I traveled to the San Francisco Bay Area to do an event with thriller author Holly Jackson in Corte Madera at Book Passage! I had an amazing time asking Holly all my burning questions!
YT Shorts messed up the audio on desktop, it would seem! On mobile, the levels should be much better. (clearly Shorts is still far behind TT!) Sorry about that. The same content is on Reels and TT if you want to try there!
Something I want to add is that good writers can do these things ON PURPOSE for a desired result. Telling you a character is something, but never actually showing that. (I. e. 'They're so cool and tough') In BAD writing, it makes it hard to suspend your disbelief and enjoy the story. In GOOD writing, this creates a fraud. Ex. Heimerdinger from Arcane. Told he's incredibly wise, yet he's wildly out of tune with the present day and the problems of his city. A character saying what another is feeling. In BAD writing this feels flat and boring. In GOOD writing, this can show what one character assumes about another, especially if it's negative assumptions. It can also show insecurity in the POV character, like being overapologetic when someone reacts badly to whatever the context is/being overly intune with others' facial expressions and body language to gauge what they think. In the example, Danielle ASSUMES Clio is going to (idk, be a snobby rich kid?) when she pulls out her laptop and is said to show discomfort. Because Danielle assumes someone with that laptop is a snobby rich kid. Depending on whose prespective the example was from, emphasizing WHY there's discomfort/why the pov character THINKS there's discomfort could help fix that sentence about 'probably she's uncomfortable'