means outdoors.
The best video / explanation read thus far, after a week of research, try and miss (and almost crying ... lol) thank you for your time, effort and offering: TOTALLY AWESOME!
One key to a good query is the story's concept/logline. If you have a fresh take on a familiar genre, you'll probably get requests to read the script. Got lucky with a script like that and found an agent for it through a cold query and he got it optioned quickly & eventually sold it. So cold queries can work.
I don't care she's famous or not. Because Quentin Tarantino or Others Famous Screen writers whould't did what she did to share knowledge for beginner like us
Thank you very much, man. I must confess that when I saw your dishevelled appearance and you started talking, I thought I was about to waste my time here. But your content is amazing and very useful. And I re-learned to never judge a book by its cover.
It should be noted that this definition of show don't tell is only useful for screenwriters, is not a comprehensive definition of the term, and may in fact have some vague detriments even to the craft of screenwriting. Other ways to say show don't tell: Describe do not explain. Dramatize don't summarize. Don't tell me what to think, give me something to think about.
Very helpful video, thanks. I finished my first SiFi screenplay in 2015 then pitched it to Rat Pack Entertainment and had a professional review/edit. Then life got too busy to focus on it (because I have a very successful career in the Medical Devices industry), however, now I'm dusting it off and getting serious about selling/marketing my screenplay. Thanks for all the advice here!
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Depends on what you're pitching: a TV series or a feature. A feature is traditionally 3 acts (but it could be more depending on your content/plot). A series is obviously longer, but what you were told about 5 paragraphs is part of the structure of a good PowerPoint presentation (which is the best way to present your pitch, I believe) - essentially each slide should be no longer than 5 paragraphs *bullet points) each of 5 words! If you can achieve that, it's concise and to the point.
@@LarryButchins Excellent points... but When doing a Series Bible and you're describing each main character... only using 5 words I think would be hard to do.
How's that an exterior road scene when someone is in the car driving 😂 What about the present continuous tense? All that telling and no showing 😬 And you are saying this is a great scrip? No professional who sees that will read further. It's okay when Judd Appatow does it. It's NOT okay when a no name amateur does it. People who have never sold anything teaching amateurs a bunch of nonsense and they're all buying this bs.
One thing that will help you be good at writing dialogue is being a good listener. Go to the mall, park , subway and listen how people talk, you could even record conversations and analyze them later. Some learn to write good dialogue, some are just gifted.
The “first page” of your presentation was like a bad first page of a script. You rambled on and on about why a first page is important. Why didn’t you simply lead with a first page from one of the scripts? That way you would have got my attention right away. Afterwards you could have followed it up with why it was good, huh?
I'm sorry, but- you are gorgeous. Please. Please, teach me all about screenwriting. Lou's character description comes so far down the page though. My only problem with it
